| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 12:55:04 PM | I was curious as to how my profile might appear to viewers. I don't get many emails (like a 1 or 2 a week) and nobody replies to the ones I send.
I'm unsure whats wrong with my profile, if anything. I think it might be that i'm incredibly straight forward.
Is there anything I can improve on? | |
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| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 1:26:52 PM | Hi TS, not bad for a first try, but there is definitely room for improvement, here are some things to ponder.
So, I think I'll put it all out there, straight up.
We can see it is straight up when we read it, no need to tell us this.
I'm not very girly. I don't like shopping, or talking on the phone. I don't dress like a tramp. I use to work in construction, so I still have my farmer's tan that I don't care to even out. The only seriously girly thing about me is that I have all the parts, and I like the color pink.
I'm incredibly politically incorrect, and I don't care to censor myself for anyone. I also swear a lot, like, a sailor. I am Republican, and I don't care to talk about politics.
This is WHO you are, and is MUCH more inportant to your success than WHAT you like to do. Move it up to the top paragraph.
I am not looking for sex. Please don't message me if you just want sex.
Trust me, this is having EXACTLY the opposite effect than you think it is having, it is harmful in several ways, lose it ASAP.
Also, since the height thing doesn't go below 5ft, I am 4'10''. Since I'm sure people will be curious.
Move it to the top paragraph.
So, generally speaking, movies are out.
This section is for what you WANT to do, not for what you DON'T want to do. Let that for after contact has been made.
The biggest thing missing is your description of the uniqe personality traits you find most attractive in a man. It would benefit you greatly to add that.
Best wishes
OFMM | |
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| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 1:36:31 PM | Sadly, and I hate to say it, but I think you turn off guys by putting out there that you aren't looking for sex. The good news? Your weeding out a lot of douchebags by putting it upfront like that. Good for you.
You are an attractive girl. So it ain't your picture.
I felt like when I was reading it, you spent a lot of time describing what you are not and what you don't do. Try going into more depth about who you are and what you do. As for WoW, as a gamer myself, is that a hobby or something that really defines you. ie are you really looking for an in game love interest. If it is a hobby like gaming is to me, then give it a mention but don't put it on the front page so to speak.
Hope this helps and best wishes.
Michael | |
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| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 1:48:15 PM | I understand what you're both saying.
But I have a difficult time describe "who" exactly I am and what I'm about. I think thats because on other dating sites, when I've tried to explain, I'd come off as boring, or uninteresting. I'm not quite sure what to write. I know it's suppose to be my hobbies and stuff, but i've already listed those. I think it's just because I'm boring.
But, I'm just not terribly sure what to write that says who I am. | |
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| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 1:48:43 PM | i recon it would not hurt to be a little more girly, or at least more neutral,
it sort of seamed like you were yelling at me reasons to not like you.i am incredibly strait forward myself. but you still want to be atractive. being strait forward is a good thing. It will be obvious to people when they talk to you.
You talk about it it like you are giving a warning.
a full body shot would be cool.
voting republican is a bit of a turn off for most of the country.
i dont like this part."I am not looking for sex. Please don't message me if you just want sex"
the please dont mesage me if you just want sex part ,is sort of allrite,but it is still useless that aint stoping anyone.
its realy the first part that sucks. I am not looking for sex part. you dont realy want to put that out there like that,when your looking for a boy friend.sure your a lady and not a whore but still that should go without saying.
and there are more efective ways of weeding those offers out.like good by click.
here i have found this unfemenin,over weight,non sexual ,hard nosed ,foul mouthed,republican $#%$#,who never knew how to party.
sighn me up for that.woohoo 
you see what i am saying. you might want to make it apealing to more people of the oposite sex and to people in general.
its like your profile was craming reasons down my throat not to like you. and i am a hard @ss myself but even us @ssholes have a soft side for that special someone.I would like to know that you have the potential to be a sexy little sweety pie for me.thats what a girl friend is for.
you are probably pretty cool,just show it | |
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| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 1:57:19 PM | I write that I'm republican because of what you said. I don't care what stance you take politically, just so long as you don't shove it down my throat. There's a reason I don't talk about politics. I would prefer people who judge me based on my political ideals to not contact me. I've had issues with it in the past, and I still do. I get verbally harassed on a daily basis at work because of it.
I'm no completely unfeminine. I'm into dance, opera and stuff like that, which I've mentioned in my profile.
I think you're taking my profile a bit to the extreme.
And I'm not, nor will I ever be, anyone's "sexy little sweety pie". I am a person, and I deserve to be treated like such. | |
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| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 2:20:44 PM |
But, I'm just not terribly sure what to write that says who I am.
I think you have actually done a better job than many of describing yourself, although I am sure there is more to your personality than you have told us.
I think the most important thing right now for your success is to describe HIM.
I will try to explain why this is so important. We get very weary of writing notes when we know before we ever send them that it is very likely at least 90% will be deleted, or worse yet, unread deleted.
If you can describe the man you seek in such a way that he thinks to himself after reading your description, she is looking for ME, your chances of getting mail go up expedentually. Reason being, he becomes more confident that you will reply.
Have you seen the profile tips ot the topof the page on this forum? They are very helpful.
Hang with us, we will help you get there if you are willing to put in the time.
Best wishes
OFMM | |
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| A no non-sense profile
Posted: 12/17/2008 2:44:08 PM | | I actually like the profile, but I'm 100% sure you could find a much better photo of yourself, or get a friend to take some new ones. | |
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