| I give up!
Posted: 1/20/2009 9:46:00 PM | I need some assistance here, please. The whole joke thing on my profile isn't working. I probably need some better pictures. I'm pretty lost when it comes to this thing right now. I am approaching 40 and have just lost touch with the whole "how do I pick up a woman"
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Posted: 1/20/2009 10:07:04 PM | | Loose the picture of your car. And swap the pictures of you have for pictures of you by yourself. | |
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Posted: 1/20/2009 10:10:48 PM | | I liked your profile it seems good you look good for your age, so i dont think its the pictures. | |
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Posted: 1/20/2009 10:11:59 PM | Dude!! What was that!?! It was not a profile. Now if you made those up then you are a funny guy, but I am guessing that you did not make them up.
Look, this is supposed to be a profile that let's women get an idea of who you are. You have a huge long profile that tells s exactly two things... well three things.
1. That you have two kids, but who cares at this point? You are just tryingto get a first date so it's not the thing to put at the top of your profile.
2. That you love to fix cars.
and 3. That you have no idea what to put down here and that you have no idea when to stop. That was just waaayyyy too much crap that has nothing to do with you. While some of it was funny, it is not the sort of humour that is being looked for. The style of humour that people are looking for is the ability to be funny or make light of a situation, not recite a one liner that they read one the internet endlessly. There is nothing wrong with one liners, but you left what? 25-30 of them in a row.
You seem to have gotten lost. You went from telling us about your kids to the endless one liners. Erase them all. Get back on track. Write about you. What do you like to do? How do you like to spend your time? What traits and qualities do you find attractive in a woman?
Stick to those and throw in a little bit of humour in the profile. No more than three jokes, okay! | |
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Posted: 1/20/2009 10:13:50 PM | Your profile looks good i dont think its the pictures, and you look good for turning 40.
Just have to wait a while and sooner or later, someone will bite just takes time.
Just be yourself and you'll be able to "pick up a woman". | |
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Posted: 1/20/2009 10:30:15 PM | This is an easy fix.
Step one. Change "Friends" to "Dating"
Step two. Delete half of the list, maybe even 3/4's. (Keep only your favourite top 10)
I love the 'massage' line - that's one of my favourite typos! Try it this way for a while and see what happens. Of course, you ARE emailing ladies that interest you, right???
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Posted: 1/21/2009 1:12:37 AM | Yes, I am emailing ladies that interest me.
Changed Friends to Dating. Deleted part of the list.
I decided to type up "a day in the life of...me" and put it in there.
Yes, I am a pretty good writer and I think I'm funny. What about everyone else?
Thanks for all the input! | |
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Posted: 1/21/2009 1:24:54 AM | ????
Yeah, you are sorta funny, but you still missed the point. Everything that I said originally still stands. While your profile was engaging all that it really is was a creative writing project. You still say nothing about the guy that a woman would date, or encourage her to date.
People that do not know you, do not want to be subjected to a bible chapter of your writing where you don't actualy share what they are here to do... get to know a guy a little bit to see if he is worth dating. Half of yourprofile is still a silly list that you did not right and tells nothing about you. You are shooting yourself in the foot. That list is a mistake. | |
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Posted: 1/21/2009 10:01:20 AM | Ok.....
1 - put up a close up shot (2nd pic) as your main pic.
Yes, I agree w/ some of the posters here that for someone going on 40, you look GREAT! Whatever you're doing, keep it up!
The morning routine is a bit much.... it's almost like you're trying to fill up space on your profile.. do you think that the profile needs to be long and worded in order to attract? (That's not sarcasm, that's an honest question). Think of it like this... if you put everything on the profile, what's left to talk about over coffee? I know you're going for originality here to stand out over the other mundane same ole same ole profiles...but it's almost a little TOO much.
Get rid of the step by step description of your routine. The peeing on the toilet seat thing... WAY too much information!! I realize you were going for humor but the only ones who are going to get that are other guys... The pics you have up are fine...but I would add a couple more of just YOU. I like the pics of you and your kids..shows you can have fun which is a good thing. But for the first couple of months (at least I would hope) women are going to be dating YOU... not the family...
Drop the jokes down to just a couple. | |
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Posted: 1/21/2009 10:38:44 AM | I thought your rewrite was funny and shows personality (maybe a bit too much), but I enjoyed reading it.
I would suggest putting your second photo as your main photo and get rid of the red car photo (it suggest mid-life crisis).
Good Luck!! | |
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Posted: 1/21/2009 12:01:12 PM | | I shortened up the "a day in the life of" section and removed the latter half, as suggested. I broke up my broken thoughts with random quotes. I removed the entire list, it was getting old, anyway. I changed my pic over to the headshot with Monet in the background. Any better? | |
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