| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/3/2009 7:06:49 PM | Hi guys,
I recently joined this site. Naturally, I have been fooling around with my profile a bit. I am interested in getting some feedback so please let me know what you think! Thanks...
edit - I'm not sure if this thing is posting... something about 200 words... here are a few more words just to make sure. Hopefully not a double post! | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/3/2009 7:23:33 PM | | I'm kind of stumped on this one. You seem like the kind of guy women are looking for. Your profile is written well, is slightly humorous. Beats the heck out of me. You need a woman's help here bud! Must be something really subtle that is throwing you off. | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/3/2009 8:30:52 PM | It's the "Hangout". You can do that with your guy friends. If you want a girlfriend, change this to Dating.
You should also put in something general for your profession - 'blank' space in these times implies you're unemployed, which is usually not a good thing..... Even if you are between jobs, put the type of work you'd normally do.
You've entirely missed the Interests field. Find this in profile/edit and put at least 6 things in there. (do not put Cuddling)
The profile feels cut off - like you stopped half way through. You mention in passing fishing and cycling - where? Expand on these ideas giving each at least one sentence.
Your final paragraph should describe who you hope to meet here in positive language.
What is her personality like? What is her energy level like? Lifestyle/Fitness? Do you have a dealbreaking preference for height? Hair colour?
Try a few tweaks and see how it goes. Good luck! | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/4/2009 6:39:56 AM | Hey guys, thanks for the reviews. "You go first" - I think you have some good suggestions there... I will update accordingly! Oh, and lol @ the "cuddling" line... man what the hell am I gonna put in there then??! ;)
Alright this subforum gets a lot of traffic but if you have a second to do a review I'd appreciate it! | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/4/2009 7:32:57 AM | Wow! What a difference! This is really good now.
.. but scientist?! That's cool Why not throw in a line about field you're in? | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/4/2009 7:43:02 AM | Your profile looks awesome but I would definitely remove this line:
I have appreciated all kinds of women over the years.
Just doesn't sound right, plus gives the illusion that you have had a little bit TOO much experience with women. | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/4/2009 7:59:50 AM | xvermonter - hah, point taken! I'll take that out...
and you go first - thanks for the help, I couldn't have done it without you.
I wasn't necesasrily getting bad results before, but I wanted to get a few opinions... and I'm glad I did. If anyone else has suggestions I'd be happy to hear them. | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/4/2009 11:27:39 AM | I was hoping someone would have pickup up on the pictures, so here goes. I'm not being cruel, its just you need to make some new friends who know something about photography.
In two of the pictures, you're drinking beer it appears. All of the pictures have really bad lighting and in none of the pictures are you actually doing anything interesting.
In your interests, which are good now because they are finally listed, it says you bike, play guitar, sail, swim and travel. Get some pictures of yourself doing some of those things and make sure whoever is taking the pictures read a couple of pages on photography (its all about lighting). Do that and it'll give women a little flavor of what its like to hang out with you in actual reality, not in her minds image of you. It worked for me, and I'm a short undereducated slacker. Pictures are worth a thousand words. Make those words work for you. | |
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| Profile Review Please!
Posted: 5/4/2009 12:23:58 PM | | Excellent advice... I'll try to get some better/cooler pictures. Thanks. | |
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