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Posted: 6/5/2009 5:30:03 AM | I'd like my profile reveiwed please, and tips would be awsome. My thanks, my fellow fishermen.
It seems that I never get contacted. Am I doing something wrong? Do my pics belong in the Phantom of the Opera Hall of Fame? Is it wrong to be me? Or is it simply that age old gambit of being picked last for kick ball? If I knew I wouldn't be posting now would I? I try to be blunt and honest about myself. I know I tend to have a quarky at best sense of humor. I try not to be demanding but inviting instead. And I try not to bloat my profile up, I think that it makes me seem egotistical and narsassitic, I hate that when I see it and figure, others must as well. So come on, give it to me. I can take it. Give me the truth. Thats all I ask.
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Posted: 6/5/2009 5:56:40 AM | | You have this big huge paragraph in the middle of your profile that makes it hard to read - it kind of gives me a headache just looking at it. Maybe you can break that off into smaller paragraphs or something? | |
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Posted: 10/15/2009 11:24:49 AM | | OK, I have no idea what to put in a profile. Could somebody take a look and let me know what they think. I don't want to tailor it to fit other people, I want it to be a repristaion of me. | |
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Posted: 10/15/2009 11:42:16 AM | You claim to be intelligent, yet you can't run a piece of prose through spell check. You start off misspelling your job and end with "Did I mention that I'm a hopless romantic? (grins)
First DateShhhh, I like it to be a suprise. " You get virtually every word over 5 letters wrong.
You say you're an atypical guy, then attempt to prove it by talking about typical guy stuff. You don't know what atypical means.
Your pics show you in the worst light possible - they're all crap. Head outside with a friend and a camera.
You come across as boring, conceited (and delusional about it), stubborn, long winded..... Delete everything; start again with the goal of trying to create a profile that would attract a young woman. | |
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Posted: 10/15/2009 12:59:32 PM | Long isn’t necessarily bad if you have something to say and say it in a way that holds interest, so I too will go against Tracyannk’a opinion here too. Your profile however is very boring and draws no desire to read further than the first few small paragraphs.
Your pictures need serious work, it’s the first thing seen when someone checks your profile and very few are going to get past your main pic. The first two have to go! You look like a young stoned John Candy! | |
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Posted: 10/15/2009 1:08:11 PM | Op your page is a complete and total mess. You are a youngling so I am gonna chalk it up to pure youngling (ness)
First off, your pictures are not doing us any favors and the text above them is not helping at all either. Pictures are number 1 for online dating.
The first thing a lady reads about you is not so good. Your opening few lines are a close number 2 to online dating. Yours is not so good either.
Your page text is a train wreck that is doing more to make sure you never get a email, let alone a date. Just delete the whole mess, do some research and try to give a potential date a *snapshot of you* writing a novel that pays tribute to you, is negative and a lot of other things does not help our cause any.
Get better pictures
Think of what makes you ----- you and make it the first thing a reader reads about you.
write 3 decent paragraphs about you, your job, your goings on, hobbies.
A final paragraph describing the type of lady you would like to meet/date
Nothing negative!
Do not Ramble, complain and such
I am not a spelling Nazi, but you should at least make a effort with this.
Fer Gawds sake get the *cuddling crap off your favorites* Coming from a man it sounds ridiculous. Keep the cuddle talk to yourself, lets get a contact and maybe a date before we start with the long moonlight walks and cuddling on the couch nonsense.
Cuddling is something women put on thier pages. You need to re-read the MAN memo you got when you first signed up.
Now I have asked this a thousand times and have still not gotten a answer ----- What the h@ll is a hopeless romantic? ---------- If you can sell it, I just may buy it, but I doubt the ladies will take to it.
Do not attempt to be Ernest Hemingway. And on the same token Do not try and write your page in 5 minutes. TAKE YOUR TIME AND THINK ABOUT IT.
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Posted: 10/16/2009 2:23:04 AM | I saw what you all put up for me to go over in my profile. Many thanks, I've reset it and started from scratch for everything but the Pics, those will have to come later. To those proud few who in their generous criticisms proved that they could be blunt and as long winded as myself.
Now I spent the day thinking about what you guys said. And I relized that I am me and I have an over inflated veiw of myself at times. Thanks for putting a few holes in my head for me. To the gentalman with the comment that every fith word or so was misspelt, 7 words was spelt incorrectly in my entire document. So I jsut wnaetd you to konw taht the way the hmuan biran wroks, taht any wrod fuor ltertes or mroe hvae the rghit lteters at the bgegnig and end, it deos not mtater in waht odrer the ohetr ltteers are the biarn tneds to see tehm as they should. I type very fast and have to retype most of what I type to begin with and add words here and there so that they have the proper syntax and such, if I misspell a word here or there, does it really matter?
To those who think I ramble. Yes I admit that. I tend to go on and on. Also what you see as complaining some of it really isn't, but my attempt at and conversation. Also I am stubborn, and you get to deal with it. (to those with NO sense of humor, that was a joke)
Again everybody, thanks for all the help. I really do appricate it. This will be my last post here, so get apeeking at my redone profile and give me your final comments. | |
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Posted: 10/16/2009 2:29:07 AM | I peeked..NO!
Get rid of the "blow that" comment..and please change your picture..you will never get responses with that one..and yet..I can tell that you are cute..so..fix the pic.. | |
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Posted: 10/16/2009 2:34:11 AM |
repristaion
A what??
I think that's meant to be 'representation'.
It's ok for YOU to express yourself as you do in your profile. But is the profile for you or for the reader??
Put yourself in the reader's perspective and ask yourself what a potential dater would learn...whether she'd take it one step further to contact you (especially with the thumbnail of your profile pic making it look like you have a gap in your teeth)..
You've only got one chance to lure the fish.. a cryptic bait isn't going to cut it. Sorry. | |
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Posted: 10/18/2009 3:39:51 AM | AHHHHH!!!! OK, you picture Nazis. I'M WORKING ON IT. I don't currently own a camera, nor do I have quick and ready access to one, if you would read the CAPTIONS with the pics that I have now, you would know that new pics are coming. The ones that I have up now, are the best I have. Period.
Seriously, you guys are checking my spelling in here? Please read my previous post. My brain works faster then my fingers... cut me some slack, I fix them when I catch them. I tend to miss some words I'm sorry, I'm a speed reader.
Now before you all FREAK out and start saying how ungrateful I am for all your work, please know that I'm very thankful. BUT please, but I am no more perfect than you. So if what I say in MY profile upsets you, or you do not like my pictures, I'm sorry. I can no more change myself overnight then you could think yourself into turning bright neon green. I'm diffrent then you, I know. I don't fit the norm, I know. I don't care. I'll say it again, I am who I am.
And thank you. Really. I'm really begining to like how my profile is coming. And thats what is important, no? And I don't think I would have gotten it there without your guys help, so... thanks. | |
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Posted: 10/18/2009 5:34:19 AM | I find it interesting how many people say that they do not own or have access to a digital camera. They are so cheap these days that that excuse really falls flat!! If you can not afford $30 for a camera, how can you afford to date?
The caption on your primary photo says “As my other pics are old, I decided to take one with the webcam, so you know more what I look like now.” The problem with that statement is that the photo is totally black from the checks and nose on up and you are covering half of the rest of your face with your hand. The question comes up, what are you trying to hide??
As to the body of your profile, spelling and grammar do make a difference and most if not all word processing programs take care of that for you. In your case it makes very little difference because, although you have lots of words in it, it says nothing about you except that you do not know what to say.
Check the profile writing tips at the top of the first page. What you have now is not likely to produce results for you. | |
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Posted: 10/18/2009 5:51:17 AM | The 3-4 paragraph rule only exists for people that type out lame profiles, and only because reading more than that makes one depressed.
OP:
Hmmm... I sit here looking at the screen and the minutes tick by as I wonder what I should put here.
Why would anyone want to read any further after this?
So you don't know what to say? Okay, next profile.
Delete.
People say that I need my interests
No one reading your profile is going to care what other people told you to do.
(bla bla bla) but I'm interested in lots of things and it would be a very long long list. They say that I should put my hobbies as well, again that is a long list as I have eclectic tastes, the same goes for music. These very same people say that what I put here should be simple and short for your convenience. I just don't know how to do that.
So your entire introductory paragraph about yourself was one giant b!tch session? You REALLY think this is going to work?
I'm sorry but I'm not going to tailor this profile to fit the people reading it.
Yeah, Friday nights alone with Mr Hand are a lot more fun.
Do you plan on dating yourself? Tailor your profile to your audience, not yourself.
It is what it is, as I am who I am, you are who you are, these are not easy things to change. I can't describe myself with words on a page. I'm sure that is true for most of you. I would compare summing yourself up in a few paragraphs like describing the beauty of an exceptional sunset in twenty words or less, just saying it is beautiful would not do it justice.
Great, so your 2nd paragraph is another giant whine session. You make all these BS excuses about why you don't do this, why you wont do that, how about you say at least SOMETHING other than what you're not going to do.
All we can do is hope that we put something here in this little section that it intrests somebody else.
You have posted......NOTHING about yourself. You haven't said anyhting at all really.
Now I wish I could tell you everything about me here, the good and the bad. But I can not.
Liar. You're just too lazy to freaking figure yourself out and put it down into an interesting profile
Now I hope that I hear from you soon.
Why? You gave no reason for someone to talk to you. You gave no useful information at all. | |
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Posted: 10/18/2009 7:16:52 AM | Although seekadventure's post was rather abrasive and cold cut, I'm going to have to agree with him.
Your ego is amazing man. Either you have this twisted concept of what woman think is attractive... after all that is what you are trying to project from your page... or you are completely delusional. Ask yourself: "Would i want to read my own page were it not mine?"
I wouldn't want to read yours again.
I think that a couple of posts in this thread upset you and you passively retaliated to said posts through your about me section... WHY? No, i really want to know, what was the point to your first paragraph? Was it a thesis statement to your absolutely oppressive, and boring personality?
Right about now you should be saying "No Jackass! That was not the point at all!"
Well than what is the point? Sex! right? Maybe not... You tell me... THROUGH YOUR PAGE. That my friend is the point... get it?
I say scrap it and this time think to yourself all the while you are witting "Would i want to read this if it were not about the wonderful guy that is me?" But i mean really... consider the extrinsic rewards that are waiting for you if you could just bring the self indulgent dribble down to a minimum. | |
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Posted: 10/18/2009 7:31:13 AM |
Although seekadventure's post was rather abrasive and cold cut
Abrasive, cold, ....direct, to the point, honest, realistic... | |
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Posted: 10/18/2009 10:56:51 AM | Your entire profile is whining about having to draft a profile. How could that work? There are zero women searching for negativity. If there were there'd be a checkbox like "Thin", "makes more than 75k", "asian"..."extreme negativity".
Why not just say what you did today, stay positive. Don't say anything about how hard it was to write the profile or how you refuse to be controlled by other people's expectations that you say something about yourself. What's that all about?
If you've sent a letter to a relative maybe see what you have that's positive in there and rework it to a profile. | |
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Posted: 10/19/2009 12:51:59 AM | Cameras... just not high on my wishlists. Sorry, thats why I don't have one, not becuase I can't afford one.
Alright keep those posts coming.
To those of you who think I'm being negitive, I'm really not trying to be and I wasn't trying to passivly attack anybody. I was trying to go for insperation. I see the world diffrently then you, perhaps even a little warped, but I don't have a big ego. If you think I'm egotistical then take a look at some of those other guys out there, the ones who jump up and say I'm the perfect ladies man, I'm the one for you, I'll rock your world, I'm the best you will ever have, yadda yadda freaking yadda. I make no promises, for I can't be certain that I can keep those promises. I'm trying to be honest about myself and you don't like my way of doing that, too freaking bad. If you can some up your ENTIRE life in a few paragraphs, then perhaps you have been leading an unexceptional and uneventful life.
I try not to bloat up my profile to make me seem better then I really am, so when that you get to know me that there is less to me then there seemed, and thats annoying and disappointing. Not to mention not fair. I'm really not going to tailor my profile to make others like me, they should like me for WHO I am, not WHAT I make of myself. Now if you going to give me a harsh review on my profile, then good, but give me something to work with, not just that you think my pics suck and that I am being negitive. If you don't like what I say in return, then thats just to bad.
Now, what I take and use from your posts, I use in a diffrent fashion then you would, as I say time and time again, I am who I am, you are who you are. Apprently This little saying needs to be cleared up. Simply put, we are diffrent. What makes you you, is diffrent then what makes me me. If we've all lead the same exact lives, then getting along would be EASY. I don't want EASY, for thats no challange, nothing gets learned, and it loses its appeal quickly. I wish that could I'd record my profile using my voice, so that the emotion that I feel when I write is easier to feel and understand. I could write my whole profile in verse or some form of poetry, but seriously, if that doesn't come across as egotistical...
Now look, I know that I'm rambling and ranting here, but look at it from MY perspective. I spend hours after work, pouring over what to say, typing for hours, retyping, editing, combing, and fixing. Then I sit there and stare at it for a while, asking myself, is this right, does this make sense, is this who I am. Then I have my five minute panic sessions wondering if I look like a dork, sound like a dork, is this a shot in the dark. Then I get up and go away for a few minutes and think about something else. When I come back, I read aloud what I just spent the last 2 hours working on. (This is now habit becuase of this post I started, it has helped thanks guys) I fix more things, and then after about 2 1/2 hours of work, I save and set it free into the world. SO now you know the prossess. No more comments please about how I spend 5 minutes writing crap, that I'm being negitive about myself, that I need to put more effort into this. Do you spend that amount of time going over the things you do on here. Even after I'm finished with this post, I'll do the same thing.
Now if you don't like what I've said here, don't rightly care. If want to comment on anything I've said in a constructive criticizing manner thats fine, but give me ideas, new ways of thinking, and new ways to deliver. Don't tell me that its negitive, that I don't put serious effort into it, and don't tell me that my pics aren't great. Now I admit that my profile is better, but not by much, I feel that it could be even better. But I'm not going for perfection here, if I wanted that I'd hire somebody to do it for me. That would be EASY wouldn't it?
Now, bring it on.
** I wanted to thank the gentalman that posted before me, thank you. I appreciate the ideas. | |
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Posted: 10/19/2009 1:41:26 AM | You ask for a review to help your profile and go on to state “It seems that I never get contacted. Am I doing something wrong? Do my pics belong in the Phantom of the Opera Hall of Fame?”
You have gotten lots of good advice but as near as I can tell you have taken none of it and indicate that you do not plan to take any of it. You say that you spend hours working on it but it looks the same as when you originally requested help. You still say nothing about yourself except that you do not know what to say. That tends to indicate that there is nothing to you. Are you an empty shell?
If you keep doing the same thing, you should expect the same result. In this case that means NO DATES!! | |
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Posted: 10/19/2009 2:23:24 AM |
I'm really not going to tailor my profile to make others like me, they should like me for WHO I am
Have you ever gone to a car dealership? You know how the car salesman knows everything about his product and can start spewing out information to convince you to buy it?
You don't give any information about yourself. Zero. So how is someone supposed to know who you are in order to like you? There's nothing there to like! That's why you'll never make a sale. | |
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Posted: 10/19/2009 4:38:04 AM | Hey Seekadventure25
Doing a great job here, now if only people take your advice when they've asked for it. I think your community service has been fulfilled somewhat, lucky for me, I don't have to read through the dribble that men writes on their profile. All your advice makes a lot of sense and soooooooooo obvious (to some).
Most women aren't going to waste time on crappy profiles. Harsh, superficial but true.
I don't think some men realise that some women get about 50-100 emails a day..so it has to be something that stands out!
And no..we're not going to take you as you are, incorrect spelling and all, unless you have nice abs, but then we probably think you're a pervert. Just can't win but don't give up hope. | |
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Posted: 10/21/2009 6:36:21 AM | OK guys, let me know what you think now.
And new pics coming ASAP, (laughs) so you can comment on those soon, OK? | |
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Posted: 10/21/2009 8:53:40 AM | | It is time for a lifestyle change.Stop smoking, eat better,work out more.You're very young it's best to make this decision now instead of ten years from now.I know this is not really a review of your profile,but I don't think you are ready for this site. | |
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Posted: 10/21/2009 2:23:12 PM | ambrosiax 
unless you have nice abs[
...hmm.....
Most women aren't going to waste time on crappy profiles. Harsh, superficial but true. I don't think some men realize that some women get about 50-100 emails a day..so it has to be something that stands out!
It's all about being competitive with all the other guys in your area. | |
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Posted: 10/21/2009 2:30:26 PM | All we have to go on at first is your main profile picture. Yours is bad, you know it, you haven't changed it. Yet. We dont need your life story, and you have to make first contacts. When you don't bother to post good pictures, or spell correctly, or take good advice that all adds up to "not trying real hard, chase me anyway". That tactic isn't working for you - and rarely works for anyone.
Make the changes, make the first contacts, take the advice.
Good luck! | |
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