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Posted: 6/25/2009 7:33:31 PM | | I just got back from Iraq and hoping to return to a normal life. I'm looking for someone who i can hold a good convorsation with. Preferably someone with same interests and at the same time some differences too. I am big about honesty, fidelity, and humor. I love to laugh and make others laugh with me. There are some physical requirements too. I know its shallow but i believe there should be physical attraction in a relationship along with the chemistry. Hair and eye color don't matter to me. I prefer someone between 5-6 ft tall, and not like stick skinny, but I'm not into plus size girls or what ever the pc term is now. Also I really like glasses,not a requirement, just a note. I actually prefer brunettes,and i like brown eyes. I want someone who is fun and loves to go out and do things, but don't get me wrong i also like a nice night cuddled up on the couch watching a movie. | |
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Posted: 6/25/2009 8:09:11 PM | What coincidence! I'm between 5 and 6 feet tall! and I'm not a stick! and I have glasses! and I'm brunette with brown eyes! (no kidding, seriously.) But I'm a psycho b1tch who is fun and loves to do things. Where do I sign up!?
You know you have to rewrite this, right?
There should be at least 3 separate paragraphs separated by spaces like I've done here. The first paragraph should be about you. The sentences with "just got back" , "honestly, fidelity and humour" and "love to laugh" can all go in your opening paragraph. What makes you laugh? Light humour will be remembered by your female viewer longer than a list or string of dry sentences.
Then - you need to tell your viewer what your hobbies/interests/activities are. Let me guess. Hunting? Paintball? Anything that blows up? I suppose in Texas that's the norm, and I do love to blow things up.....
Finally - your last paragraph should be about who you hope to meet. I'm all for the physical description if it's a dealbreaker. The very last sentence is a bit generic - go out and do what, exactly? Dance? Play pool? Go 4x4'ing?
The more details you can insert about yourself, the more information your viewer will have to find things in common and feel a connection. When you are sending introductory emails, don't say "You're cute" or that kind of thing, it's implied that's why you're writing in the first place. A light, casual comment about something in/on her profile and an open question works best. Good luck! | |
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Posted: 6/25/2009 8:49:28 PM | In your first picture you have a cigarette in your mouth. In my opinion that will turn off some of the ladies you are trying to attract.
Personally, I think you have too many pictures in which you are holding a gun. I don't know why it should bother me, but it does.
Let me also suggest that rather than waiting for someone to stumble across your profile, take a pro-active stance and contact some of the ladies yourself.
Good fishing.
Leib | |
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Posted: 6/25/2009 9:55:54 PM | | I agree with the above. Pictures with guns while you are not in uniform tend to make some people run...while in uniform or on duty, sure, but just one. And the cigarette. | |
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Posted: 6/25/2009 10:58:16 PM | Two things.
You already have a charming selection of photos up, simply use one that doesn't have a gun for your main image. Do you want women to be thinking about what automatic weaponry is used for as they read your profile? You don't have to pose with a unicorn either, but I suspect there is a happy medium. Actually, consider the unicorn - get one with sparkles ;)
And I am always turned off when someone makes a blanket statement about what women they find to be unacceptable. Do men really think they are going to be so inundated with inquiries they will not have time to figure out who is and is not their type? Perhaps you could say something positive, like, "I go running every morning on the beach with my sparkly unicorn, and would love female companionship." Voila, problem solved. No need to be negative - makes a poor impression. | |
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Posted: 6/26/2009 12:36:21 AM | "Well I'm a hopeless romantic, so it would definitely be a surprise and would depend on the woman. Basically after talking with her a bit i would prepare a night that we would both enjoy, but more geared toward her enjoyment because that's the kind of guy I am. after that it would depend."
Fix this shit. You're not a hopeless romantic (well, you may be, but don't tell them). Also, this entirely ambiguous. Be funny, and tell them where YOU'RE going to take them. Don't rely on a woman to decide the date--you'll starve. | |
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Posted: 6/26/2009 3:18:33 AM | Maybe try saying something like this:
Just recently returned from Iraq and hoping to return to a normal life.
I am insterested in finding someone who I could have an enjoyable conversation with, who shares similars interest but at the same time some differents too.
I enjoy camping and hunting, would you like to join me?
I would like to find someone who enjoys going out and doing fun things. Don't get wrong I also enjoy staying in, cuddled up on the couch, relax and watch a movie.
Maybe for the physical requirements you might like to say that you are looking for someone that is "toned" or just say in shape but dont mention things like stick skinny but not pluz size.
And BTW you are contradicting yourself first you said you dont mind hair/eye color and later stated that you like brunettes & brown eyes....
I like guns but that's me, but for some ladies it might scare them off so maybe take some of the pics showing guns down & just leave one up.
I think your best pic is the 7th one, the one you are wearing the stripped blue & white shirt, that should be your main one.
GL | |
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Posted: 6/27/2009 1:15:39 PM | Thank you all for your advice, i changed the about me section, the first date and some of the pictures. Hopefully it's better now and only needs some minor tweaking.  | |
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Posted: 6/28/2009 5:54:03 PM | | I don't really have anything constructive to say to improve your profile more than what the previous posters already suggested. I know this is off topic, but I really just wanted to say thank you for your service. | |
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Posted: 6/28/2009 8:51:16 PM | More tweaks:
Lose the photo of you in the suit and with the sun glasses staring at the camera. Are ya trying to scare people?
Loset the last 6 items on who can contact you.
rewrite your own words with this formatting: (I corrected the spelling mistakes too)
Just got back from Iraq and starting to return to a normal life.
Before I left for Iraq I played semi pro football, and hope to do so again next spring.
I am big about honesty, fidelity, and humor.
I love to laugh and make others laugh with me, I try and avoid the cheap silly laughs but from time to time I can be a bit of a goof ball.
I still believe that a man can be a gentleman, and have integrity, and be chivalrous, and yet still be a man's man. (really really - do you want to mention this? She wants you to hang with her.) and hang out with his buddies.
I am active and want to meet someone who is also active, who enjoys challenging themselves mentally and physically.
I like a country girl who will go camping, four wheeling and enjoy a field party with the gang.
I love country music and dancing so that is a big plus if you do too but not a deal breaker.
I'm looking for someone who I can hold a good conversation with, talking about life, music, the universe and everything.
(OK I changed a few words, but ya get the idea? )
And YOU have to send out a load of emails because the women in your age bracket are not seekers, they are deleting other guys email. | |
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