| | Please review my profile.Page 1 of 1 | Greetings,
Would just like some feedback as to whether the hundreds of hours i have spent writing this this has paid off.
Any comments are appreciated, and thabk you for your time,
All the best,
Neilxxxx | |
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Posted: 6/27/2009 9:29:16 AM | Neil,
I don't think it looks bad but you have some misspelled words. I would suggest copying and pasting your profile in to something like Word and running spell check. You're missing a couple of ' in your profile including one in your title.
I would suggest changing your primary picture. The one of you sitting on a bench by a tiled wall shows your face better and has a bit of a smile. POF has thumbnails everywhere and you really want your primary picture to stand out so the bigger the face and the bigger the smile the better.
You might also want to talk about the kind of person you're looking for a little more. I wish I could go back to your profile without loosing what I'm typing here. You mention the kind of person you're looking for more as a group of people rather than a single person if that makes any sense. I'd try to rephrase it so it looks like you're looking for one specific person. Hope this helps. | |
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Posted: 6/27/2009 9:32:19 AM | And people who are not miserable all the time.
This sounds kind of negative so I would try to rephrase it to make it positive. You don't want to include anything in your profile that is negative. Try something like "and people who are positive/happy, basically the opposite of miserable.
To say you are looking for positive people sounds better than to say you don't want to meet negative people. | |
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