| Might as well ask.
Posted: 6/30/2009 4:17:54 PM | Been on here a bit but I feel as though my profile is a bit bland.
Let me know what you think.
I can make it quite a bit longer, but I know that wen I look at a profile that is 6 pages long I get to a point where I think the person is really limiting themselves | |
|
| Might as well ask.
Posted: 6/30/2009 5:08:14 PM | I think the length is pretty good.
Reading it over though, I got certainly feelings of insecurity from it. I'm not saying you're an insecure person, but the language you have chosen isn't strong/powerful or suggests a certain degree of nervousness. Remember that how you say something is as important as what you say. So words are very important.
For instance, you have. "Friends would say I am a average guy with a great heart." No need to put average in there. Just say your friends say that you have a great heart.
You also say, "It's hard on a website like this, but in person I am more outgoing. So if you are interested, simply say Hi." I wouldn't even include these lines. They don't build you up at all and in fact give a whiff of anxiety. And you don't want to present yourself in any negative light for a first impression, right?
The line, "I will not settle for less than open and honest communication in a relationship. I will not lie to you, so don't lie to me." To me, the very firm, direct nature of this line (especially in juxtaposition with your more nervous language) automatically tells me you have an axe to grind because of something in the past. Women call this baggage. And if I could count how many profiles from women who say they don't want people with emotional baggage I would be a rich man.
So, instead of "I will not settle" or "don't lie to me", simply turn this into a positive approach, like, "There is nothing in a relationship that makes me happier than getting to know who a person really is and having that mutual understanding that brings you closer." Doesn't that sound a lot happier and more inviting? That's what you want to achieve so just approach it as such.
Ultimately, just find ways of describing yourself in a secure manner and avoid any descriptions that suggest negativity.
All the best! | |
|
| Might as well ask.
Posted: 6/30/2009 5:17:13 PM | | Thanks for the input. I can see where you are coming from and I can see where some might read it like that even though it was not meant that way. I'll work on revamping the wording. | |
|
| Might as well ask.
Posted: 6/30/2009 5:24:44 PM | | Just from reading your profile, I would say work on your confidence. You said you think you have good characteristics. Nope, you do have good characteristics and that's why you're going to be a ladies man! | |
|
| Might as well ask.
Posted: 6/30/2009 6:54:06 PM | Nice.
I'll put that I'm a ladies man in there. | |
|
Home
login 
