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Posted: 6/30/2009 5:31:55 PM | I am taking the advice of someone who scored a 'perfect' profile and told me mine needs work. I was told that mine was too confusing and poorly written.
Thought the comments were harsh, but I am trying to grow and listen to criticism so I will put myself out there for review.
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| please review my profile
Posted: 6/30/2009 5:42:35 PM | | I looked through your profile, first thing I noticed, is it's a hard read. Try saying more about you in the About me section, and move more of your interest and types of music,etc. To the interests section, also included what your looking for in a person. The photo with someone butt in it, should be removed. Also I felt your profile, sounded like you were applying for a job, rather then attracting a mate. The part where you wrote about your work, should be removed, you have that written at the top already. | |
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Posted: 7/2/2009 6:25:49 PM | Your current picture is a little dowdy. IIWY I'd use the last one, with the Happy Birthday sign.
And I'm curious how one determines that their profile is "perfect"?
As for the content, try to read through it and pretend you're reading about someone else. Does it have a logical "flow"? Is it imparting the type of information you would want to read about someone else? | |
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Posted: 7/2/2009 6:44:03 PM | You are a good looking lady with many good photos. It may be my age but I found your profile way to long. My eyes get tired with all that. See if you can condense it a bit!!
All the best
Ron | |
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Posted: 7/2/2009 7:52:59 PM | Hi Deb,
Repeating what others have said is redundant, so that will be skipped. One of my favorite quotations says something to the effect that I would have written less but didn't have the time.
My favorite president, when it came to saying things, was Calvin Cooledge. A reporter once asked him, as he was leaving a church, what a preacher had talked about. Cooledge answered with one word, "sin." When the reporter asked him what the preacher had said, Cooledge responded, "he's against it."
The pictures, however, caught my attention right off. They only show your head. All of us have bodies too. Showing only your head suggests that you are either a) hiding something or b) don't have any specific interests. My suggestion is to load pictures showing you doing something. If you need some ideas, look at my pictures.
Good fishing,
Leib | |
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