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Posted: 7/1/2009 2:53:36 PM | Hi there, hope everyone is doing well. I just recently tweeked my profile. I would love to read your comments and I'm open to suggestions.
I'm wondering though, what message am i projecting with my page? I'm looking for sincere, honest and a straight shooting fun kinda guy!
I'm not advertising, just asking out of curiousity : )
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Posted: 7/1/2009 3:03:28 PM | At first glance: I've never understood the use of ",,," as a separator.
Spaces after your commas will go a long way to improve readability, making your profile flow more easily.
Your profile is highly exclamatory! Perhaps find another way to stress those items?
ALL CAPS REDUCES READABILITY AND RATHER THAN STRESSING THINGS ACTUALLY MAKES IT DISTRACTING (don't do it).
That's a first round - I'll take another swing if nobody else does. | |
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Posted: 7/1/2009 3:07:59 PM | Thank you, Pratch, that's the kind of input I'm looking for. And you're right proper grammer and punctuation makes a difference. Seeing extra commas makes it appear that I'm pausing. I get it. : ) Thank you, you're a gem. Changing it now : )
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Posted: 7/1/2009 3:08:24 PM | | I think it's cute and quirky and I refuse to believe you're having problems with it! | |
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Posted: 7/1/2009 3:34:39 PM | To be honest, I am to a certian degree. If you sound needy, then men run the other way. If you seem too independent then you attract the married or attached. As for criteria, really, anyone can say anything in their profile and have you believe them.
Is there a happy medium?
It will always be something that no-one will ever get away from. So where do I draw the line between "confident" and "needy"? | |
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Posted: 7/1/2009 3:40:09 PM | If you're needy you're needy and if you're confident you're confident.
Just be yourself! Don't try and attract someone who isn't attracted to the real you. | |
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Posted: 7/1/2009 3:44:05 PM | | Wow! You're very wise fo your age. How's the weather in Dublin. Thank you Darlin, for your input. : ) | |
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Posted: 7/1/2009 3:51:10 PM | | There's a song about the heat wave. lol. About the ageism? Just saying that your advice is great! | |
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Posted: 7/1/2009 4:11:12 PM | It's not ageism when she's been 29 for a couple years, savvy? ;)
I'd agree that not many 24 year-olds (male or female) understand that you need to be yourself or you're going to get into trouble. I myself have been guilty of easing folks into my personality, for instance. I know that most would be happy with it as-is, but I feel it's better to ease them in than hit them full on in the face.
I consider it emotional foreplay - you start slowly rather than just beeline... | |
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Posted: 7/4/2009 9:19:40 PM | Certainly a well-designed profile. I think your interests list could be consolidated a bit, but that's a nit.
You certainly come across as toward the confident end of the confident-needy spectrum. Is that a good or bad thing? Depends on the guy reading it.
Hmmm...altough I've been told otherwise, I for one don't think of myself as having "boyish charm". Might be you wanna judge that for yourself, rather than leaving it up to us to decide whether we meet that criterion. | |
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Posted: 7/5/2009 11:46:28 AM | Hi, I'll add a few thoughts to the mix:
First, pics: I think you have a set of five "almost great" pics. The main pic right now is nice, but what the heck is so fascinating down there in the lower right, off-screen?? The pic of you with the red hair would be perfect . . . if you were looking at the camera and smiling! The one pic where you're smiling at the camera seems to be an old scanned pic, which will make everyone fear it's not up-to-date. So, my biggest recommendation is to just get yourself at least one straight-on shot of you looking at the camera and smiling, to use as your main pic. If you do that, I'd get rid of the scanned shot and the two washed out pics, and add a picture or two of you doing something you enjoy. If you can have a full-body shot (not a revealing one), I think it really helps people to get a better sense of what you look like, overall.
Personally, I hate the music clip things, and never listen to them. It just takes me longer to get to your profile. So, if it were me, I'd scotch that.
I kinda like the goofy sliding into the room thing, but it would work even better if you got rid of the two lines before it: "I've been told that I have the Heart of Angel and the Patience of a Lamb!
IN THE MEANTIME,,,LOL"
Overall, I think your profile needs a little more substance. Much of what you say could be applied to pretty much every profile out there, and is just "noise" that isn't going to make any difference to potential dates. Take this for example:
I'm looking for the right guy. I don't play games and stay true to the one lucky guy whom in turn will make me feel lucky too. It's nice if you add me, but,just so you know i'm not here for a popularity contest! May the right man step forward! Texting and emailing is fine in the beginning but I would prefer to talking in person or on the phone!
Who isn't looking for the right guy? Who does play games and will admit it? Who doesn't stay true, and will admit it? The rest of the paragraph isn't telling us anything about you or what you're looking for in a man. Honestly, I think you can safely eliminate this whole paragraph.
I don't have baggage, left that behind years ago! I lead an extremely positive lifestyle that will rub off on you and if it doesn't you're on your own!!!! I love and respect men and I do have a very loyal heart!
If you've left the baggage behind, then why mention it? Drop the bit about "you're on your own," too.
I would get rid of the last three lines of the profile entirely.
Anyway, I think your spirit comes through very nicely, I just think your profile could use some "tightening up."
Good luck! | |
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Posted: 7/12/2009 2:08:40 PM | | Thank you Stjaba. You did exactly what I had asked from our friends on POF. I am leaving my profile as is. | |
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Posted: 7/31/2009 4:27:02 PM | You are projecting you ....as you see yourself ....what more can anyone ask for ?
It's not about online shopping ...........it's about honestly sharing 'starting points' for
a possible journey together ..short ...or forever.
You're right ..I wouldn't change anything either. | |
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Posted: 7/31/2009 7:20:30 PM | I think you've rolled one right down the center of the lane!
Other than a few grammar things (you used whose in stead of who's, for instance) that only a word fettishist such as myself would really even notice, it's great.
It sounds vivacious and care-free, which is very appealing to an honest, loyal guy such as myself.
Me, I wish everyone wouldn't strain every detail and perceived insinuation through a sieve like they seem to do on here. | |
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Posted: 8/14/2009 10:53:45 AM | | Thank you so much for your kind words. I think you're awesome from what I see. : ) | |
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