| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/5/2009 8:06:42 PM | | hi all! i have had my profile posted for a few weeks now i think and have not had a lot of success. I was just wondering if it was too much, or if there was something in it that was off putting? any comments or advice on how to make it better is very much welcomed. thank you! | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/5/2009 8:09:49 PM | Alot of your pics (eg your main one) are blurry, can you get better, clearer ones?
Split your looong text up into paragraphs to make it easier to read and your mentioning the kids coming first, doesn't need to be mentioned as it's basically a given. | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/5/2009 8:27:41 PM | Pic #4 suggests that the rest of the pics were from a few years and many pounds ago. If it's stretched out... delete it. If not... you aren't doing yourself any favors by putting up pics that do not accurately depict you or by fudging the "Body Type" field.
Self-taken cell phone camera pics just don't sell well. You really need to get someone to take a clear, properly-framed head shot with you smiling and looking happy. | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/6/2009 4:27:05 AM | Other than what the others have said
Whenever I see a guy looking for real young ladies I tell him to just eliminate the lower age limit so as not to chase off those of a more appropriate age. When a lady lists a lower age limit that is 13 years younger than herself it screams “Intimate Encounter” is the goal. That will likely scare off any serious guys of an appropriate age.
Run the profile through a word processing program to pick up spelling, capitalization and grammar issues.
All the best
Ron | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/6/2009 6:08:08 AM | | yes i could see wheat you might mean by my listing a lower age , but quite honestly just an intimate encounter is not what im looking for! My last relationship was w someone that was 10 yrs younger then i. It lasted about a yr. Im just one of those ppl that dont find age to be a factor! To a certain degree of course! | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/6/2009 7:23:51 AM | | i really dont feel like im "fudging" the body type! Im not as thin as i was 10 yrs ago, but i am not over weight either! I did remove that picture because my daughter had said i did look alittle big in it. I have been losing the pounds but am not at the size i would like to be. I didnt want to put up pics that made me look like i was real shinny because i am NOT trying to "fudge" my body type. Im trying to be as real about what i look like as i can! Im 5"4 and yes have some pds to shed, but honestly i am on the average body type. What would be considered overweight? | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/6/2009 8:27:25 AM | 1) I agree with what other folks said about your photos. You are a beautiful woman, so get some better head shot of you. You are far from overweight so don't state a few extra pound. Delete the photos that look robust.
2) I wouldn't start your profile by talking about your kids right away. That makes you sound high maintenance with a lot of luggage behind you. Rephrase the paragraph differently and use it as 2nd or 3rd paragraph.
3) I would rewrite about your love for dance & going to night club. They contradict each other. You sound like an 18 year old in one sentence & a burnt out partier in the next. Most people around your age range are already done with the party phase, so you don't need to state your are done with going out every weekend, that's a given.
4) I would take out "cant sing worth a damn but that dosent stop me lol" That sounds annoying to me.
5) I would change dating to long term unless that's what you want. Most guys around your age are looking for soul mates & settle down, not dating. | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/6/2009 12:35:59 PM | This will be short and punchy.
1. If you're trying to sell a house, do you open with how much extra yard work it'll require? No, you open with the house's best feature.
The guys are not looking to date your daughters (well, hopefully at least) they're looking to date you. Lead with the most attractive feature about **yourself**.
2. Tell us at least something about the guy you want to date. As is, you tell us virtually nothing, a near-silence that translates as "lowered expectations."
Read the profile writing tips and use them, they work. | |
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| profile review and advice please!
Posted: 7/6/2009 1:01:30 PM | Split your looong text up into paragraphs to make it easier to read and your mentioning the kids coming first, doesn't need to be mentioned as it's basically a given
I took your advice and did split my text up. They way you had wrote out the word long "looong" comes across that your applying it is too long.?!?! | |
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