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| Guys, my profile needs your help please!
Posted: 7/9/2009 2:48:15 PM | Hey everyone! Just wondering if I could get some input on my profile please? I'm not sure what it is I'm putting in there that causes a quiet inbox. I mean really, I'm not a knockout but I was pretty sure I wasn't that bad!
Regardless, I would be greatly appreciate if some of you would have a look and let me know what you think. Thanks so much in advance :) | |
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| Guys, my profile needs your help please!
Posted: 7/9/2009 3:28:02 PM | Well, if you are not a knock out, I am not sure who is. I know that if I were in your area, age range and taller I would come calling!!!
I do not see anything that would turn a guy away.
All the best
Ron | |
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| Guys, my profile needs your help please!
Posted: 7/9/2009 3:35:31 PM | Picture is great.
Profile/Description - EDIT.
That part of your profile should be maybe 6-7 lines, maybe 10. It describes what you're looking for, simple and succinct. Many of your sentences are long, almost run-0n. This makes you look a wee desperate. Some of it makes you sound like you want the relationship understood and bounaries confirmed before you even say "hello:"
My goal on this site is to ultimately find ONE good hearted and loving man to share intellectual, emotional and physical positive connections with. This takes time and obviously getting to know one another but, I believe it will be completely worth it when we happen across each other and everything else falls into place. I am not interested in dating a large number of men but I do intend to discover that someone special. I want to be in a relationship where we can both accept each other for who we are and what we stand for.
Translation: "Looking for the perfect fit:" See?
Things like this are a given, so let me make it fairly easy. You can tell "us" about you without making it long OR weak. Put in what is you, simple and short. Don't go into detail that you're looking for a relationship; we already should know that. What makes you tick, what makes you happy, what entertains you. If you make it relaxing, fun and short, you bore no one. No need to put down the names of your pets, the drinks you enjoy, no need to explain that you hate recreational drugs. Those and more are all in other setup details.
Look at it before you post it, edit it down to a sandwich. If you lay down a 5 course meal, no one will bite. | |
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| Guys, my profile needs your help please!
Posted: 7/9/2009 7:54:07 PM | Thank you guys, I do appreciate the input very much. I didn't realize about the boundaries thing...very good point!! Really, they're all good points and edit I shall.
Thanks again! | |
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| Guys, my profile needs your help please!
Posted: 7/9/2009 8:17:09 PM | more photos, please. include a full body shot that's closely cropped. when guys see 'a few extra pounds' and there's no shot of the hips, a lot will assume the worst.
lose the first paragraph. most everyone struggles to write these things. if the first words out of your mouth are how uncomfortable you are, you run the risk of planting that seed in your reader, and if you do, you've lost him.
as has been said before, edit down some of the nonessential stuff, but think about who you're trying to attract. anyone who's been to college has the attention span for a couple hundred words, if they're to the point. use examples; they're the pictures you paint with words. what is an example of the actions that exemplify your positivity, your connection with nature? that is, the things that make you fun to be with? | |
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| Guys, my profile needs your help please!
Posted: 7/9/2009 9:48:15 PM | | Thank you again! I've done some mass editing and hoping it's less wordy, lighter on the senses and more attractive to read! Great idea about the photos too, I will get right on that. | |
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