| Epic Review
Posted: 8/10/2009 6:06:37 PM | Ok, so not so epic. Just another person asking you to review his/her profile. You people are amazing though!
I think my profile does a pretty good job of describing muah but curious to hear what the experts over here have to say about it. Only thing that seems odd is that I sound like I am giving a sales pitch...or is it just me?
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| Epic Review
Posted: 8/10/2009 7:03:31 PM | OK - the first thing that stands out is that you're looking for "friends" - many will assume you're just looking for a FWB. So if you're looking for "dating" I'd change that.
Your first paragraph contains grammatical errors and the second sentence is too long.
Maybe add what you're looking for in a woman?
Get rid of the 2 blurry pics.
Your first date section is pretty humourous, but some might not think so. Just something to consider.
Good luck and happy fishing from one accountant to another. | |
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| Epic Review
Posted: 8/10/2009 7:34:08 PM | | Thanks a lot for your review. I changed up the first paragraph seeing as it had so many grammatical errors. | |
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| Epic Review
Posted: 8/10/2009 7:47:41 PM | | OK, first paragraphs good - now work on the other suggestions. | |
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| Epic Review
Posted: 8/13/2009 8:13:30 AM | Thanks for the advice on the other thread. I think the first date section could work, but it needs spacing. It felt sort of dense and intimidating, when clashes with the humorous material, and I started to skim a few lines in.
The other section looks pretty good. | |
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| Epic Review
Posted: 8/13/2009 8:52:29 AM | | You look purple in your main photo. Have a friend who is a good photographer get some good photos you can use instead of the purple ones. | |
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