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Posted: 10/10/2009 11:26:14 PM | Hey all! I have been on plentyoffish for almost a year now. I have changed my profile at least four times. I was wondering if I can get some feedback one the whole thing. Should I change anything? What do you think of the picture selection? How about my "About Me" section, does it look good? If everything comes back ok than at least I know its not my profile thats not getting me replies... Any replies would be greatly appreciated! Thanks!
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Jim | |
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Posted: 10/10/2009 11:58:52 PM | I don't think you should start off talking about being bald.
Don't say "sorry" in your photo captions. Funny side note...I read a book recently called "What White People Like" or something, one of the topics was Apologizing....think about it for a day and you'll see it too (although it's a general people thing, not white). But don't be apologetic, what's the point?
I really like brunettes but that’s just a want not a need.
Wow talk about shooting yourself in the foot. Do too many blondes email you or something?
Take off all of your email restrictions. Really, I can't see why guys would ever really need them. Unless you have too many little girls or cougars chasing after you (Hey YGF!)
Try rewriting your profile and using a word besides "I" at the start of every sentence. | |
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Posted: 10/11/2009 12:38:59 AM | Where did the carhartt and coke pic go? It wasn't great... but it was better than the ones you left.
Pic 2 and 4 are bad. You don't look fun. Remember the person seeing your profile doesn't know the circumstance of the moment in the pic.
Don't use the one with your aunt as the main pic, chose another grinning photo. In the 1 inch by 1 in square she looks like she could be any woman, and that's never good.
I'd say split up the random topics in your 1st paragraph into separate paragraphs and say a little more. And think of a better hook for the beginning.
And you wont need the restrictions for emailing you, so take them off. | |
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Posted: 10/11/2009 1:55:57 AM | Hi Bigcat ..
First of all, what does your headline mean?
You: “Where are all the good guys? Why cant I ever find them.” “Why to I attract all the a holes…”
** You sound a bit whiny here .. why not leave this out and just begin with "You've found one of the good guys."
Its up to you to change your destiny with those “ a holes”.
This needs to be deleted all together.
Currently I am looking forward to going back to school and finishing what I started 7 years ago( 2 associates degrees). Probably end up continuing with it and getting my bachelors or masters in something. I just haven’t decided what it will be yet, maybe basket weaving? I love to help people and be outside with people. My comfort level in dangerous situations is why I do what I do for a living. So maybe Ill find something along those lines
** This is all fine and good, but tells us nothing about who you are as a person.
For some reason the more busy I get the more comfortable I am. It seems like it consumes the things that bother me in life.
** It is good you recognize this in yourself, but be aware it may be difficult finding someone who understands. You are obviously most compatible with someone the same, but it will probably limit your dating pool.
I would love love love to meet a woman who has direction in her life and knows what she wants from a man. You have to be able to make decisions on your own and not rely on everyone else to make them for you. When stuff in your life gets tough get some balls (figuratively speaking)and do what you gotta do to do what you wanna do! You should know what you want in your life and be ready to get it done.
** You may want to consider rewording this. My overall impression is that you are hard to deal with. You seem controlling, and for me that would be a red flag.
Good luck in your search. :) | |
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Posted: 10/11/2009 2:10:19 AM | Hmmmmm, I see your point, thank you! What would you recommend on your last section of your post. The part were you said I sound "hard to deal with" and "controlling". I'm not any of these. Can you give me some insight on some rewording? Thank you so very much for taking the time to check me out and give me input.
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Jim | |
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Posted: 10/11/2009 5:30:19 AM | Hi Jim,
The first thing I noticed from the thumbnail picture is that it appeared you were either wearing a horrible fitting toupee or were dire need of a haircut. Ditch the picture and crop the one of you and your aunt. You have an incredible smile and the glasses are very attractive on you. Delete the group wedding photo. Its blurry and we don't care about the other people in the picture, we want to see you.
You've found one of the good guys! So come hang out with a good guy for a change.
Delete this sentence. Women will read this as code for "Nice (but boring) Guy" and you've just shot yourself in the foot. Don't tell us you're a good man, show us.
Currently I am looking forward to going back to school and finishing what I started 7 years ago( 2 associates degrees). Probably end up continuing with it and getting my bachelors or masters in something. I just haven’t decided what it will be yet, maybe basket weaving? I love to help people and be outside with people. My comfort level in dangerous situations is why I do what I do for a living. So maybe Ill find something along those lines.
You say a lot without telling us a thing. If you don't know what you want to do, leave this out. How do you like to help people? Give us some examples that relate to your work. Regarding the dangerous situations, do you work for the CIA? The Special Ops?
For some reason the more busy I get the more comfortable I am. It seems like it consumes the things that bother me in life. So being proactive like I am I choose to stay busy! Dedication, integrity, love and passion are some of my attributes, I look for those qualities in a woman. If you don’t have integrity if your life then you have nothing… That’s something I live by.
Let's rewrite the first part to say "I prefer to stay busy with my life as that is the key to staying positive when life throws me a curve ball." Instead of listing your attributes (which, btw, would be "honest, dedicated, loving and passionate") show us how you live these traits. The last line about having nothing if you don't have integrity is a big negative. Try rephrasing it to say "Living a life of integrity is one of my core values."
I love kids and hope to have some of my own some day. Right now I enjoy my nieces and nephews and they sure do keep me busy. My family is rather large, me being the only boy with 3 older sister. We hang out all the time and you can usually find all 4 of us with my parents, nieces and nephews eating dinner on Sundays.
This is good, til you get to the end. If you are dating a woman who works M-F, it sounds like she can only see you on Saturday as Sundays are dedicated to your family. Do you kid sit for your nieces and nephews often? Women like men who are close to their families but we don't want to feel like we have constantly do things with your family or that we are never on your radar as all the family obligations come first.
I like doing things with groups of friends, going to sporting events, concerts and VACATIONS! Doing things outdoors really interest me. I love to fish and camp, and always enjoy a bonfire with some friends and family. I run for personal reasons at least three times a week, more if I have the time. If you were to run into me on a weekend you would probably find me at home or some bar playing pool or darts with some friends. I’m kind of a scaredy cat when it come to dancing so you really have to get on me to get me out on the floor. I love my life and would love to share it with someone.
Delete the "doing things outdoors" part as its apparent in what you listed. Delete the "for personal reasons" after "I run" . Why else would you run? To please your sisters? You certainly like to use more words than you need to make your point. "If you were to run into me on a weekend you would probably find me.." Just say "I enjoy staying in or...."
I would love love love to meet a woman who has direction in her life and knows what she wants from a man. You have to be able to make decisions on your own and not rely on everyone else to make them for you. When stuff in your life gets tough get some balls (figuratively speaking)and do what you gotta do to do what you wanna do! You should know what you want in your life and be ready to get it done. If your interested in a relationship that could turn into something long term then you have come to the right place. I look forward to hearing from you and will be anticipating your message!
You sound like you are demanding these traits from the reader. Instead rewrite it to say "I'm attracted to a woman who is an independent thinker, a planner and a go-getter". Delete the last two lines. | |
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Posted: 10/11/2009 10:57:30 AM | | Thank you absofreakinlutely! Im gonna start working on it, but I would like to see what some other females have to say since your the only one so far to comment. I would mostly like to see what you guys have to say since females are what I am trying to attract. ;-) But I value everyones opinion. | |
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Posted: 10/11/2009 9:20:45 PM | Crop the photo with your Aunt. In the thumbnail preview the glare off of her glasses makes her look cross-eyed or like she glaring at you and that is distracting.
Add your interests to the interests section, separating by commas makes them searchable.
I agree with absofreakinlutely that you say a lot without telling a thing in your paragraph about school & work and the Sunday dinners with family.
"If you were to run into me on a weekend you would probably find me at home..."
How is someone going to run into you at home?
Overall your profile is pretty good compared to most of the two liners I come across, it just needs a bit of tweaking here and there.
happy fishing! | |
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Posted: 10/12/2009 8:11:39 AM | Aha ha ha!! You have to admit Unfozen Caveman Lawyer's response was funny considering you used "do" four times in that sentence.
Your profile looks much better. Our apologies to your aunt whom I am sure is a lovely person. That picture is your best. | |
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Posted: 10/19/2009 3:49:18 AM | --You seem sincere but possible reasons women won't respond--
--You smoke.
-Title--suggestive of playerdom. Another upbeat one.
---'Long term' --might be 'dating' is better--put in text you are family oriented, etc.
--Use close-up without specs as main. Get more of these direct eye contact/smiling pics.
---Your thumbnail now looks like an older man with big glasses (like the glasses). If they click on your thumbnail, they see you are younger and better looking.
--Employed you have to be specific here--she doesn't want a story.
--Text--first few paragraphs--condense it all into 2 sentences, as it reads-"I like baseball. I like shooting fish. I like and believe in karma. I'm an extrovert". Condense it to "Extroverted, spiritual( I believe in karma) and athletic, I like baseball, pony rides, shooting fish". Its weird but better than monotonous verbal filler--edit it for leanness.
--First date--Jamaica --not a good joke--she might find it unstable,otherwise a lot of text to say coffee, drink,relaxing. It seems like verbal stammer when there are a lot of words,and no new content.
I think if you try some of these type of suggestions, you might get more replies. | |
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