| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/11/2009 4:19:00 AM | So ive contacted tons of guys who say they are looking for a real, no drama girl, but i never get any responses. they always look at my profile and then never write back. is there something wrong with my profile?
is it too long?
should I put up more or different pictures?
am i missing anything? | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/11/2009 5:03:32 AM | | Sieze, I think you are adorable. Change your main pic to one of just you though. Remove the big family one altogether. Best of luck neighbor:) | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/11/2009 6:16:16 AM | | how is it my pics tho? i have alot of em.... im not gonn aput up almost nudes or bathing suit shots..... but i have full body pics up... | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/11/2009 7:28:48 AM | I think it's size. As a bigger woman who has been smaller, I know men don't tend to respond to larger women.
I think your profile is cute and age appropriate. I'll give you some advice someone told me. Your profile may be to vague and general, maybe give examples to make it unique.
Other than that, you're profile is good. The pictures are pretty too. Maybe take pictures with a digital camera. They are a little blurry. | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/13/2009 9:54:27 AM | Correct the spelling of your name to "seize". It's the first thing I noticed.
Skip a line between paragraphs. Make sure to capitalize at the beginning of the sentence. Each paragraph should only be 4-5 sentences max.
It gets a bit negative toward the middle....try twisting it around to saying what you do want rather than what you don't.
Maybe a nice smiling pic as well as the seductive shots. | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/13/2009 9:58:09 AM | Having spent 21 years in Florida, I'll offer the following:
Most guys your age in Florida are cruising the beaches looking for women who are eye candy. Those that aren't? It may take you more time to find your Prince Charming.
There are a few things in your profile that read VERY fast-forward. Nobody wants to hear about meeting your parents BEFORE they've contacted you.
Read back through your profile (adding extra returns to visually separate the paragraphs like I've done here), and then try to talk about yourself in a fashion that's interesting. As it stands right now, you're talking about things that aren't going to get the interest of the 21-30 crowd (why exclude people your own age? Makes it seem like you only want to date guys who can buy you alcohol).
Nix the negativity and give your profile another shot? | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/13/2009 10:03:59 AM | Hi Sieze the day,
I'll give it a shot. Your profile isn't too bad but here are some points for you to consider:
-Pictures should be bright and focused. I've always disliked the phone picture in mirror look - just get someone to take a few natural smiley pics. I would take out the family pic too.
-Actually you sound like drama waiting to happen ... you're 19 and looking for something serious, committed and long-term. Maybe you want to work up to that? Guys who are sick of drama might have a second thought when they read that.
-Don't talk about meeting your family right off the bat - guys your age dread doing that!
-Take out the part about free online comic books - that sounds cheesy to me.
-The second paragraph is just too hard to read. Break it up better and use proper punctuation and cap's and such.
Hope that helps ... Best of luck to you :) | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/13/2009 10:55:28 AM | Hi sieze, Yeah i would have to agree. you definitly need some better pics.
Your First profile pic is nice, but a lil blurry. Take out the one with family, that real blurry one, and the one with you taking a picture of yourself in the mirror. None of these pics do you any justice! i would also remove the line where you talk about your weight. I know you are trying to be honest, But it kinda puts you in a negative light.
Like your weight gain is outta control. I would just put something more positve.
Like: "I Recently started to Exercise and feel and love the results"
Also the whole meeting your dad and family might be pushing to soon, Some
guys can't handle that kinda of pressure all at once. i thought your intrest in comics
was just fine thou and cute! thats what its all about. letting them know about you and
your intrest. if you like online comic books heres a link for ya.
http://www.lorencollins.net/freecomic/#marvel
it might be new to you, Enjoy and happy hunting | |
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| Am i really that bad?
Posted: 10/13/2009 11:01:58 AM | You've gotten some good advice here, you should take it. Lose ALL the blurry pics, and try smiling - in life and online it makes you look approachable. Remove the negatives from your info, shorten the interests lists, remember this is a first impression - not a complete list of everything you want or have been through.
Good luck! | |
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