| Just updated my Profile. What does everyone think?
Posted: 10/13/2009 5:48:53 PM | Just updated my Profile. What does everyone think?
I've looked through the tips and hints. And came up with this. Yes I know I did some things on the tip list not to do. However the way I put it I thought was good.
Let me know your thoughts.
-GuardianSteve | |
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| Just updated my Profile. What does everyone think?
Posted: 10/23/2009 8:06:11 PM | Hi Steve
Two things come to my mind: Your photos are lovely, but the second one needs a caption. Who is the lady in the picture with you? Sister? Cousin? Friend? Competition??
Do run your profile through a spell checker. Sorry, pet peeve of mine. I'm not perfect either, but your profile would benefit greatly if you'd fix it up a bit.
And no "as I said before". Say it once, and mean it.
Good luck! :) | |
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| Just updated my Profile. What does everyone think?
Posted: 10/23/2009 11:10:50 PM | I also am turned off by someone who doesn't have good English (if English is their first language). It makes them look dumb, to me. So here are some suggestions:
"Right now what I'm looking for is someone to GO TO movies with, go to the clubs and dance (by the way, I hope you'RE as bad at dancing as I am), or cuddle at home watching a movie. Just simple. Winter is coming so MAYBE go SKIING, or get a rope and sled and get pulled behind my truck (that was so much fun last year!)
Also I like women who can make a choice. WHO HAVE a mind of their own. I want a person who will engage in conversation. Has their view.
I love to learn new things and ideas.
I love to GO backpacking, camping, skiing, kayaking, partying, the beach, 4x4, rollerblading, hangout with friends. I love movies! Scary, action, drama, distopian, comedy, silly. But it has to have A PLOT!
I love chinese food, pasta, pizza, pitas, most things but not very spicy. Love Kelly O's and Moxies!
I own my own business. I'm looking for someone who wants to go somewhere and do things in their lives.
Like I said, I like women who can make a choice and are motivated. Not just sitting around waiting for their life to change. But WHO ARE willing to take risks.
People can't grow if they stay in THEIR comfort zones.
Send me a email." | |
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| Just updated my Profile. What does everyone think?
Posted: 10/24/2009 9:23:52 AM | Hello.
Take out the line at the bottom that says to email you. If they want to, they know what to do.
The pic of the girl over your shoulder has to go. Women will wonder, yeah, it's a 'friend', but how good of a friend? Benefits? Old gf? etc. Plus, the only other photo is a group photo. You need more to showcase just you. It's to date you, not your friends. (unless of course, you are so sweet to fix them up....lol)
You start off making a comment on being funny and needing someone funny. Okay, but where is the humor ? There is none in your profile. Don't say it, show it. Put more personality into your profile. It seems like too much of tiny one liners with adjectives. Be more descriptive.
Put up a warm, funny or unique beginning paragraph that comes up in searches.
You're a cute guy. Show that in photos...without chicks.....
I can't remember much else. That tells me nothing stood out that much....
Best of luck to you. I hope you find someone special.
Have a good weekend. | |
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| Just updated my Profile. What does everyone think?
Posted: 10/24/2009 12:43:23 PM | Great, now I can't get that image of Tom Cruise from Risky Business out of my head....
Cool Interests.
The list of activities comes across as a bit dry - can you add a line about some specific place or adventure you've been to or had? (like the truck-towing line, it adds to the image)
The list of foods also has the same affect. Is there something really exotic you've tried by accident or on purpose, or would like to try? | |
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| Just updated my Pics. What does everyone think?
Posted: 11/1/2009 7:09:56 PM | | Y'know, it really is good as it is. The girl you emailed maybe prefers brunettes. Who knows. The spirituality/Reiki thing may be a bit too out there for some. Who knows. You're cute, you're employed, you're energetic, be patient. The one you're supposed to meet may not be here yet. | |
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| Just updated my Pics. What does everyone think?
Posted: 11/19/2009 7:07:33 PM | just read your profile, and think it is excellent...looks like you cleaned up most of the spelling, although i did notice a few things that could be tweaked. i would space it out more, that makes it easier to read.
other then that, you were very detailed about what you love to do, and who you are. the pictures back it up, and the combination is delicious! wish more profiles were as interesting and fun...
just give the response thing some time, some women get so many messages that they cannot respond right away, or are just not available to check their inbox. patience is a virtue darling - i promise it will pay off.
all the best, *aquamarine* | |
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