| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/25/2009 5:02:13 PM | Could you review my profile and tell me how I could make it a better attractor to my target market of 50-60's-something men?
I don't have a picture yet, but am impressed with the reviewer's comments here, so wanted to ask now about the verbiage. Yes, I'm getting the pictures. | |
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| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/26/2009 7:42:38 AM | You are a good writer.
List more interests. You only have 4 listed. What are your hobbies? What do you like to do?
You should write a paragraph about the guy you'd like to meet. Are you looking for someone educated? professional? a working man? someone outdoorsy? energetic? athletic? family oriented? a loner? talkative? quiet? gregarious? Give us some idea.
Pictures will be critical. Get some good ones and post them, then start e-mailing the guys you are interested in. | |
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| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/26/2009 10:50:08 AM | Hi G…yes photos are critical…they get you in the door. Make sure your primary one is CLOSE up and smiling. Make sure you have at least 1 full body photo. Many folks rotate their photos every few weeks.
A few more suggestions….
1) The “newly single” headline is a 2-edged sword. Try it for a while and see what happens. It attracts both the con guys (who see you as easy pickings) and the good guys (who see another man’s loss as their gain).
2) Nix the “unexpectedly single” and “didn’t expect to be on the market”. It doesn’t matter that it’s true or that the ex was a master of deceit…instead, it makes you sound like you were “clueless” as to what was going on.
3) In other words…nix the 2nd and 3d paragraphs. Your photos will speak for the body type.
4) Nix the negativity of “never do it for myself”…yes, it’s true, but simply put “it’s more fun cooking for 2”
5) Nix the “dutch on dates”…. You can still go “dutch”, but the man who offers to pay tells you a LOT about himself. Also, ladies who say they’ll pay their way make themselves sound ‘desperate to date’ vs. considerate.
6) Also nix the line with “money bags” and saving for retirement. Too much too soon.
7) Leave the financially stable…that’s plenty of info….and add that you’re looking for that in a date.
8) LOVE the 1st date ideas!
Hope that helps. Wishing you the best. DenverSky5280
p.s. – you might enjoy using a name that’s a bit more feminine. No need to create a new account if you want to change your name.
Go to EDIT profile, and under the Profile Edit section is the "Registration Information".
Change the Username there, and hit the "Update Registration" button. Ta Da! Done.  | |
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| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/26/2009 11:01:23 AM | Geez, you broke all the rules with this profile...lol talked about your body type, talked a lot about food, mentioned Politics, mentioned meeting their family,talked about money...
Should probably delete the part about rock climbing....and the part about retirement and the part about unexpectedly single unless you elaborate ....
Need some pics too,,,, | |
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| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/26/2009 11:09:46 AM | Just a suggestion ...
The opening paragraph is really important. You don't have much time to grab the reader's attention and convince him to read more, so the opener should be compelling.
I love to cook and never do it for myself, so would love to do this with you. Do you like Italian (great lasagne recipe), French (a year in France led to a love of classic French meals) or something unusual like Indian (I need more practice in making my puris puff, may I practice with you?).
Let's face it -- in our age bracket, food begins to take on an importance which, aside from it's role in allowing our survival, seems to be otherwise blown way out of proportion to it's actual value, but there it is, nevertheless. When I eat out, my selection is almost always determined by whether enough of the dish will be left over to enjoy at home. I like going to Anthony's because their shrimp platter is only $12, and I can eat only half of it anyway which makes for a great stay-at-home meal later in the week.
The paragraph quoted above -- that would catch my eye. Italian. Yum. | |
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| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/26/2009 2:42:50 PM | Wow, you are lucky that so many reviewers in your age bracket showed up for the party!!
You are so right that you need to get those photos up. I always skip over the “no photo” ones and generally skip over those that are unrecognizable or some that have 3 ladies in them. Which is which? I have responded to several of those but my first request is for photos. None of them have sent the photos. Must be hiding something.
You should add more interests. Shoot for ten or so.
I really like your about me section because it is much like my life style. I do agree with the comments by DenverSky and who can argue with the logic of a caveman lawyer!!
All the best,
Ron | |
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| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/28/2009 8:01:39 PM | I totally agree with my esteemed colleague UCL above. The first thing you mention is food, then you go on to talk more about food/cooking in the second paragraph. I would move that toward the middle of the profile and open with some information about YOU.
Do you hate Christmas shopping and wrapping presents? I love to and can help.
I would actually remove this random phrase. You're getting a little ahead of yourself and it makes you appear too "eager to please".
Yes you need photos, and the sooner the better.
Best of luck....XV | |
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| Please review my profile: Target market is 50-60's-something men
Posted: 10/28/2009 8:18:58 PM | | First in your interest section, way to many TV shows. This reads like all you do is watch the tube and for me that says couch potato. Your opening line is good if you really do like cooking and want a guy that would enjoy being in the kitchen with you preparing a great meal. The part about wanting a guy that is financially stable just screams to me; "I want money". Maybe I've just been burned to many times by gold diggers, but when women mention money I'm gone, it doesn't matter how good she looks. Of course if you are looking for a sugar daddy just say so, it will make it easier for us to know what you are focused on. | |
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