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Posted: 10/26/2009 10:57:29 AM | Ok I am never afraid to ask for help or research ideas. I figured I would ask for anyones help with this online dating stuff. I know stuff like this takes some time and patience.
Thanks
-Travis
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Posted: 10/26/2009 11:05:24 AM | | probably need a better pic or more pics...Lose the News Flash ........what I got from it as the you an extreme extrovert that hangs out in Bars? Not much about the qualities you are looking for in a woman...not bad besides that ... | |
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Posted: 10/26/2009 11:25:26 AM | check your spelling and grammar here are a couple examples: "Well about myself moved her[e] from San Diego a couple of years ago"
"I do enjoy bike rides[,] road or mountain bike."
you say you have a sens of humour you should show it. make a few jokes showing what type of humour you have.
your first date section needs work, think of something that you find interesting that's different. | |
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Posted: 10/26/2009 11:45:52 AM | I think you may need to elaborate on some of your sentences as your profile appears a bit start-stop-start when you read it. Maybe try and make it flow a bit more.
And possibly end with some sort of stimulant for any interested girls to message you and let you know.
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Posted: 10/26/2009 2:31:43 PM | thanks for the help. I am reviewing what I have and working on following all of your suggestions.
Thanks again.
-Travis | |
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Posted: 11/4/2009 11:31:10 AM | Ok finished some re-writes so please re-review and let me know. Thanks for all your help.
-Travis | |
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Posted: 11/4/2009 11:47:39 AM | A couple quick comments.
Your one and only picture is horrible and that is 80% of your profile. You need 6-8 GOOD photos with main one being a nice close up face shot in good lighting.
I didn’t see your first profile but you still have a couple punctuation/spelling issues.
“…being prepared. ? I gained…” – Lose the period and put the ? right next to the d.
snow boarding is one word - snowboarding
You should add to your main section something about what kind of lady you are looking for. You sort of have it in your First Date section, but it is vague at best.
The First date should be a freakin date, not some random discussion of how you tend to meet people.
And your ages listed there while broad are a bit creepy. I have a daughter almost at your lower limit there. If you showed up at my house to “date” her, you would be met at the door by me and my S/W 9. You say you don’t want children, but almost every 24 year old girl I know does eventually want them. Most likely not with someone that is going to be dead before the kids are grown.
I would just leave the age off completely. If some hot 24 year old contacts you count your blessings.
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Posted: 11/4/2009 12:46:37 PM | Thanks Majic, working on the suggestions and the re-write yet again. I do wish this place had multiple profiles like monster.com resume sites do. I keep reading it over and over again and miss the little things after awhile.
-Travis | |
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Posted: 11/4/2009 8:20:23 PM | Ok I did make a lot of revisions today. I am still reading it through multiple times to make sure I have a solid profile. I am still working on getting more pictures as has been suggested.
So if I could gain the comunities favor yet again and look it over and tell me what ya got?
Thanks again for all your help.
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Posted: 11/4/2009 8:47:06 PM | thankyou for your kind comments on my profile Travis. Reading the text made me want to see more as you seem like a positive kind of guy, perhaps some more photos - in fact definitely more photos (though most of mine seem to turn out crap so i'm not sure whether it's diminishing returns heh). Profile seems warm and giving and pretty sane, good luck !  | |
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Posted: 11/4/2009 11:27:14 PM | So Travis, what's an SE? Sanitation Engineer? Special Ed? Gimme another clue....
Yes, more photos.
The more little details you can add, the better. For example: Fishing - is it flyfishing or angling? (How many women saw Brad Pitt in A River Runs Through It? Work that image....) Name the lakes, rivers, parks or trails you go to. Chances are your viewer has been there, or knows the places. This does 2 things. 1) gives her a nice mental image while she's reading your profile, and 2) gives you something in common automatically. | |
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