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Posted: 10/29/2009 4:03:28 PM | Looking for some honest opinions on my profile.
All opinions welcome as long as they are constructive and not just I look a fool or it's a rubbish one!
Pretty much think I have most things covered to not make me come accross as stupid or vein. But not a complete life story as I don't want every single thing about me or I've done in life covered in it!
Although one thing I know I could get a few more pics but I hardly ever manage to take good pics of myself lol. | |
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Posted: 10/29/2009 4:31:20 PM | You already know you need new photos. Get to work on that.
Interests: football, keeping fit, motoring - You should list more interests including some that women might be interested in
Er not really that interesting to be honest. - Delete. Starts off too negative. If you think you aren't interesting, why should any woman be interested in you?
Well so alot of people say. - Delete.
Generally I don't like to judge a book by it's cover although everyone does a little no matter what they say. - Delete. Obvious.
Although I give everyone a chance to get to know me, I'm quite chatty once I know someone, although like most can be quite shy. Depends on the situation and sometimes intoxication level on rare occasions. - Delete all this. All it tells us is that you need to be drunk to get past your shyness.
What I want from life is probably just to be happy, wouldn't care what I was doing as long as I can get by without struggling and to have someone always there for me to talk to and support me. The last part is the most important to me. Although I don't have that just now so for now the money will do :D - This all sounds like "Oh, poor pitiful me. I don't have a girl friend. Boo Hoo."
Musically I'm quite generic, listen to most stuff although not a hardcore fan of music really. - Rephrase this in a more positive way and tell us what you do like to listen to.
Hobbies are the usual guy things, although not into drinking much which is quite weird compared to most people but thats life! Also like to try and keep active although at the moment it doesn't seem to be going to well. - This is all too negative and not appealing to women. Tell us what you like to do that women may like also. Do you dance? Do you cook? Do you like to spend time with your family? Do you like to walk, run, swim, what?
Feel free to give me a shout :) - Delete. Women already know to contact you if they are interested.
Rome wasn't built in a day. Hopefully enough to get past any shyness as well! - Delete. This makes you sound painfully shy and socially awkward. | |
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Posted: 10/29/2009 7:32:28 PM | Hi there. Well, your headline says you're looking for someone "special", but you go out of your way to prove you're completely ordinary in your profile. 'Nothing special', 'usual' all sprinkled throughout. Why should a 'special' girl contact or respond to you?
The Interests are used as an appetizer. You have 3 that are pretty much guy-centred. If you're looking for Long Term, what can you do with a partner? I wonder if "motoring" is the same as what we call "Road Trips"? Little day jaunts with no apparent destination for fun and adventure only? What else could you do together? Have you travelled? Do you want to? Do you have pets?
It's this type of detail that will add to your personality and give your viewer something to find in common, or something with which to start a conversation. Good luck! | |
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Posted: 10/30/2009 11:52:20 AM | thanks for both your opinions .
Upon re-reading it and reading your comments I have realised it is quite a negative one really!
I have changed it a wee bit, so any more feedback would be greatly appreciated :) | |
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Posted: 10/31/2009 3:36:05 AM | My impression is you seem really passive--I'll do what you want,etc., introverted, and the pic makes you look bored and a bit downcast--perhaps its the fact you are looking down. Very few look so good at that angle, as it can distort--don't call yourself nerdy, as it's more self-deprecation.
Need-- 1 body pic, 1 closer up- eye contact relaxed smile in all pics, 1 in dressier attire--pics are important to convey you are approachable--the body language should be relaxed, quiet confidence. One gets the feeling you are thin and attractive, but without more pics, you won't get msgs or replies.
Text--talk about your type of girl, and write as if you are talking to your friends--topics--politics, books, food, religion, or?
Give specifics. Change title-- to upbeat and unique.
Favorite film directors, film genres, adventures, want to travel to...? She wants to feel she knows you, then she can sense if
its a match, mutually. What outings do you wish you had a partner to see and do?
Fill out the text, so you can get more feedback.
Best of luck. | |
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Posted: 10/31/2009 5:52:34 AM | lots of good points there.
I'll have to tweek a bit more later today.
Again, I appreciate everyone who has replied taking the time to read my profile and giving good advice :) | |
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Posted: 11/1/2009 9:44:49 PM | Took a quick glance-- use spell check--a few typos, need caps on bands/artists, etc. but much better tone, text fleshes you out--you come off a lot warmer, personable, like good friend material--that's how it all starts.
I'd get those pics, keep tightening up and refining text--so it reads with clarity, add some other info. that you'd want to know about somebody if you did not know them.
Best of luck. | |
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