| Hey there! Review if you dare!
Posted: 10/30/2009 6:15:34 PM | I know, my subject is a rhyme. You're welcome.
Anyway, I want to get a profile review now that I've changed it a bit. Omit the fact that I have like 1 picture, I'm getting a few more up there soon.
Thanks in advance. :] | |
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| Hey there! Review if you dare!
Posted: 10/30/2009 7:35:26 PM | my 26 cents......
1. ok, you already know about the pics...get more and include a body shot and a smiling pic.
2. some of your About Me is kinda wordy. Remove your interests and put them in the section above. Then when describing personality traits, use short, one word descriptions. For example, "I'm told I am wise beyond my years, that I have an understanding of life usually reserved for people much further along in age and experience" could be sunmmed up as either mature, or just "wise beyond my years." If you get too wordy, people stop reading.
3. your description of what you're looking for is really short. Elaborate on the kind of girl you'd like to meet. Spend as much time and effort on that as the description of yourself, after all...that's why you are here.
4. the first two sentences in your about me can work either way. it had a more negative effect than positive in my opinion. i'm left wondering, what the hell did you do in your childhood? Could either be a conversation starter or a deal breaker.
good luck..... | |
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| Hey there! Review if you dare!
Posted: 11/1/2009 9:56:46 PM | | I like BombChelle's advice, that's good. I may not take all of it, but it's still all good. Thank you both. | |
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