Hi Doc,
Do you have a girlfriend? Because that's what it looks like when 6 of your 7 pictures include you with a blonde woman. Get rid of them and get some pictures of you by yourself. You need at least one decent headshot for your main pic, and not one where you can see the hand of another woman on your shoulder and her hair brushing your back.
You need more interests. Favourite kinds of music and movies? Things you enjoy doing? You've only got three at the moment - it looks like you can't be bothered to think of any more.
I don't like the layout of your description. Splitting things into little categories never looks very natural to me, so I would get rid of the 'music:' starts and 'me in a nutshell' etc. What you have at the moment in terms of material could easily be made into two decent sized paragraphs about yourself. However, you need to be more positive and try and write coherent sentences, not just statements about each individual activity. Problem lines for example are:
A perpetually renewing set of goals, including Finding soul mate-I Hope it Exists.
Badly laid out sentence, and the first part about goals is a bit job-applicationy. Everyone has goals, finding a soulmate is a weird thing to insinuate you might have on a list somewhere though.
I am getting exactly what I want.
Too arrogant. If you've got everything you want, why are you on a dating site?
I can only listen to country music with the right girl - she has to be really in to it.
Elitist. Suggests you won't deign to listen to music with a woman who you don't consider 'really into it'.
Shit, I don't know. I suppose you have to make that call.
Negative. Gives the impression that you can't be bothered to think of anything. In fact the entire paragraph about meeting someone in an elevator is unnecessary, boring and pointless. It's filling space that could be actually be used to write about.... what makes you unique!
Oh by the way, even if we did not win every game, we looked damn good playing.
This is just weird. Suggests some vanity on your part. The rest of the first date part is better.
Your profile mainly gives me the impression that you haven't thought about it very hard. It looks like you spent more time uploading pictures than thinking about what to write. The best layout advice I normally see (and give!) is to have two decent paragraphs about yourself and what you like doing and who you are, and then a third giving a rough idea of what you're looking for. You can't go far wrong with that.
Good luck!
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