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| Now, what do ya thnk aboout my profile?!?
Posted: 11/1/2009 6:13:23 AM | | I would definitely appreciate some honest feedback on my profile. Please let me know everything you think about it. Also, don't hesitate to contact me if you have any questions or if you are looking for someone to talk to! Thanks very much guys! | |
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| Now, what do ya thnk aboout my profile?!?
Posted: 11/1/2009 8:22:40 AM | in short...
1. a head shot with you smiling would be more inviting. but good range of pics.
2. move your interests to that section. putting them in the about me section is repetitive.
3. use about me for your personal traits and what you are looking for. it flows now but just remove the interests and focus on you as a person. might have to beef it up a little after that. i can see you are creative and witty so it wont be hard.
4. change the heading. everyone is a nice guy, committed and down to earth...make yourself stand out...
happy fishing... | |
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| Now, what do ya thnk aboout my profile?!?
Posted: 11/1/2009 12:51:36 PM | Hi, Tony. A few more thoughts...
You have a sentence that reads "I am told to be affectionate." Huh?! That comes in the middle of you talking about work or something. Move that info to the area where you're talking about your other qualities and correct the intent.
In your Interests field, add: Church, Tennessee, Jazz, Road Trips
When you talk about going for walks and road trips, you need to expand on those images. "In the Fall, it's especially nice wandering the trails of (whatever) Park and enjoying the changing colors of the leaves and the crisp air making your cheeks pink."
or.... "When the mood strikes, I like to hop in my car, open the map, close my eyes and point. Then, I go there! You never know where you may find the perfect diner or bowl of chilli for lunch." You get the idea - write a picture. | |
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