| Looking for some constructive cristicism
Posted: 11/1/2009 8:54:28 AM | Just looking some constructive criticism; Should I being saying something more about myself. Women, are there other things you are looking to know about....basically I haven't written every apect of my life on here, but is there something I should add or take out.
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| Looking for some constructive cristicism
Posted: 11/1/2009 11:26:13 AM | more smiling pics
less generic interests
Reword all your sentences that start with "I" so that it's more fun to read
And run your stuff through spell check. "Woulf"? | |
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| Looking for some constructive cristicism
Posted: 11/1/2009 1:21:39 PM | Delete the photo that makes you look like you have a hand deformity. How will you ever learn to play piano with only 8 fingers? Well, 3 fingers and a thumb?
I agree with everything in the second message.
While you're in edit mode, you'll need to expand on the ideas you've started. As it stands now, the sentences read like lists. For example: where you talk about the places you've been, what was your favourite and why? | |
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