| Profile Review needed!
Posted: 11/1/2009 10:14:07 AM | Hey,
Can some of you look over my profile. I guess the photos, my profile itself, whatever you think needs changing I will listen (And maybe implement :P). Maybe some points to help you get started:
Is there any unneccesary information?
Did I leave anything out?
What does the opposite sex find attractive in profiles? Do I have any of that?
Thanks in advance! | |
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| Profile Review needed!
Posted: 11/1/2009 12:44:30 PM | Hi, Vancouver! A few thoughts...
None of your photos shows your actual face. The 'disguise' main will get deleted because it's against "The Rules" to not have a clear headshot. It's a funny shot for your gallery, though. First thing to do - clear, forward-facing, big cheesy smiling head/shoulder shot.
You know the first line and next paragraph have to go, right? Seriously. If you open your profile b1tching, how attractive is that going to be? nuh uh...
The last part of the profile with the quote and bonus points is really a great way to end it. It's kinda the middle part that sucks. Sorta.
You have some good information and then go on to talk too much. What's with the newspaper reviews? That, and the "I'm too mature..." really come across as condescending. I'm sure that's probably not what you were intending, but it's the perception.
You may have some difficulty getting responses from the girls you email because you don't really describe who it is you are attracted to. What personality traits? Characteristics? Use positive language only. | |
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| Profile Review needed!
Posted: 11/1/2009 9:30:31 PM | I don't know the original version, but thought it was very thoughtful, not the kind of profile one dismisses, assuming you send msgs to those likely to understand.
There were a few typos--"contempt" instead of "contentment", etc.
You mention social anxiety--in such an honest and strong profile, I think its fine, but only you can judge if it's important to put out there. You could get into that later, also--personal call on that.
It's funny you wonder if you have what women like. What's not to like? That pic in disguise must go, though.
You're tall, good looking, literate, artistic, sensitive, etc. and your profile does a great job revealing that.
Assuming your msgs are friendly, not too intense, and show you've read her profile, I think you should meet many interesting women and might connect with someone great.
Best of luck. | |
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