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Posted: 11/2/2009 1:13:56 AM | Hey everyone!
Ive been here for over a month and so far no success...I've messaged girls to discuss things we have in common, and it always goes 'read' with no reply. Nor have I yet to be contacted by anyone. Is it my profile that causes me to be ignored? Any tips on how to be more successful here? | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 2:27:51 AM | OUCH! At this -
I consider myself 'the nice guy' which unfortunately doesn't go over well being my age when women are looking for the tough tall guy. I have yet to find a girl that hasnt stuck me in the friendship closet and left me there.
That will give any girl you meet the excuse to put you there.. omit this.
You're a good looking guy, good pics! So go with that, but don't tell them that you're being put in the friendship zone.. they might think something is wrong with you... | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 4:09:42 AM |
I am a 23 year old bachelor born and raised in Bay Area, California.
No need to say things twice, your profile has this info at the top.
I am currently living in Orange County studying film, though I am taking a break and saving up money so I can further my career goal in becoming a DP and screenwriter. I would say something like " I am chaseing my dream of working in film. Let the ladies ask you about the finer details of this subject.
During my freetime between shifts at my local Wal-Mart
Burn this sentence quickly.
I love to go on ghost hunts with friends
This is pure gold. Tell a quick story about a spooky situation you found yourself in.
brainstorm ideas for my peace organization
This is good. List a few ideas so female activist know your for real.
and work on a screenplay which may have a good chance of earning a ton and getting me out of retail. Trash this. Sounds like you are trapped in a dead end job that nothing short of a hail mary will set you free.
I have a wide taste in music and movies. I listen to everything and watch everything, so long as its good. This is rather generic. Remember you are unique. List music you think is good. It helps paint a much more accurate picture of who you are. Maybe list what music you like to have in your film?
I consider myself 'the nice guy' which unfortunately doesn't go over well being my age when women are looking for the tough tall guy. I have yet to find a girl that hasnt stuck me in the friendship closet and left me there. You sound like damaged goods bro. Your a man, this means you must be the pillar of strength. Nothing is this world is going to knock you down especially superficial twinkies.
Though friends or not, I have the upmost respect for everyone and just love to have fun and stay positive. Im an upbeat, positive, no-drama kind of guy. I know how to joke and have fun with any situation and still take it serious and be responsible. Don't tell people what you are. Let them discover these things about you by writing about situations, or scenarios in your life. Example " Me and my friends had gone ghost hunting in a pitch black haunted house in the middle of the night. All we had was a bic lighter for a light. As we progressed through the house the lighter exploded and suddley we had no light and everybody was freaking out. By some miracle I was able to lead everyone out of the haunted house without getting injured or lost. Once we were out we all busted out laughing " Serious situation you took control of and then you saw the funny side of things.
Im looking for a girl that can be the same. She has to know how to have fun and yet be extremely sweet. She will be my best friend as well as my girl, and partner in helping the world one random act of kindness at a time. If you are trying to generate emails I would not list any restrictions in your profile. Open the flood gates and delete the ones you don't like.
On a final note. If you are a so called aspiring writer of screen plays and such then why is this profile a huge pile of steaming hot dung? LOL! You are only going to get what you put into this online dateing thing. I know I sound harsh but I am just looking out for you. I challenge you to write 4 solid paragraphs utilizing your film and writing skills. Your profile is your film. You are the main character. Develop this character through the characters experiences. Make me proud. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 10:22:31 AM | | ...yeah that was a bit harsh lol. But i get what you mean. I'll work on it more, thanks! | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 11:56:33 AM | Your right it was harsh, but you will thank me when you start to get super cool girls emailing you! Get someone to take a picture of you with a film camera doing a shoot of some sort. Or even a photo of you writing on a screenplay book. How about a picture of you on a ghost hunting trip?
You are a good looking dude and you have a magnetic smile. You can make a sweet profile. If you were a famous holywood film person would you have troubles meeting girls? Not a snowballs chance in hell would you ever have troubles meeting girls.
Remember you are a talented aspiring film maker, who is on the brink of breaking into the the bigtime. You want to share this great journey with someone special. A person who will be with you before and after the fame and fortune. Someone to share these great memories with. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 12:23:46 PM | singlebyfate: You may want to correct your grammar/spelling when you do reviews. Your commentary isn't bad, but you're negating that when you misuse "your" and misspelling things like "chasing" as "chaseing" ;)
YMMV SPSFD | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 1:06:28 PM | | I have a few photos of myself on a ghost hunting trip, i can post those up. As for the screenwriting/shooting, ill have to get someone to take those for me. You rock, man! And i hate using the term 'rock' haha | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 6:29:29 PM | Just remember being a screen writer is like being a rapper.
You may hit it big ONE day or you may never hit it big.
If you are going to mention screen writing, what kind of screen play are you writing?
What is the subject matter of your work? does it have a socially responsible and relevant message or are you just having pipe dreams about making money by writing Scary Movie part 7?
Make it clear why you are interested in screen writing since it is a unique career choice but don't state that it's all about the benjamins since you don't have any and likely won't unless you are the next Spike Lee.
Hope this helps. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 6:49:50 PM | | Thank you for the constructive criticism. I know my grammer is poor. This pc does not have a word processor and I am a terrible writer. The unfortunate thing about this forum is I cannot edit a post if I find errors in my statements. I will try harder. | |
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Posted: 11/3/2009 1:01:20 AM | It actually is a script that has a socially relevant message and a strong chance of getting picked up, through the status of whom I am working on it with. It's not just a random pipe dream, though those are fun too...
I haven't had time unfortunately to work on it because of work today, but I have a TON to fix up now to make it the best profile possible within the next few days. Thanks a lot for your help and compliments, you guys. | |
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Posted: 11/3/2009 7:50:23 PM | | I updated my profile! Let me know what you guys think | |
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Posted: 11/3/2009 9:52:58 PM | A few thoughts...
I like the username as an homage and link to the film reference.
Thank God you're looking for Long Term - this is a really detailed blog about you. But - when looking for Long Term, your viewer is going to want to know you're stable and responsible. I don't remember you talking about what you do for a living while waiting to be famous. Is that the Walmart thing? That could be spun as working in Retail Customer Service.
For a 'first date', movies generally are not a good idea UNLESS you've spent a lot of time emailing and talking on the phone ahead of time. Otherwise - you'll be stuck in a dark room with a virtual stranger for 90 minutes with nothing to say. Or - you'll be getting 'shushed' all the way through. I know that film is your passion, but maybe after you have a face-to-face somewhere else first? and not in the same date? | |
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Posted: 11/3/2009 10:03:28 PM | | What would be a good date? out of all honesty ive NEVER been on a date before. | |
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Posted: 11/3/2009 10:17:40 PM | A good first meeting would be something short and sweet - a local coffee shop for coffee and dessert; a patio restaurant for iced tea and a shared appie; we have Tim Horton's for first meetings here, it's like a law in Canada.
For a first 'date', you'd need to find some common ground. Depending on the weather, it may be an afternoon at the zoo/beach, or meet up at a park and play frisbee, or even dinner if more formal and you wanted something more intimate, or a pub for some adult beverages and pool/darts/dancing. It really depends, but for a profile, you need to suggest something to get an idea of what you'd like to do. | |
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Posted: 11/5/2009 5:55:47 PM | | A good first date could be a ghost hunt! Or maybe watch some acting at a dinner theatre. Something that would be in line with your profile. Go for a walk to an area of town that has street performers or actors and drink a latte. | |
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Posted: 11/5/2009 6:34:18 PM | Those are great ideas, You Go First and Single By Fate!
Hi dlynch04.
Your "About Me" section is fabulous. I really enjoyed how you took each "aspect" of who you are and then expounded on it. It was fascinating to read.
Now I want to know who YOU are
^^^ This is great!
Great job!
~JLS | |
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Posted: 11/8/2009 12:58:54 AM | | thanks again for the feedback! i changed up my 'First Date' section a little | |
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Posted: 11/8/2009 8:41:05 AM | I like it! Well done!
There's a few of minor typos that need to be corrected:
- The contraction "Im" needs to have an apostrophe (first word of this section);
- put an "i" in "simple" (I would suggest something smple like dinner or);
- Change the comma to a semi-ccolon after "dinner theater" (dinner theater, somewhere where we can talk);
- Captialize "I" (The more i know about her)
BTW, dlynch, I don't think I told you, but I REALLY like your opening!
"So who am I really? They say a picture says a thousand words. But even if I posted up every picture of me up, it wouldn’t say EVERYTHING. I like to stare off into distances, look frightened against ominous walls, and wear strange hats. However, there is a lot more to me than that."
Aside from being funny, it's also poetical. It's absolutely brilliant!
Oh . . . speaking of which:
- delete both instances of "up" (But even if I posted up every picture of me up, it);
- change "it" to "they" (it wouldn’t say EVERYTHING);
- delete the comma after walls (ominous walls, and)
Have fun with your search!
Be blessed,
~Joy | |
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