| The lonliness I have created...
Posted: 11/2/2009 1:22:00 AM | This is no ploy to try to find someone, to try to get laid so to say. I will admit I do have hopes that maybe this will help bring someone to my life that will be the “one”. You may think this is just a lot of non-sense hoping to help reel you in, to help sell myself as the sweet sensitive guy that is what you need in your life. That is not the point in this at all, there is no point, this is just me and my thoughts. Well with that out of the way on to what is on my mind, what is love? It does exist but where to find it, when will it come, when will it come to save you from the abyss that is loneliness. I am drowning in this abyss; it is suffocating me to no extent. I ask myself why I am unable to escape this darkness that I have enveloping me. Than it dawns upon me, like the sun rising on the landscape, standards set by the “normal life” in this world. I have created these rules for my love life that must be followed, and if not followed, I will end up in an unhappy place. I have brought the abyss upon myself, and I wallow in the pool of self pity in which I have created. But no more, I have broken the bonds that I have created, and that which the male stereotypes of the world tell me is ok to be able to live by. I have created a new set of principals, which there is no set group of rules. If loves comes there will be no focusing on the way a person presents themselves, in anyways shape or form I will accept it. Do not get me wrong there has to be a physical attraction in a relationship, it is the foundation that a relationship is built. But not to the point society has portrayed the “perfect women” to be. Society has created almost a monster of what is need in a woman for a man to be satisfied. Well that is what was on my mind, more to come! Leave comments and your own rantings always appreciated. But if you are going to badger me on this, I have better things to do with my time than get into a virtual war with some gringo in Texas calling me a queer! 
Adure,
Joshua | |
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| The lonliness I have created...
Posted: 11/2/2009 3:37:24 AM | | Erm, hey josh..You know there is a creative writing forum for this right? It a great poem but kind of depressing. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 5:46:11 AM | | If you have to explain in the first 3-4 sentences that 'you're not that kind of guy, this isn't some ploy, etc.' probably I wouldn't read the rest. I read a little further down and while I admire your vocabulary I think I recognise your prose style in some romance novels. If you consider this badgering, yes, go do something better with your time. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 12:32:51 PM | | No thank you L5377, what I am looking for in the form of critisim, much appreciated. Yes I do agree I should have maybe cut back on the first couple sentences. And to the first poster thank you for pointing out a creative writing forum, will post such works as this there in the future. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 4:34:03 PM | | Be yourself, keep it short & simple and genuine, and people here will be very forthright and desire to give you their .02 worth, just my advice. Maybe re-phrase your topic in another forum and you'll get some responses. I don't mean to discourage you, your post was a little off the top. | |
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Posted: 11/2/2009 10:38:39 PM | You're 19 so this about normal.
Not that you're thrilled to read that.
But in a few years you'll be in a different place.
But here's what you can do for now.
Ever see those prison movies?
Some guy is in prison and doesn't want to be?
So what does he do?
He does a million push ups in his cell.
Reads alot.
Does mail order schooling.
Plans ahead for when he gets out.
loneliness is like a prison cell.
You don't want to be there.
But there you are.
So do the same.
Work on yourself since you don't have a girl to distract you.
Get some schooling.
find fun stuff to do and do it.
Workout.
Get involved in the life around you.
Focus on your future and take steps to make it happen.
When you do, your prison walls will slowly dissolve on their own.
You will be too busy to notice though.
And all that working on yourself(mentally as well as physically) will make you very attractive to women.
and in a few years time you'll be asking why all those women won't leave you alone.
Good Luck. | |
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Posted: 11/3/2009 12:05:21 AM | Hi Joshua-can you honestly say that you love yourself yet? Because when you do, and you enjoy your own company, there is no 'abyss' to be filled, and noone can ever fill that void anyways. People can only love us as much as we love ourselves. Shocking, I know, but true nonetheless. Best wishes Joshua Wiyan | |
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| The lonliness I have created...
Posted: 11/3/2009 1:41:21 AM | All the replies are much appreciated, thank you. This was more of a "poem" but it was what I was thinking at the moment of writing. Thank you again all for the advice!!! | |
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Posted: 11/17/2009 7:33:47 PM |
Society has created almost a monster of what is need in a woman for a man to be satisfied.
I think this is very true. The extremes of things women do to themselves
proves it. | |
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Posted: 11/17/2009 11:04:23 PM | | Your like the type of kid who does one of those Columbine incidents huh lol. Hope i dont see you on the channel 4 news.. | |
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Posted: 11/18/2009 9:22:27 AM | | Wow! I just HAD to reply to this. I too am alone...and I'm 30!!! Just wanted to say that I was very impressed with your response Stray Cat! Absolutley great advice!!!! May use it myself! ;) Thanks for the lesson! | |
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Posted: 11/20/2009 12:42:34 PM | I also couldn't help but reply to this post. .
He accurately summed up what I'm feeling right now (but breaking the female stereotype). .and I'm also older. .33. Stray cat definitely gave some great advice. .it's just a little hard at times to be positive and keep trying. The opposite isn't going to help, but where else do you have but to go upwards in mood/outlook?
Whenwillthiswork26: You couldn't have said it better. .was going to say the exact same thing
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Posted: 11/22/2009 1:04:55 PM | | I know it's a cliche, but you really have to love yourself first. Do things to turn yur focus outward instead of inward, like volunteering. Keep your heart open. It will come when you least expect it. It did for me! It didn't stay, but at least it came, and I know it will come again. | |
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