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Posted: 11/2/2009 7:31:37 PM | I know its long and detailed. I added as people would message me I felt like I was repeating myself often when relplying and just too many messages to go through so in a way I'm hoping some will eliminate themselves. Am I harsh or do I just know what I do and don't want?
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| Do I tell too much?
Posted: 11/2/2009 7:41:22 PM | | I thought it was ok.I like a women that knows how to set boundries from the get go so I can apreciate your profile somewhat.A glimps of your sence of humor would be nice,an example. | |
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| Do I tell too much?
Posted: 11/2/2009 7:49:32 PM | If they're really into you, they'd read it all. Besides, I think it's good that people know most things relating to the type of stuff you talk about, cause that's pretty important issues for a man to take on. A lot of consideration.
You don't want to scare guys off though. They might get the wrong idea and walk away. I wouldn't say confidence is the main issue they have in not contacting you, but it's the attitude you show. A 6'5" guy might just walk away from that little paragraph, it turns them off. But you might be able to word it in a generic way like "I'm looking for a man who's..." and you can talk about his personality and body type (tall, athletic physique) .
Honestly speaking though, most guys wouldn't want to date a girl taller than them either, unless they had a fetish for that kind of stuff. | |
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| Do I tell too much?
Posted: 11/2/2009 7:57:11 PM | The first paragraph is great, and obviously important, but whoever reads your profile has never met you, and it's a bit thick for the very first thing to say. Move it down as your last paragraph.
Since you have so much reference to your faith in God in that paragraph, you don't need to say it so much in the others.
Create a lighter, more fun (dare I say, less cold) opening paragraph. My first thought after reading your profile was "ice queen."
You need to have more interests. Real interests, like things you actually engage in on a regular basis, or things you car about. God, family, volleyball....that can't be all.
Erase your last two paragraphs. No need to explain to the perplexed, and you come off b!tchy. Talk more about yourself instead. Or say a little bit about what you're looking for, rather than what you're not looking for.
Your 2nd paragraph is too large. You should break it up in key places where the topics change.
And add 1-2 close face shots. | |
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| Do I tell too much?
Posted: 11/2/2009 8:06:38 PM | Hi Trustnhim…overall it works. It gives a good sense of who you are and what you want. Fabulous photos…any woman who wears white pants and looks as good as you do has my highest admiration!
A few suggestions…
1) Nix the caption on your photo “I love this outfit”. I do, too…and you look stunning in it, but the caption makes you seem superficial, and you’re far from that.
2) If you’re getting inundated with mail, rethink the bikini shot. Once again, you look great, but the classy guys may be turned off that you’re willing to post this for every guy in town.
3) Your first words are “I have spent the last 2 years in an engaged relationship”. Men see this when they search on you. While you’re getting a lot of email, the quality guy may be running for the hills when he reads those words.
4) When you’re self-employed, it always helps to talk about what you do. You tell him you “love” your work, but quality guys want to know that you’re not just looking for a daddy for your little girl and a meal ticket.
5) For easier readability, make the 2nd paragraph into 2 or 3 paragraphs.
6) The 5’11” height you handled well….and that’s not easy to do without sounding superficial.
7) The things you say you’re looking for in a man would apply to most Christian men over 5’11”, communicative, honest, etc. Are there are OTHER qualities that you could add to your profile so that every Christian male over 5’11” won’t say….Hey, she’s talking about me??
8) That might help give you the time to focus on the men you really want to date rather than just being polite and answering lots of non-qualified emails.
9) In other words…are you looking for a professional man, an athletic man, an extrovert, a quiet man….what kind of man makes you go….WOW!
10) Try to convey that…..and the men writing you will be more what you’re looking for.
Hope that helps. Best to you. DenverSky5280  | |
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| Do I tell too much?
Posted: 11/2/2009 8:17:02 PM | Sweetie - that was probably the most up front profiles I have read. Cheers to you, Maybe just a tad TOO upfront though....
Comments - I would change your main pic to your 4th one as the viewer can see your pretty smile and face so much better. Just crop out that hottie in the background ok?? :-) No competition required. yanno?
I would try and change the part about "being in a relationship for the last 2 years... " as that may bend the wrong impression to a guy. "Is she over him?" "Is she really single??" Get what I am saying here?
Remove the negatives about what you are looking for and only focus on the positives hun... and NEVER apologize for what you are looking for in a man. We all get this is the "net" and that goes without saying. Discount your height and just say you are in search of a man "taller than me". You are what my wonderful G'ma called. "a long tall drink of water". If a guy contacts you that is 5"3"... you can always do the infamous "read/delete" on his happy butt.
if u dont lik ppl tht kant spel, "red/delte" iz unothr gode opsion u 2 hav.
You are a doll and if you can sort past the idiots on here... you will do very well. Some man will be so lucky to catch your heart.
Cheers sugar!
Edit: please ignore my typos hun. One of these days I am going to get reading glasses for when I am at home. :-) I do wish you the best! | |
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