| New User, just looking for some positive (or negative) feedback
Posted: 11/2/2009 11:15:34 PM | If anyone would take a moment to peek at my profile and let me know if anything catches your eye as too cheesy or a severe turn off for the majority of women please let me know. Or if there is anything I might need to rearrange or edit for a better chance at catching someones eye.
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| New User, just looking for some positive (or negative) feedback
Posted: 11/3/2009 5:00:35 AM | there isn't much i would change. i like your pics and you've got a decent amount of interests.
1. move more of your interests (reading and fitness) to that section and instead of talking about the interests, talk about the kind of person you are. you seem very driven and passionate about your future, say that.
2. try to use positive word choice. Instead of saying "I am probably one the the very few guys left that have some respect for a woman. I will hold open doors and pull out chairs, and I may even give you my coat when it is cold out (just kidding I totally would)."....you might want to say: Chivalry isn't dead..I may even give you my coat when it is cold out (just kidding I totally would)." gets the point across with kinder more positive words.
3. and remember because you've listed as "dating" but mention long term, you might get excluded from searches if a woman is searching for long term. just a thought.
happy fishing..... | |
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| New User, just looking for some positive (or negative) feedback
Posted: 11/4/2009 9:38:03 AM | ...and never could understand why people would spend $5.00 for a cup at Starbucks. - Delete. Makes you sound judgmental and it will turn off those women that do enjoy their lattes.
I am probably one the the very few guys left that have some respect for a woman. - Delete. Denegrating other guys is very bad. | |
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| New User, just looking for some positive (or negative) feedback
Posted: 11/4/2009 12:31:08 PM | Just at a quick count every sentence except for 10 of them start with the word I (and some of those sorta do anyway). Vary it--make it interesting to read. I like. I do. I, I, I. There are ways of rewording it, and it would make your profile much more interesting.
Also, what can you put in there to set yourself apart from all the other fishies in the sea? Your profile is good, but you want it to be great. The best way to do that is to put yourself in there. Are you funny? Sweet? Intelligent? Tell us by the things you say and the way you say it. Truthfully, if a guy can make me laugh in the first few sentences, I'm more likely to keep reading.
Happy fishing! | |
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