Hi there,
Your description is the main thing that catches my eye as a problem. One huge block of text is going to put people off reading through it - split it up into paragraphs.
Where to start. Well I actually love my job.
I'd just change this 'I love my job!'
I am thick/chunky whatever your adjective
I'd cut this, no need to be negative about yourself and they can decide from your photos what they think.
I try to be easy going but I am done with the games, the lies, and people who can only talk about it but have no idea how to actually be the things they talk about.
Sounds bitter. I'd cut all this, it doesn't need to be said.
Your age range is incredibly specific, and starts at people a year older than yourself. Although I can see the logic in thinking older men will be less stress and less bothered by you having children perhaps, you're potentially cutting out many of the more mature young men that might want to get in contact. I'd consider changing this to 25 at least.
Once this has been split up to make it more readable then I think you'll have more luck - at the moment all that text is intimidating.
Good luck :)
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