| My Profile Review
Posted: 11/4/2009 8:03:48 PM | My suggestions, take with a grain of salt :)
I would change your pictures around, make the main the one with the grey shirt on with the chick in the capris in the background, but crop her out. The one with your dog (cocker spaniel?), where is that taken? Not trying to be mean, but I would crop that furniture out. No explanation needed there. The picture with the Mercedes in the background, that is a cute picture.
“I'm not sure of my major but in my lifetime I want to be a teachers aide with special education kids, a personal assistant and an administrative assistant.” HUH? You want to be a personal & admin assistant in your lifetime? Or did you mean those were previous jobs? If it's the latter, take it out.
“I currently work at Whole Foods Market as a cashier/bagger.” I understand you go to college and you need to work but I would honestly leave this out. If you have to say something, just say you work part-time while going to school.
“Cheesecake is one of my desserts. Oreo is the best”. Did you mean favorite desserts? If so, combine the two sentences together.
“I like singing and dancing too.” Do you mean karaoke or singing in the church choir? Expand on it.
“Goals: I have a lot of goals for myself. As mentioned above, working towards my profession, having a high paying job one day, live in the country, and find that special woman that I want to be with someday.”
How about something similar to this: My goal is to be a special education teacher, live in the country with the woman I’m in love with and enjoy life to the fullest.
“What I am looking for: Someone who is outgoing, likes to have fun, is funny as well as romantic. A long term relationship. A lady that I can talk to about my hopes and fears as well as being there for me. vice versa.”
Nix the long term relationship. You already said on top that is what you are looking for. Just a sentence that says vice versa doesn’t cut it. Add it to the previous sentence.
You have a range of music and movies (The Transporter movies rock!!), it shows you aren’t stuck on any type of music or movie, which is good.
You are a good looking guy, spend some time on this, check your grammar and you should be good! Also, you may want to look at the emails you are sending.
Best of luck to you! | |
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