| Please can you review my profile
Posted: 11/5/2009 12:37:28 PM | Please can you have a look at my profile and tell me if it sounds and looks ok.
I have never been on a dating site before so i do not know what to do or put and hope i have done it right.
If there is any thing you feel is wrong or i should not or should put please tell me
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| Please can you review my profile
Posted: 11/5/2009 12:55:12 PM | The length is good over all, but I would expand more on who you are, what makes you unique, and what do you enjoy to do.
Also talk abotu the kind of mate your looking for, what qualities are important to you, and what you are exactly looking for.
I would delete the entry on the person not having a picture. It adds a slightly negitive and deffensive tone that you don't want. You wan't your profile to be cheery and inviting. Having the limitation of 'must have picture to message' at the bottom of your profile is enough.
A few more pictures would help, especially ones where your smiling. Again you want your profile to be cheery and inviting. | |
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| Please can you review my profile
Posted: 11/5/2009 1:06:59 PM | Hey,
I looked at your profile and here is my take on it. First you have a nice photo but you need one of you smiling as your primary photo. Grammar needs to be corrected, capitalize all I's and use more commas as well as spell check.
You need to make your profile stand out more. Provide the reader with more details as to who you are and what you're about. It's hard for someone like me to email someone with vague or standard details on their profile. Because the readers of your profile don't have a solid conversation starter. So expand on your interests, you like computers can you build one from scratch? What books do you enjoy reading? Etc, etc.
I believe the warning about not having a photo should be deleted. It's a filter and it's already stated at the bottom of your profile. Try starting sentences with other words than just I. The overuse of words like I, me and myself at the start of sentences causes a stilted effect when reading. So instead of reading sentences that flow from one to the other and read well, the I's make for a one sentence at a time read. | |
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| Please can you review my profile
Posted: 11/5/2009 1:22:09 PM | The other posters have hit most of your “issues” you have going on in your profile.
You main picture like the above post states, needs to be a good face shot with a smile going on. Good lighting etc. You should also have 6-8 pictures on your profile as most guys won’t (can’t) read your About me section. Just stating the facts!
You sound like a risk taker… while that isn’t bad completely, it may frighten off some guys.
I would kill the I’m stubborn comment. ALL guys know how you women are. Well maybe just the old guys like me. A 21 year old may not have learned this one yet.
Take out any negatives in your profile text. I.e. “….rather then (than) just acting like he wants a relationship when he doesn't!” You will have to sort out the weeds from the flowers hun. It’s part of dating.
Your first date section should be reworded so that it will make the guy WANT to surprise you with something fun. Don’t bash the poor bloke before he tries eh?
Cheers! | |
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| Please can you review my profile
Posted: 11/5/2009 2:30:34 PM | | Thankyou for all the comments i am going to go back and look through my profile and try sort it out | |
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| Please can you review my profile
Posted: 11/5/2009 3:19:40 PM | I have now updated the profile so i hope its at least a bit better lol
Also added a new picture only one i have of me really so will try get a new one | |
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