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Posted: 11/5/2009 10:54:06 PM | I'm looking for some constructive criticsism on my profile. What can I do better or differently that still represents my personality? How are my pictures? Any suggestions would be great.
I appreciate your time! Thanks a million.
Dave | |
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Posted: 11/6/2009 9:01:06 AM | my 16 cents.....
1. like that you have a nice background...looks good.
2. great amount of pics. i would suggest some in different outfits and settings, just for variety.
3. add a few more interests. these are good conversation starters.
4. you've given a lot about yourself but not about the person you are trying to meet. add a little more about that person.
happy fishing.....  | |
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Posted: 11/6/2009 9:11:45 AM | Good job. Your profile is well written and you have some good photos.
Age between 25 and 55 You should delete this. It looks a little creepy to say you'll date someone 19 years younger than yourself. | |
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Posted: 11/6/2009 9:13:50 AM | Hi Dave
The pictures are nice, but seem somewhat repetitive to me. You have a picture of you hiking, that's good. Do you have any of you playing golf or doing something else? Your main photo is really nice, but it could be a closer headshot of your smiling face. If nothing else, re-upload it and fix the thumbnail so it shows a nice headshot in the searchable profile gallery.
Your likes in regard to music and movies are good. I'd throw in one example for each (favorite tune/song and movie). That gives a reader something to talk to you about in a first email.
The rest is great, except that I'd try to reword my sentences so not (almost) all of them start with "I".
Lastly I would reconsider the mail setting of 75 miles. I really wish they had an option in between 75 and 20000! Anyway, what if there's a great lady just 76 miles away - she can not contact you! If you are intent on something closer, write in your profile that you prefer it to be a short-distance relationship.
Godo luck to you!! Happy fishing! | |
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Posted: 11/6/2009 9:56:03 AM | | Dave73z28, Your profile is a perfect textbook example of a "good" profile: Easy to read with sentence breaks, spell check on, everything correctly capitalized and punctuated, good selection of overall RECENT pictures, and you come across as likeable and modest. The negative emotional baggage kept to a bare minimum. That said, however, the profile does not distinguish itself from other ho-hum profiles, didn't get a sense of what makes you tick in there. You get exactly one chance to make a good first impression, so make it count! What things/people have motivated your life to be what it is today? Use humor sparingly, if that is your thing. It needs a dollop of pizzazz because you are competing with thousands of similar profiles out there, and basically you've 10 seconds or less to sell a woman on the idea of yourself, so putting "you" in there makes it memorable AND interesting. Like someone else said here, drop the age range, and I'd also drop the "within 75 miles" criteria, she could be in IL or KS... and willing to travel. I'd second the notion of being a little more specific of which type(s) of women you are interested in. Good job and good luck! | |
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Posted: 11/6/2009 7:38:30 PM | | Many thanks to all of you. I'll work on your suggestions! | |
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