1) Use your spacebar between sentences. Running on without spaces when the entire English-speaking/writing world uses spaces between sentences is just weird.
2) You end some of your sentences with commas and then keep going, equally incorrect.
3) You fail to capitalize when appropriate.
4) You could afford to break this text into paragraphs.
5) You have some punctuation issues.
Rather than say that and have you not understand, in case you really don't know, here's your current version:
I enjoy spending time with friends and family,socialising.I work in a hotel in the middle of nowhere which i enjoy very much,its nice to escape from the town and be surrounded by the beautiful countryside.Things i enjoy doing are writing music,watching horror films,reading,its good to just chill out watching movies or listening to music sometimes.Im also a member of a climbing group,its very relaxing and mind clearing out on the mountains.I like allsorts of people-preferably those who can hold a decent dialogue,like straight talkers,controversy,humour.
And here's the fix of the above:
I enjoy spending time with friends and family, socialising. I work in a hotel in the middle of nowhere which I enjoy very much. It is nice to escape from the town and be surrounded by the beautiful countryside.
Things I enjoy doing are writing music, watching horror films, and reading. It is good to just chill out watching movies or listening to music sometimes. I am also a member of a climbing group; it is very relaxing and mind-clearing out on the mountains.
I like all sorts of people -- preferably those who can hold a decent dialogue. I like straight-talkers, controversy and humour.
6) There's no first date info. Add something, anything.
7) You say you have children but say nothing about them. I always like to know number of children, their ages and whether they are full-time (you are primary custodial parent) or not. Personal preference on that one, and I know some single mothers do not want that info out there. Just telling you my preference as a man willing to date a woman with a couple of children but not with six children by four different men and three different races.
Hope this helps a bit.
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