| Review please - too long? too serious?
Posted: 11/6/2009 11:11:32 AM | | Hi. Trying to it the right tone here (it sounds serious to me, but maybe just because I've been looking at it for so long!), and wonder if it might be too long (if so, what should I cut out?) Thanks for any help! | |
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| Review please - too long? too serious?
Posted: 11/6/2009 11:35:55 AM | Hi there; I know I'm not entirely your target audience, but I enjoyed reading your profile - in my view, you've got the right kind of tone, in the sense that you provide a reflection of yourself, your character and personality.
My one reservation is my perception was that it perhaps was a bit long - on second reading, the 'about me' section is fine, and it's the 'about you' bit that drags out a little; from having read guidance elsewhere on these forums, it seems that one should be wary of writing in such a way that would exclude people from messaging you; so while you're making very valid points about what you aren't looking for in a partner, perhaps some of them would be best kept out of the profile. I'm afraid I can't give you examples of what I mean, because my computer is misbehaving and won't let me have your profile open in another window while I type this!
I hope this in some way helps.
Best regards,
Robert
PS I wonder if you might in turn cast your eye over my profile, and see if there are any areas you can see that might require attention? I've posted a thread about it on the forum - you can reply there, if you will. Many thanks. | |
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