| Looking for some great profile advice
Posted: 11/7/2009 12:25:03 PM | Hi everyone im just changing some things up in my profile and want some help on how I can make it better. It seams like im hardly getting anybody to message me anymore so any help will be appreciated. If brutal honesty is needed bring it on im ready for it I know something in my profile must be either making girls not even look at me or not want to message me. Well thanks in advance.
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| Looking for some great profile advice
Posted: 11/7/2009 2:10:28 PM | The 3rd, 5th or 7th picture would make better main images. You have incredible blue eyes and those great smile lines. Work it. But nice tongue, though....
For me, I found the lack of punctuation a bit distracting (use commas in your first paragraph - use exclamation marks to emphasize enthusiasm or humour).
What general type of business is it that you own? Can you either change the occupation description or throw a line in the profile about it? It's a bit vague right now and the female mind will assume the worst (porn site webmaster; paper route; escort).
.. and the North Pole is in Canada. Don't argue with me. | |
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| Looking for some great profile advice
Posted: 11/7/2009 2:38:10 PM | Yeah i used to have all of those as my main image at one time but figured I would change it to get a new picture up there instead of the same old thing. Thanks for the compliments.
Im not the best with punctuation I can see what you mean though, I think I fixed the first sentence up better hows it look?
I just started my business a few months ago so thats why I didn't put any info up there about it since I have yet to make money and am still in the negative. Its a car repo company and I have two other jobs so I just didn't know what to put. I also work construction, mainly finish carpentry during the week and then on weekends I work janitorial at a local bar. So I don't really know what to put for my occupation. What do you think?
And I never said The North Pole, haha North Pole is just a city in Alaska close to Fairbanks.
Thanks for your help and what do you think of the changes?
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| Looking for some great profile advice
Posted: 11/7/2009 3:35:27 PM | Hey Jordan
Photo number three...?? Huh? The rest are quite alright :)
I like what you have written. There's just this thing I have about starting too many sentences with "I". Other than that you did a nice job. :) | |
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| Looking for some great profile advice
Posted: 11/7/2009 4:58:59 PM | So I changed the third picture. The one that replaced it is now the 4th picture which is kinda weird too. I guess I was in kind of a weird picture taking mood that night. And yes I just looked and I do have to get rid of more I's haha and I had already gotten rid of a bunch. Lol thanks for the 
Jordan | |
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| Looking for some great profile advice
Posted: 11/7/2009 5:09:01 PM | The changes look great. By the way, you've got a little of that Jake Gyllenhal thing going on for ya. ;)
I'll let you have the "North Pole" points. This time. | |
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