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Well this needs to be 200 letters long, so I'll most more until it gets to be 200 letters long.
I hope this is long enough now. It's just a profile review. I guess the rest of this post is on the profile.
So anyway, I'll see if it's at least 200 letters now. I hope so, as the last time it erased my message.
And I had to type it over again. No big deal. But it would be nice to not have to do that again.
Okay here goes. | |
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| women only - please review my profile - thank you
Posted: 8/21/2010 4:11:13 PM | pssst... men are free spirits too why not let them participate in the review?
Seems a bit preachy, a bit holier than thou, as it were. Also, comes off as if you are trying very hard to be/sound cool. Nothing wrong with being cool however; those hips cats don't have to try, they just are. The general percepts of your profile are just a bit over the top much for my tastes, but then again, I may be one of those birdies stuck in a cage, unenlightened.
Heck, it seems way out in left field for even those in the big city of hip, Boulder, CO - the center of the universe.
It will resonate with some white bird in a golden cage however.
TCW
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Posted: 8/21/2010 4:47:26 PM |
Seems a bit preachy, a bit holier than thou, as it were. Also, comes off as if you are trying very hard to be/sound cool. Nothing wrong with being cool however; those hips cats don't have to try, they just are. The general percepts of your profile are just a bit over the top much for my tastes, but then again, I may be one of those birdies stuck in a cage, unenlightened.
Thanks for the complement, TCW.
My profile seems very non conventional to me, so it's surprising it would seem cool to anyone.
What is the holier than thou bit, the long paragraph? I added that part today.
I don't really care if men or whoever comments. Anyone is welcome to comment. | |
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Posted: 8/21/2010 4:53:05 PM | When you can, get a current full-body shot put up there.
Restricting males from reviewing you not only deprives you of half the good advice you might get (if the feisty POF males accept your restriction, heh heh) -- don't you think it is ironic compared to the main theme of your profile (we should all be free to do as we like)?
I'll do that, when I get one. Thanks.
It's not ironic. Why would it be ironic. I did not say we should all be free to do as we like.
Update: I've removed the long paragraph. | |
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Posted: 8/21/2010 7:25:48 PM | From forum rules...
All requests for a review cannot exclude anyone from reviewing it or only ask for a certain segment of the users to review it.
Now, don't you feel dumb? | |
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Posted: 8/21/2010 7:29:01 PM | | Well, I am only a guy, but you need recent photos. Who cares about what you looked like 21 years ago, or 6 years ago? Have a friend, or pay someone to take a head shot, a full body shot and several photos doing what you enjoy doing. | |
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Posted: 8/21/2010 7:40:40 PM | I think most women would take one look at your "interests" box and run the other way.
Not because you're interests aren't good. Simply because there are so many redundancies. You have a tremendous list of interests, which could be fun to read if they were all different, but you could easily narrow that list to 10 things and still get your point across.
For example, you put down...
- "living a simple lifestyle" & "living better with less" & "living in the country"
- "having organic food" & "growing organic veggies" & "perennial vegetables" & "biological food preservation"
- "hearing the wind in the trees" & "the beauty of a storm" &"the peacefulness of the calm" & "skies so clear i can see the stars at night"
- "being physically fit" & "being healthy"
- "solar energy" &"water and resource conservation"
All that could easily be shortened to...
"living a simple life, organic food/gardening, nature, staying healthy, environmentalism"
Also, I don't think everything there is necessary. Is "having fresh clean water", really an *interest*? Just because it's important to you, doesn't mean you have to list it in that box.
Your About Me box is actually pretty good. Talking about your hobbies and what you like is nice, but it would be great if you had a little more about your personality. Just say a few things about what kind of person you are. Try to be confident, but not arrogant. Think about what kind of company/friend you are, to others and try to convey that. Emphasize your good points, but be honest.
The first date box. Well, your first sentence is good, but it goes downhill, fast.
"I prefer a woman who communicates easily, is active and takes good care of herself."
It's okay to say what you'd like in a partner, but there's one thing wrong with this: Wrong box. This has nothing to do with a first date. It should be in your About Me section.
"|.............| Put this on your
|.............| profile if you know someone
|...\o/......| who has walked into a
|.....|.......| Patio Door that was
|..../.\......| CLOSED!!!!!! (even if it's... YOU)
|.............| "
It's cute and funny, but again, WRONG BOX. Put it at the end of your About Me section.
And try to add a little to that first sentence. You said somewhere quiet and peaceful. What kind of place? What would you do there? What would you like to talk about with her? Things like that. Get creative.
And just as a side note, I noticed you put down "Undecided/Open" for "Do you want children?". I'm gonna be a little blunt here. You're 64 years old. I would imagine that any woman you might be seeing is at least within 10-15 years of your age. And I think that might be scaring some women off. The fact is, 64 year old women DON'T WANT MORE KIDS, even if they could still have them. Unless you're very seriously considering having children, I'd change that. Women don't want to feel like you'd expect kids, whether that's the truth or not.
Hope some of this helps. Good luck. ^_^ | |
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Posted: 8/21/2010 11:09:46 PM | GypsyGirl20,
Thank you for taking the time to post your awesome suggestions.
You make great points and they are much appreciated.
Very helpful, thanks.
=^..^=
And just as a side note, I noticed you put down "Undecided/Open" for "Do you want children?".
I don't want to have children, but am fine with a woman having children or grandchildren already.
Basically I wasn't sure how to answer that question. | |
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Posted: 8/22/2010 1:36:33 AM | Profile reviews are open to all regardless of gender or sexual orientation. No special treatment if some of us straight guys actually do this vs. the other Neanderthals that spend their time stepping on feline caudal appendages and pounding on their primate thoraces.
Your profile sounds too dreamy to me. It seems all about what you "would like" in the Hotel California. "Would" is a conditional mode of language and requires the if... to make it come true. I'd suggest you be more explicit with that if... in your profile. Otherwise your profile reads like a horoscope ... could fit anyone. In other words it is generic. That is not good.
But ... there is some grace if you dig into it. I see someone concerned for conservation and interested in a green life. When I was done I thought. Hmmm, here's a guy who is dreaming at 64 of living a green life but he doesn't seem to have it in his grasp yet (or he is hiding that he does). That's all I took away. I hope you find that last hopeless dreamer girl out there before she packs it up...
The rambling interests were fine but as mentioned would benefit if condensed. If you really talk anything like you write: e.g., the peacefulness of the calm I think a lot of women could become impatient with you. But you don't care ... you want that special one, another dreamer who can sit idly on the rocker with you rambling while some elves keep your home functioning off grid both in the city or in a hut somewhere far away.
Have you ever actually installed a wind generator? They create quite a racket and leave no time for peace nor calm ... and are frequently in need of tending ... don't let me get into solar panels (I built my own from scratch) and banks of batteries and controllers. My only point is you write as it you are ready to go on Walden Pond in an austere shack ... and think many amenities of the big city are coming with you without considering the work ... Sure - there may be things unmentioned in this profile and you may be a retired whiz kid who can treat and seal a solar panel effectively after humidity gets in, or build a parabolic tracker and power it by a waterfall, or just be wealthy to let your silver do everything, but none of this is indicated in the profile so the girl of your dreams might just never know...
And are we being pedantic with perennial veggies, or do you have something against annuals? Trying to exclude pot? Still doesn't make much sense. If there is an explanation ... it would be interesting profile Velcro.
"Drive a nail home, and secure it so faithfully that you can wake up in the night and think of your work with satisfaction."
I cite the preceding quote in the sense it can be applied to profiles!
Best of luck
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Posted: 8/27/2010 9:40:44 AM | Thank you all for the helpful suggestions.
I have incorporated them and updated my profile.
Let me know what you think.
Best regards | |
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