| | Review pleasePage 1 of 1 | | I was wondering if the good natured sarcasm comes through as conceited. I would appreciated any useful feedback. I have not had any luck on this site at all and I figured I would try this. Do I need more pictures? Also, I know I spelled intelligence wrong, it was supposed to be funny. I thank you in advance. | |
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Posted: 5/28/2012 10:42:40 PM | A main photo would be much better if it were well lit, you were looking directly into the camera and smiling as if you were happy to see your imaginary viewer. Full length casual shots are also appreciated by guys (visual creatures, right?)
Your generic Interests should be replaced with one or two specific examples.
The profile itself is OK and your light humour does come through, but you could easily add more detail about things you enjoy.
The line about long hair can go and be replaced with a more positively spun description of maybe a more 'clean cut' style that is your kryptonite (or whatever).
Are you writing to guys YOU find interesting? | |
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Posted: 5/29/2012 8:23:36 AM | You need pics!
<-- click my History link for more on pics.
Your About Me and First Date are full of negatives and demanding.
Talk about what you like, love, and want. Not what you hate, and don't want. Avoid "I do", just say "I". Avoid "You must", "just be", "I don't", "I'm not", "but please", "not". Be positive and upbeat.
Sounds like you are looking for a "Stepford husband" to program. | |
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Posted: 5/29/2012 11:08:33 AM | | Your profile is fine, but based on your picture alone, I wouldn't think you were funny at all. The profile pic doesn't go with the 'about me' section. I would definitely suggest more pics or at least a better profile pic of you smiling or actually doing something. | |
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Posted: 5/29/2012 3:40:42 PM | | talking about "dazzling good looks" doesn't work when your picture doesn't back it up. You're not even smiling... | |
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Posted: 5/29/2012 8:08:09 PM | | Thank you for the feedback. I will work on the pictures. Obviously I didn't spend any time on that. Maybe do a little editing and see how that goes. | |
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