| | Hi! Review meh plzPage 1 of 1 | | Hi, just wondering what you guys thought of my profile. I've revised it a few times and it's gotten a little better each time but I think I'm getting less than 10% of women to respond. 200 chars seems steep just to ask for a review. Oh well ! | |
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| Hi! Review meh plz
Posted: 7/2/2012 1:29:35 PM | | make pic number 3 or 4 your avatar. the one you have now looks like you are in a toothpaste commercial | |
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| Hi! Review meh plz
Posted: 7/2/2012 1:47:54 PM | Thanks. i'm working on getting more pictures but i just don't think i look very good in any of them.
Anything besides the visual? | |
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| Hi! Review meh plz
Posted: 7/2/2012 1:56:18 PM | | Since you are 29, maybe an interest "cool shit" is kinda weird. You say you like words and I think that is great. Maybe throw in a cute poem (penned by you) about the gal you will meet. | |
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Posted: 7/2/2012 2:18:29 PM | | I want a re-do! Just be yourself. For some reason, it just doesn't seem like the person in the pictures is the same one that wrote the profile. And "Mind Blower?" Seriously? | |
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| Hi! Review meh plz
Posted: 7/2/2012 4:12:12 PM | The first paragraph is kind of a poem. The fishing analogy makes it about the women, so i guess that's too nerdy?
I really want people to read the description and be entertained by it's uniqueness, so i pretty much edit it every time i check my mail. Everything i wrote was true, I'm not sure who you expected to see in the pic. | |
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| Hi! Review meh plz
Posted: 7/4/2012 2:26:58 PM | | Gonna bump this and see if anyone else has any suggestions. I've been fleshing out the first date and about me sections. | |
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| Hi! Review meh plz
Posted: 7/4/2012 2:39:47 PM | You need more variety in pics. Get outdoors. The smile in your primary pic is forced/fake.
<-- click my History for my pic guidelines.
Capitalize your Interests, or don't, but not half and half.
Delete:
and send the note back
You use the word "I" (or a form of it) 35 times. About a third of those you didn't capitalize it. Run spell check.
Don't
:P yourself.  | |
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| Hi! Review meh plz
Posted: 7/4/2012 5:14:30 PM | | Thanks for the advice. I edited out some "I's" and think i got all the capitalizations. my major hang-up seems to be my pictures still and I'll work on it. | |
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