| | unbelievable ?Page 1 of 1 | So many visitors, but they move on.
The one girl that was kind enough to comment when asked said my profile is too good to be true, i am too good with words and so seem like a player.
how does an emotionally intelligent guy write something genuine without ladies thinking that? | |
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Posted: 7/4/2012 4:12:48 PM | | Yes i am asking for a review please and any comments are more than appreciated. | |
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Posted: 7/4/2012 4:48:15 PM | The comment may have been related to your pic captions, or might have been sarcastic. A standard of perfection in everything may be setting the bar too high for potential candidates.
Correct the spelling error in your Interests.
"Beautiful" in the first sentence makes you look shallow.
You improperly capitalized several words in the 6th sentence. "Sex" is a little too much, maybe change it to "intimacy".
Grammar is not my strong suit, but I believe the sentences that you start with "For" aren't right.
I would remove: "non game player".
I like to meet up for a coffee somewhere, usually for about 4ish and I always That sounds like you do it a lot and is very self focused.
If it still feels right, and the connection takes over, from then on... who knows :) This is a little too suggestive.
The beach pic may be interpreted by some to be prohibited and/or offensive. | |
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Posted: 7/5/2012 6:33:40 AM | Perhaps she was just polite...or she made a sarcastic remark reference to your pictures which all starts with the word 'perfect'....On a personal note I find the word perfect a bit shallow and used by people who lack the depth to reflect.
Interests fx socialising, smiles, enjoying life, conversation, friends, love...isn't really interests it dosen't tell anything other than you are exactly like 99.9% of the other people out there, it dosen't give the reader any idea of what you do.
Beautifull is a more meaningful word than pretty, so as long she is beautfiful personality dosen't matter as much?
Never ever, talk about anything intimate, are any remarks on a womans appperance. fx if you arent really into overweight girls, just emphasize that you like being aktive and live a healthy life.
Never ever talk about sex....99.9999% men loves sex, that you need to say it, just make you seem like a desperat pervert....and we dont really need the internet to come in contact wiht thoose.
Also you dont need to repeat your 'interests' in the text...and maybe be a little more specific instead of just listing words.
Full and active facebook??? what in the world does that mean, that you need to check up on it every 5minuts, that you need to 'befriend' everybody you come in contact with? | |
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Posted: 7/7/2012 12:54:40 AM | yeah, your pic captions with "perfect" in them would definitely not attract the right kind of woman. it kinda sounds "catalog-ish"
kinda makes me think of the "perfect pushup" for some reason... lol
oh, and replace the passionate about "Sex" with maybe "Intimacy" or something.... cuz in your First Date section, it kinda sounds like the night would lead to.... "Intimacy" ya dig??
but anyway, take my comment with a grain of salt. my profile is crap, but i don't care. tee hee. ;) | |
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Posted: 7/7/2012 4:21:33 AM | What do men and women want?
In her profile she needs to match up to male expectations to get male attention. In yours you have to match up to female expactations to get female attention. The men are most interested in how the women look and women are most interested in how the guys makes them feel. | |
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Posted: 7/7/2012 4:41:27 AM | | I don't see where your profile could be interpreted as "too good to be true." | |
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Posted: 7/7/2012 5:09:02 AM | I'd also add he needs to remove sex as one of his interests from the profile.
His profile is hard to read as the sentences arent structured right. This is especially true for the first date section and oh look again more sex references at the end of it. Severe no no my friend. | |
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Posted: 7/7/2012 5:23:48 AM |
my profile is too good to be true, i am too good with words and so seem like a player.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
That's just a code for NOT INTERESTED.
Something in your profile turned them off.
I missed the sex references but you can bet that played a part.
I don't see where your profile could be interpreted as "too good to be true."
^^^^^^^Me either.
Show some humor as if you may possibly be fun to know/date. | |
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Posted: 7/7/2012 7:42:30 AM | you say you want a relationship, but it reads like you want a booty call. your pics are good. i'd date you off them...until i start reading--in the first paragraph you're on 'beautiful' 'pretty' and 'sex' and you end with the suggestion that the first date will end up in bed.
lower your expectations and time frame for the first date--drop the 'if things go well' (more likely they won't, sorry, and you'll want a more graceful out) and maybe phrase your want for a sexy partner more like 'takes care of herself', stays active, etc. | |
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Posted: 7/7/2012 7:45:14 AM | | oh, and what is your full facebook life supposed to mean? the only way i could appreciate that is if you're clearer in offering to let potential dates check you out there. | |
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