| | not much luck, care to review?Page 1 of 1 | Honestly, I don't get many views. The gals that I do get views from though are ones that I have messaged; However, I do not receive many replies back interested or otherwise. The amount of replies I get is somewhere around 10% and I have not been contacted first ever.
Please review my profile and tell me how I can make it better
I do want one thing left be though. My identity is a knight and I live up to it. | |
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Posted: 7/8/2012 11:19:06 PM | Wow. Where to start. Well, skip that you are an atheist. Not that it matters, but you can discuss that later. It's an option at the top of your profile to indicate you are Non-Religious. You can cut back a bit or condense the whole White Knight thing. It's charming and cute, but I don't think too many 20 year old women understand the concept.
You need one full length body photo. You indicate you have an athletic body, well, show us with a fitted short sleeve t-shirt that shows off the guns. That will do wonders for your responses. Also, I always advise men to be well groomed before taking a photo and no bathroom self pics. It's just wrong. | |
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Posted: 7/8/2012 11:19:54 PM | | Oh, ladies love suggestions for a first date, so have stuff ready. It is, after all, chivalrous. | |
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Posted: 7/9/2012 10:34:48 AM | The upward angle is not good in pics, it is better to accentuate eyes and smiles with teeth, rather than a view of nostrils.
<-- click my History for my pics guidelines.
The religion line is fine if you want to keep it. Some Christians will bash you for it. But, you will loose a few fanatics from it. Your choice.
Delete:
FYI
I do tend to be extremely shy. So if I messaged you, know I'm really trying hard to get to know you, but I deter really easily from girls so if there's no reply, I take the hint and lose any persistence to contact you again. Unnecessary, bad vibe, negative.
Suggest an actual First Date.
Length and content is good.
Have you experienced LARP? If so, add it to your Interests, if not you may want to look into it. You would fit right in. There is another group called something like SRC or SCR, but I couldn't locate it. Just FYI.
Embrace who you are, there are plenty of fishes on POF of every style, interest, conviction, religion, vice and sexual preference. Don't remake yourself in someone else's image.
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Posted: 7/9/2012 7:20:55 PM | Cool.
"it's" (with an apostrophe) in the final sentence.
Delete:
First dates always seem to be really fun for me. I delight in listening to people and telling them stories of my own. Makes it sound like you do it a lot.
Delete:
Ending the night with a movie is my favorite way to end a date. By the end of a date, I want to be able to ask "how was your day?" and have you know that I really want to know. It's too long for a First Date, and a little much.
Delete:
- Age
- Distance
- Hang Out
- Activity Partner
from your Mail Settings. Just try it, and screen in your empty Inbox.
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Posted: 7/9/2012 7:24:31 PM | You're cute, but you look about 16 in the pictures.. I'd leave the atheist thing.. God fairing people, note that they are, and no one is telling them to take that out..
...You have way to many do not message if.. settings set.. you're limiting yourself right there. | |
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Posted: 7/9/2012 7:44:15 PM | You need some pictures where your facial expression varies. That smirky thing with the lips isn't working for you.
I'll chime in on the atheist thing. The point you seem to be making is that while you do not practice a religion you appreciate the ethic or ethos. When someone identifies as an "atheist" in the USA -- as opposed to Europe -- they are usually Christopher Hitchens types who think the whole thing is a bunch of crap. You don't seem that hardcore about it and I doubt you would mind having a girlfriend who went to church every week as long as she did not attempt to convert you.
The first date section should be kept brief. With online dating they usually are not the first date but the first meeting where you decide whether or not you would like to go out on a date with that person. I've always put something like "meet for tea, a walk in the park, visit a zoo". | |
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Posted: 7/10/2012 3:40:08 PM | | Like I said, I am working on better pictures lol. I'm either much to un-photogenic or far to self conscious. You sir hit the atheist thing on the spot. I've dated a few girls who went to church regularly, I even went to services and helped at the front desk. All whilst cracking jokes about me not being on fire yet. | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 5:35:50 PM | | Ok guys and gals, I have taken your advice and put up new pictures. I worked on my profile a little bit too. Can I get some more reviewing? | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 5:51:46 PM | 4 pics, only 2 shirts, only 1 caption.
More pics, more shirts, more captions.
The first paragraph is not properly paginated/word wrapped.
Take out an "Enter" before "One thing". Take out another before "I am atheist".
Reword/punctuate: "I am atheist; However,..." to: "I'm an atheist, however...".
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Posted: 7/15/2012 6:15:13 PM | | I'd say drop the atheist thing, unless you write books like Dawkins or Harris. It won't help you. Also, you look younger than 20, you might want to grow some facial hair. | |
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