| | Wondering where I am going wrong...Page 1 of 1 | I have been on and off POF for a while, but seeing as I have become a permanent resident in Nunavut, I am looking for , well, anything really ... I live in a remote area of Canada, where not too many people travel, but few do live - and are on this site - if they're contractors / brought up for work.
I'm just looking for some constructive criticism on what I can do better on my profile to get more responses... even if it's people to chat with across the country....
Sorry this is so vague but it's my first time posting in this forum.
Any help would be appreciated - if people have the time :)
Thank you for taking the time to help! :)
Bernadette | |
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Posted: 7/14/2012 9:11:17 PM | | I just took a look, and to me, if I were a guy reading your profile, I might be turned off from the I tend to be very sarcastic line, and the fact you dont want children, as alot of guys would like to settle down and have kids one day. | |
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Posted: 7/14/2012 9:15:18 PM | | I honestly don't do well with children, and I am unable to conceive ... so I'm not sure how to go about that... but I can see where you're coming from on the sarcastic thing. | |
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Posted: 7/14/2012 10:18:14 PM | I personally would lose photos 2,3,4 very much similar to to the first, which btw is a very pretty pic :) and i would lose this line, "but I know there are still those with a different outlook on body-art!". no need to say that, if they have an issue with body art they'll skip over anyways :)
sorry i'm not much help on the rest. | |
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Posted: 7/14/2012 11:06:20 PM | Overall, I think your profile needs some softening in how you write your sentences. I've made some suggestions for you to see the difference between how you say something and how it can be softened.
I've lived in Iqaluit for 2 years now and I'm originally from Southwestern Ontario (I'll let you have 3 guesses, as to where).
I know you mean to possibly encourage a message from somebody with a guess, but really asking people to guess is like making them go through hoops. Why should they guess? and how would it be obvious where you are from in SW Ontario --kinda big place SW Ontario -- if that is what you are thinking?
I'm extremely outgoing, I enjoy hanging out with friends; whether it be going out or staying in. I don't get offended easily, and it takes quite a bit to upset me. I know it's generally not a huge deal to most people, but I do have tattoos; 6 to be precise.
Extremely is well, extreme - people tend to shy away from extremes. Why not just say I am an outgoing person and enjoy hanging out with firends whether going out or staying in. Not sure why you bring up not getting offended and easily and it takes quite a bit to upset you --who would think to offend you or why do you anticipate offense and upset? I don't think saying those things helps your profile unless there is a reason to bring them up hence my question. As for the tattoos, I would just write I have a few tattoos, period, no need to say it's generally not a huge deal. As Cheeky said, if it bothers somebody they will go to the next profile.
I've recently lost my father, but as much as I miss him - it's helped me grow much more as an individual, and to realize how short our time can be. I was raised well, taught well, and loved unconditionally... I respect everyone, unless I'm given a reason to lose said respect. I take pride in my intelligence but I do not let that get in the way of being myself, I am well educated and attentive to detail - which has lead me on a promising career path.
First, sympathies for your loss. Would write: My father recently passed away, and as much as I miss him it has helped me grow as a person and has made me realize how short our time can be. I was raised in a loving home, taught well and I respect everyone unless or until a person gives me reason not to. As for saying your well educated, well they will see you have a degree on your profile, kind of in your face to say it that way - how about: My education combined with attention to detail has lead me to a promising career path. Not sure what you are saying by taking pride in your intelligence but do not let it get in the way of being yourself? How can intelligence get "in the way"; unless there is something of importance there, I would take that out.
I listen to all types of music; I love to dance, as well as sit back and relax to some good old classic rock. I also enjoy playing (get ready for the cliché) games on the Wii when I have time to do so.
You may want to bring this up to your other interests, and why would it be a cliche? Would take that bit out.
I know Iqaluit is a small town, but there are diamonds in the rough up this way... If you'd like to talk, please don't hesitate to contact me! :)
Make complete sentences: I know Iqualit is a small town but I am sure there are more than a few diamonds in the rough and I would love to meet one! If you would like to know more then send me a message :).
Actually, you should add a few sentences describing the type of man you hope to meet.
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Posted: 7/15/2012 7:53:07 AM | The primary pic is great, then the pics go downhill from there. More and new pics.
<-- click my History for my pic guidelines.
I would change the Fish Personality to "None".
"Nothing serious" is FWB/NSA-sex on this site, and screens you from the 70% of the membership looking for a "Relationship".
The Headline is one of my favorite overused headlines. I'm neutral on it.
The Username could be an issue. It is easily changed. I'm kind of neutral on that too.
Do you send messages or Flirts to men?
The more often you log into your Inbox, the more activity you will get.
Use each menu function and make sure they have the right age and distance settings in them.
Keep Fishing!  | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 2:17:05 PM | The username is French, it just means Beautiful Dangerous.
I don't understand what you mean about my pictures going downhill ... they are all recent within the past 4 weeks, for the exception of the last one.... I don't go out on the land with people much, so it's hard to have someone take a picture of me ...
But thank you for the assistance :):) | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 2:22:16 PM | As for the not wanting children, I would just leave it there. There are many men who don't want children.
You are being honest without disclosing too much.
I like the last photo on the right. It shows off your pretty eyes.
Happy fishing! | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 3:40:16 PM | I understood the French. The question is does "dangerous" have positive connotations? Internet dating can be dangerous, no need to identify yourself as dangerous.
I would date the girl in the primary (pink top, dark hair pic) in a heartbeat. I don't think I would be interested in the girl in the "walk" pic. (Unless I was stuck in the wilderness for months. Which is plausible in your case.) Frankly, the climbing pic accentuates your butt, and it is prohibited since your face is not recognizable. Group pics are highly discouraged.
Just being honest and seriously trying to help! | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 9:49:40 PM | Well, I've changed the name, ... and some stuff in my profile, along with the pictures ....
Any other suggestions? | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 10:06:11 PM | Much better pic selection!
Rotate #1 and #4 as primary weekly. Different pics will appeal to different people.
Try for 12 Interests.
I like it. Good job.
Keep Fishing! | |
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Posted: 7/17/2012 7:45:00 PM | | I didn't see your profile before the improvements. I think the photos are a good variety. What you wrote sounds good but it would probably be helpful if you described a little bit of what kind of man you'd like to meet. I have no clue what your headline means but then again I never pay any attention to what the headline on men's profiles say so perhaps it doesn't matter. | |
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