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| | I'd appreciate some feedback on my profile, please.Page 1 of 1 | | If any of you can offer me some feedback on my profile, I'd appreciate it. It is pretty much who I am, though I'm told it makes me sound too bookish, and not exciting enough. For example, it has been suggested that instead of saying I just returned from a study trip to Eastern Europe, I should say I love tropical vacations. But, I don't want to lie. And someone who likes hot, sandy beaches would not really be a good match for me. I have a great sense of humor, very dry, and that doesn't translate well to profiles. So I might sound more serious that I actually am. Personally, I think it is an interesting profile, but it's not getting me much action... OK, it's no getting me ANY action ;) Help? | |
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| I'd appreciate some feedback on my profile, please.
Posted: 7/15/2012 10:57:00 AM | Nice profile!
More photos would be great and show off your smile! You have 8 slots to fill! Go for a variety of pics.
Your profile is well written, but a tad dry. Inject a touch of humour!
Are you writing to men you find interesting? | |
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| I'd appreciate some feedback on my profile, please.
Posted: 7/15/2012 11:07:31 AM | What ^she^ said.
Be yourself, let your personality come through, be genuine and sincere.
Try to avoid busy prints in your pics.
Some guidelines on pics:
Pics need to show a variety of clothes, settings and activities, with a SMILE!
Self cell/webcam pics are always bad.
Avoid all of the following: Sunglasses, hats, kids, wedding rings, your tongue and middle finger, members of target sex (even if it is your sibling), dead animals/fish, guns, bare torso pics (prohibited), sleeveless shirts, more than one with alcohol, your friends or party scenes (if any), cluttered backgrounds and the bathroom mirror.
Get outdoors! If you have a motorcycle or a dog, do a pic with them (not of them)! Travel pics, outdoor and activity pics are great, as long as you didn't try to crop your ex out. You need at least one full-height pic showing your body type. The pics should be good quality, good lighting, have a clear image of your face including your EYES and a SMILE!
Each pic should have a creative caption, at least one of which should have a date. Try to get 3 good (head and shoulders) primary pics. Rotate the primary once a week. Use Viewed Me to track effectiveness. If anyone tells you to "use this one, not that one", all that means is that it should be one of your primary pics. Different pics will appeal to different people. Rotate them, and did I say: SMILE!
So, you say that you don't have any good pics, and don't have anyone to take them for you. Hire a professional photographer if you can, if not: Clean your cell phone lens, go out in public and ask someone to help. The cutie down the hall, the Barista at Starbucks, the lady walking her dog in the park, the guy shooting pool at the bar. Anyone. People like helping other people. You might even get a date!
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| I'd appreciate some feedback on my profile, please.
Posted: 7/15/2012 11:13:36 AM | Thanks, Irish Eyez, I'll try to get more pictures on. As for the humor, it's dry. Most people take it seriously. I'll give it some thought. Probably shouldn't do any guy walks into the bar jokes, though, right?
And, yes, I am sending off emails to men I find physically and intellectually attractive. To men who's attraction is simply a cleverly written profile. Geeky guys, gorgeous guys, older guys, younger guys. Guys with whom I have a lot in common, guys who have interests other than mine that I think might be fun to try. Short emails, long emails. I've only been doing this for about 6 weeks, so I'm still learning the ropes.
Thanks for the input. I'm hanging in there. | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 12:44:44 PM | Okay, I've added two more pictures. One with a "somewhat" clever caption. Does that count for humor?
You've suggested I add humor to my profile, but all that comes to mind right now is a really bad pun. Do I dare add after my comment "Like a good martini, my sense of humor is dry; shaken, not stirred..." something as lame as "Olive a good laugh?" That even makes me cringe. Aargh... | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 1:06:51 PM | 3-legged dog walks into a bar and says "I'm looking for the man who shot m'paw."
God knows why, but I practically start laughing as soon as anyone says anything walks into a bar. This is totally irrelevant to your profile review.
Re: Previous Advice (mentioned in your opening post)
You appear to have a propensity to ignore advice. This makes me laugh, because I'm the same damn way.
However
I think you could clear up both those previous criticisms with a little more thought, and without any sort of masquerade.
Um. You should wait til you're feeling strong, to read the rest of my advice.
I mean it well, but it's not the kind of stuff that sugar coating will stick to.
And of course, it's just one opinion, worth exactly what you paid.
1. Bookish -- there's bookish, and then there is "too bookish."
If you're bookish, then agree, the profile needs to not hide that. You want a bookish guy or at least a man who loves bookish women.
2. Exciting -- another way to say "not exciting enough" would be "unexciting" and another word for that is "dull."
I've never seen a profile I'd describe as exciting and wouldn't even see why that would be a goal.
How fortunate that making it not-too-bookish will also make it less dull. Two birds, one stone.
Re: Humor
Putting humor in it might actually be the only stone you need.
Classic mistake is to write about being funny and then put not one funny thing in the profile. Remove all references to fun and humor. Demonstrate fun and funnyness directly in your profile via your writing.
Not everyone is a writer. And it's hard work to create a profile that's as close as you can get to who you really are. That is all the more reason to NOT avoid the work -- so few can be bothered. When I click open a profile where they couldn't be bothered themselves to make it at least presentable, I can't be bothered either, and click back out.
The more you can avoid using the typical profile cliches, the more you'll stand out, in a good way. This is crucial.
p.s. I HATE PUNS, but yours suggested above made me snig ger. It's a thing you can tweak until you have a sense it represents you accurately and there's a certain satisfacton in that, too.
Re: Photos
Agreed, you should get more when you can.
Good that you have a full body shot, always keep at least one of those in the lineup.
The head shot/main photo is good. Well lit, well composed, well focused, etc.
But I wasn't sure if you were male or female until I clicked open the profile to see it close up (and of course the one in the skirt). That's not due to your features, but may be due to the choice of blouse (could be a man's shirt) and/or my bifocals didn't pick up the earrings in thumbnail size.
Re: Responses
I'm glad you're willing to initiate contact. Another good advice is to just not give up. He's out there for ya.
happy fishing | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 1:52:58 PM | I don't even know what a badge is. Is it that picture of a fish that says I am an upgraded member? Sure, I could remove that. What is the rationale?
So, you don't like my "olive" joke either? Can't do the paper umbrella joke. Those aren't found in a martini. Umbrellas are in drinks for wimps. Real women don't do umbrella drinks ;)
And something about the plastic sword for my olive might be misconstrued as suggestive, no?
Should I go ahead and try one of those "guy walks into a bar" jokes? I actually have one about martinis. And I actually think that "guy walks into a bar" jokes are a hoot.
I appreciate your suggestions. Really. | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 2:09:01 PM | Attercop,
That is one of my favorite "guy walks into a bar" jokes.
As for your suggestions, I didn't think there was anything harsh about them, at all. I did ask for input on my profile.
And you took the time to respond. So, thanks.
But I'm not sure I understand what you are saying. Are you agreeing that the profile is "too bookish" and dull? Or are you saying that I should not try to hide that I am bookish, and not be concerned about making the profile exciting? Please clarify.
Yeah, the hair is short, but I like it that way. Maybe I'll wear bigger earrings in the next picture. | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 2:18:46 PM | Sorry to be unclear. Bookish = good. Exciting = irrelevant.
But too bookish = dull.
Hate to agree with that, since it's well written otherwise.
But think the humor injection will be an easy fix, no rewrite needed.
Now can I hear the bar / martini joke? | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 4:12:46 PM | Oh, for Pete's sake.
A professor walks into a bar and orders a "martinus." The bartender says, "I think you mean martini." The professor, annoyed, says, "Young man, if I wanted two, that's what I would have asked for!"
If I must insert a joke, that's the one I'm wondering about using. But, I think it would stick out like a sore thumb in my profile.
The humor advice is well taken. Thank you, and I 'll give it further thought. But, maybe we should get back to the original, broader, request for feedback on my profile in general. I'm just saying'. | |
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| I'd appreciate some feedback on my profile, please.
Posted: 7/15/2012 4:20:27 PM | | I think your profile is quite good. However, want to be together but give eachother space too, a strong, confident man though who may need a shoulder to lean on. To me sounds like mixed messages. Up to you if you want to keep it in. | |
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Posted: 7/15/2012 4:53:03 PM | I think it looks great. Your pictures are good and it is well written.
Are you actively sending men messages or sitting on the sidelines waiting for them? I had an awesome woman view my profile and never sent me anything. I decided to send her a quick hello and we now talk on a regular basis. So, if there is someone that you find interesting, just say hello. | |
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| I'd appreciate some feedback on my profile, please.
Posted: 7/15/2012 5:31:06 PM | | Thanks WatermanJohn, for your input and encouragement to be proactive with sending out messages. Yes, I try to send out a few emails every day. Just not getting responses. And then there are always the "unread and deleted". Ouch, those hurt... But I will keep on sending them out. I'm coming to understand that at my age the pool is smaller, so we just have to keep initiating communication. By the way, if I lived in Florida, you'd probably get an email from me this evening ;) | |
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