| | Feedback, Oh, Please!Page 1 of 1 | Hi... I am new at this and unsure if I have represented myself in a positive and clear manner. Not getting traffic! Feel like there is a red light flashing on my page... and I can't see it!
I'd much rather have a green light... is that possible?
Just be kind with the constructive criticism! | |
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Posted: 7/16/2012 7:25:35 PM | Your intro is coming across as a tad needy/desperate.
Have a variety of pics, include a full-length pic, too. When guys see all face photos, they assume the worst - like you've a hunchback or something, but seriously though, they assume a woman is very overweight. Go for an outdoors pic, too.
( Ok, I see you've altered your pics! )
It reads like a resume and is a tad dry. Soften it some and inject some humour.
Mentioning a high sex drive will attract all sorts of pervs. Be warned.
Are you writing to guys' you find interesting? | |
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Posted: 7/16/2012 8:36:38 PM | | I like the way it is written and wouldn't even take out the part about sex. Maybe I'd change the "not on the first date" to "not on the first few dates". The only picture I think is bad is the last one which shouts "these are my boobs and look I'm getting drunk". The fact that you are tan and then your skin turns white in your cleavage is making me think you know better! But I love your writing. I'm really not sure what category of women are getting the tons of messages that the men seem to think we are. I'm 63 and almost never get messages or replies and certainly not from anyone I find attractive. | |
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Posted: 7/16/2012 9:35:31 PM | This is all meant as constructive criticism:
I would change the Fish Personality to "None", it just adds clutter.
"666" is not recommended in a Username. It is easily changed. Your history is tied to member number.
Add creative captions to each pic.
Bold text is okay for headings but not for sentences or paragraphs.
It is never wise to proclaim intelligence, demonstrate it. One good way is proper use of grammar and punctuation.
A man who:
Happy Poor grammar.
You have a tendency to write negative/demanding statements that could easily be worded as positive statements.
- "Must not have an issue..."
- "Why not say hi?"
- "one who is not a tvaholic"
- "I'm not a serial dater nor interested "
- "I'm not here to waste any ones time " (anyone's)
Overall, it's a little too much. Too much sex talk and too many "requirements" for the man.
While we tell people to show personality in their profile, you seem to actually have overdone it. It isn't necessarily what you say as much as how you say it and how you present it.
Consider deleting all of the following and screen in your empty Inbox.
Age between 44 and 53.
Live within 75 miles.
Must not be looking for Hang Out
Must not be looking for Talk/E-mail
Must not be looking for Activity Partner
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Posted: 7/17/2012 12:05:24 AM | The 3 best things to drive traffic to your profile are 1) Your main pic, 2) Your Interests, and 3) Participation in the forums.
Your main pic is awesome! By the way, your third pic with the red hockey sweater is my favorite. You look like you are resting. I hope you keep that pic.
It is best if you have 12 Interests that men and women could both like. This is just an opinion, but these sound the strongest.
Antiquing, Auto Racing, Big Bang Theory, Cooking, Facebook, Flea Markets, Gardening, Hockey, Home Decorating, Painting, Reading, Roasting Marshmallows
But you could definitely talk about everything else in the About Me section.
I always want to encourage people to come back to the forums with their opinions. Please come back soon. | |
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