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|Hello, would really appreciate some constructive critique on my profile, be gentle with me "Pretty Please" been here a while and the responses don’t really match what I’m looking for, (mostly armchair window shoppers looking for chat) certainly not people who want to meet in person. |
Thanks in advance x
Posted: 7/29/2012 3:38:47 AM
|have you got some better pictures - the last two are good - but your close ups are bad - they always are when they involve a mirror and camera phone...|
starting with "it's been a while" - a little desperate maybe?
try to be more structured rather than writing in such small sentences...
Posted: 7/29/2012 11:00:14 AM
|Okay. Trying to be helpful, but I am direct, not always "gentle".|
not interested in anonymous texting or endless chatThat statement is a big part of the problem. You just "challenged" them.
Anytime a woman puts negative statements in her profile about what she doesn't want, it has the opposite effect. It chases away any good guys that you would have received messages from and encourages the bad guys to irritate you.
If you want a 600-800% increase in messages that say "Hey what's up?" or "Hi there!", add this to your profile: Don't message me saying "Hey what's up?" or "Hi there". I WON'T REPLY!!!
Bad guys reaction: (Another one of those b******!) (What should I do?) (I know, I'll send her a message) = "Hey what's up?" (LOL)
Good guys reaction: (Wow! She's a B****!) (Next.)
Be positive and upbeat. State who you ARE, what you WANT, not what you AREN'T and DON'T WANT.
If I don't respond it’s because I’m one that does read profiles and I don't feel we would click, loads of good luck and hope you find what you’re looking for. This statement is also really hurting your results for multiple reasons.
Posted: 7/29/2012 11:06:48 AM
I'm in your target demographic, so I think I can give you some useful advice...
(1) As already said, replace the "cellphone-mirror" face shots with better ones. I'd add a full-length shot where you're wearing something informal but feminine.
(2) Delete the age restrictions in your Mail Settings; cast that net wide!
(3) Almost every one of your written paragraphs has something NEGATIVE in it! As "campfires" has said, this will not deter the time-wasters but will be off-putting to the quality gents you are aiming to attract. Example:
"Looking for a man who’s a confidant participant in his life rather than a spectator of others, and no that doesn't mean extreme sports, caring but not slushy, well mannered but not anal and smiling eyes but no twitch. "
Why not recast this to read:
"Looking for a man who’s a confident participant in his life rather than a spectator of others; someone who is caring , well mannered, and with smiling eyes. "
Now, isn't that more inviting to a reader? You get the idea!
Posted: 7/29/2012 11:55:42 AM
|Thank you Guy's it all makes a lot of sense so far :)x|
Posted: 7/29/2012 12:12:55 PM
|I really do struggle with a camera, had a play with photo's now is that better?|
Posted: 7/29/2012 12:22:21 PM
"Eyes wide shut", "BC" and "Concentrate" should go.
<--click my History for my pic guidelines.
Posted: 7/29/2012 12:43:24 PM
|Thank you Guys, |
Have made the changes as suggested, it's always good to see from a different perspective, fingers crossed.
Posted: 7/29/2012 12:50:21 PM
Loads of good luck and hope you find the "One" for you soon. Assumes failure and invites them to move on.
If you feel the need to put something there, say:
Are you "the one"?
Posted: 7/31/2012 8:52:46 AM
Thank you for all your help, added / changed some more stuff, am I getting the gist of it yet?
Thanks again chaps x
Posted: 7/31/2012 9:09:28 AM
|Mush better, Louise--you're getting there!|
For your next step, remove the 2nd, 3rd and 4th pics. Then, have a friend take a head-to-toe shot of you in the same dress you're wearing in your first pic. Women over 40 tend to underestimate how attention-getting a little femininity can be; don't make that mistake!