| i long for the moment...i hope he understands why
Posted: 10/19/2005 9:45:08 AM | i need to feel special to him...i do want so many things, but mostly to be honored as a wife should if i ever take that step ...again, i know what i need, he should be able to deliver and treat me like the princess i am,
"i need the love the one and only deserves
i hope you understand that if i take your hand
it will be, until eternity and i want certainty
love is forever"
"I Long To Taste Your Season"
some people feel the need
to wait before they feed
the hunger that burns
that greed that yearns
it feels so good inside
sometimes i want to cry
cause the urge i have for union
doesn't want to wait for communion
i long to taste your season
to wait for whatever reason...
is difficult i know
but this is why i am slow and
take my time to know
your...
penetration means consumation
consumation leads to a relation
a relation leads to dedication
i want you to be
dedicated
to
me
Tammy Anquinette Thomas
Copyright ©2005 Tammy Anquinette Thomas
feel free to edit spelling, however play on words are intended in most poems, for rhyming and shock value as well as any slang wich at times may include mis-spelled words or phrases
i want your ideas and critique
thanks
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| i long for the moment...i hope he understands why
Posted: 10/19/2005 10:35:29 AM | here is another i wrote earlier this year
I am wealthy (rico)
You try to break me. You tried to break me,
puttin' prices on my head.
The things you say and buy, are useless,
instead,
of respect,
I hear
I am a perfect ten,
I look like a million bucks
I accept the gold, silver, rags, fame,
I can not see the true value of me.
(My blindfold removed)
I see, I see
The true value of me
I am priceless
My body priceless, my heart priceless,
my mind priceless, my essence priceless...
Tammy Anquinette Thomas
Copyright ©2005 Tammy Thomas | |
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| i long for the moment...i hope he understands why
Posted: 10/19/2005 1:46:00 PM | I wasn't so sure where the first poem began, so I'll comment on the second one.
The rhythm to your poem is very similar to mine in that each phrase relates to one another like avante garde jazz, so on that I was feeling it. I'm not quite sure who the you is, though. It could be a guy, or it could be you, or it could be your past. Self esteem/chain releasing poems are usually abstract, and your poem leaves the reader assured of your self confidence as you flaunt it in a demure way with hints of sexuality. Overall, I liked it. | |
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Posted: 10/20/2005 6:02:48 AM | the first poem began "i long to taste your season"
here is another poem i wrote beginning of this year "cyprian giselle"
cyprian giselle
oblivion works well
elements merge hastily
giving goods away wastefully
cyprian giselle
knead by crescent light well
squander and launder
what mother gave to daughter
cyprian giselle
she will tell no tell
buy, bought and slaughter
like mother like daughter
cyprian giselle
only time will tell
will love of self prevail
will love of self fail.
tat
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Posted: 10/20/2005 6:40:31 AM | I Long To Taste Your Season
One again, I love the rhythm and the way that you express your emotions in the poem. Your style is the same as your other poem. You seem to jump in and outside of yourself as you write as if you know your feelings, but you stop to look at yourself.
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Posted: 10/21/2005 5:46:31 AM | "internet infatuation"
i
saw you the other day,
you passed me by
walked away,
inside i sighed
you looked so beautiful
from afar
my heart skiped a beat
because you are
the reason for my infatuation
explanation of my bizarre
behavior does play
a important role
in how i plan to reach my goal
to find my soul-mate
with me
you will feel my
desire to be your one and only...
if i had the courage
and took the time
to say hello
you might be mine
i thought about this this morning, there are so many ppl i want to say hello to but do not have the time or courage | |
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Posted: 10/21/2005 6:10:38 AM | ^^^^i felt the same way when i was younger and hmm have lost out on a lot because of it.. think of it this way.. you dont know till you know...lol
you have courage.. it takes a lot to post so way to go...
bubbles
P.S welcome to this here forum | |
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Posted: 10/21/2005 6:53:05 AM | thank you bubbles
"the colour of love"
yes,i see colour
my feeling change with the wind,
when i see colour,i know then,
my mood is like the colour
the ever changing tide,
my mood is like the colour
my mood is like this rhyme...
when i wear black i feel so ""phat""
when i see red i feel ""danger,danger
high voltage when we touch when we kiss""
when i see pink i feel oh, so sweet
when i see yellow i am a mellow fellow
when i see blue, i wonder if he is true
love the gray, i'm neutral this way
when i see green, i'm so fresh so clean
when i see orange, i feel juicy and sweet
when i see purple rain baby rain on me
when i wear brown, my face is in a frown
when i see white- snow
flakes i know
beauty is being original,
we are colours of the rainbow
tat
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Posted: 10/21/2005 7:08:11 AM | very nice one....lol..
i like it alot..i love the way you used the colors and associated them with feeling..kinda reminded me of one of mine...hope you like it
Soul in Blue
“For my never ending blues”
Chase my blues away,
What strange words we some
How seem to obey. The colour blue
Calming, yet used for damning. Damnation
Leaving room for altercation, hence prolonging
Emotional vacation
I feel the need to sing the blues,
It calms my soul, once again making
Me whole, celebrity, all alone, Lonely
Feelings suppressed by all that’s homely.
Homely girl, fooled by the one and only.
Chase away those midnight blues,
Funny yet appropriate, for all those
Stuck in rue, be sure to wear blue.
Despite the negativity, it might just inspire
Festivity
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Posted: 10/21/2005 7:36:28 AM | Before I comment I must first admit that I came here becuase your packaging is so exquisite. I never expected to find such honest depth from such a spectaular beauty, and then another. Now that the succinclty honest cliche has been given here's my input.
I did not grow up with African Americans. When I went away to boarding school and played on a great basketball team I learned as much as a mountain boy probably could without moving to the Urban core. At first here I expected sterotypical "rap", but what I found moved even this quasi rythmless man that only had wolves to listen to this morning for three hours before breakfast. Carnal treasures are rarely communicated so effectively. Bubbles, thank you for a priceless gift as well. I have come to appredciate the Caped Crusaders posts as well Tammy. I forsee an incredible creative trust building here ladies. The English Major in me has no constructive criticism for you. Rest assured that whatever the motivation was for me coming here I leave in awe. I wish you the most productive of thoughts and know that if you wish your audiences are going to grow by leaps and bounds. Keep writing wonderfully wondrous women! 
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| i long for the moment...i hope he understands why
Posted: 10/21/2005 7:50:35 AM | johnny...tahnk you so very much for all the wonderful compliments...constructive criticism i am always up for..feed back too, bring it on..oh and this is a wonderful thread isnt it?!
Tammy - this is an awesome thread..i envision wonderful things happening in here for you...this is truly an awesome community...you'll see...
oh yes i always write about people i meet, things tht have been done to me..the works..it makes it easier to get out...
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Posted: 10/21/2005 8:28:54 AM | thanks johnny, bubbles, and cape crusader for your kind words...it makes me smile today
Love by mail
i e-mail people,
I’d like to get to know
lust or agape,
time will tell us so
I want to take
the time,To say a quick “Hi”
I like your smile,
i dig those eyes
would you dare reply
If people I mail,
Do not return the call
Does my ego take a leap?
Will my pride take a fall?
i once was very shy,
i coudn't spy
a boy who had a thing for me
I blushed when he said Hi
Now I’m older and my body is a ten
Men feel the “shy”,
That I felt way back then
I ain’t no diva,
I long to be a dove
I'd like to be,Your girl
I want to feel your love
If you email me a “hello”
with time invested in the
note, I will respond
With a hi and your time
Won’t be a joke
I have to be honest,
If you send a reply
i might not reciprocate Your love,
keep looking,
The girl for you is nigh
Please keep my secrets,
Please be true to love
Please don’t tell my secrets
My feeling crush like suds
If there is some proof,
That I am your star
If there is a connection
Our souls will mate
from afar
luv-you all
tam
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Posted: 10/21/2005 8:35:46 AM | thats so cool Tam...i so can identify..how bout something like this...
Confused
This is for the Coward in me
I need you but I don't,
I think I have to, but I just won't,
I need you but I can't tell you
I think it will make me sound of no value
You confuse me with the way you use me,
You need to abuse what little freedom I grant you
You understand me and that's what makes me angry
Just when I thought you weren't going to come in handy
You surprise me by guiding me, you make everything seem dandy.
I want to tell you I do
Yet every time I try, I decide it will be better not to
I need to find a new YOU, so that we can begin anew
I want this but I can't need this,
Yet I yearn to tell you, that I WANT you to need me,
I want you to NEED me the way I need you
I need you to know that this NEED has to come from deep within you
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Posted: 10/21/2005 11:41:29 AM | "the color of love"
Ah, a change in rhythm and style. While I prefer the avante garde, this poem would probably receive rave reviews from an english professor because its focused on one point for the duration of the poem. Its less emotional and more practical. | |
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Posted: 10/21/2005 11:44:36 AM | I've been analyzing yours, here is one of mine.
Pollen in the Wind
On the pulse of morning
at the(another word for rooster) crow
whether summers rain
or winters snow
I miss you.
As the sun's trail
is lost at moonlight's feet
amidst rising tides
and unlit streets
I miss you.
Far gone beyond words
is the beauty of your smile.
The warmth of your heart and depth of your soul
made loving you worthwhile.
But now you're gone away from me
like pollen on the wind's heel.
Our love, which was once destiny
is now unrealized, is now unreal.
On the pulse of morning
while giving God his grace
I reminisce on love's past
hoping loneliness will I erase
I miss you.
As the leaves have fallen
riding abreast autumn's breeze
I hold still in my heart
the love we once conceived
I miss you.
What can I do to rediscover our world?
What keys can I use to break these lonely chains?
I'd give anything to salvage what remains
if your heart desires the same.
I miss you.
I miss you.
I
miss
you.
Copyright 1997(This poem has been published. For more info, shoot me an email!) | |
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Posted: 10/21/2005 12:25:16 PM | | No, its when your poem is analyzed comprehensively, its abstract, yet it flows because each line relates to the next and the next. For example, your first and third line may not make much sense together, but line 1 makes sense with line 2, and line 2 makes sense with line 3. Does that make sense? | |
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Posted: 10/23/2005 10:41:42 PM | hey everyone i've been at work all weekend long, so , i'm back. here is a short verse i thought about at work
i guess it's just not
meant for me
two hearts entwined
for eternity
love that's blind
faults' of mine
two hearts entwined
dear fate be kind
i guess it's just
not meant for me
two hearts entwined
for eternity
love I'll find
and forever mine
forever mine
for eternity
tat
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Posted: 10/24/2005 6:45:23 AM | hey kindacute...this is something in sort of accordance with the beat you set up top^^^
hope you enjoy..
Let Go
My heart just doesn’t want to let go,
Even though my head tells me not to be slow,
Why oh why oh Lord does this feeling have to hurt so.
He doesn’t know, but does he care?
Do I let it show, or do I just keep going,
With my life in tow, do I need to stoop to his low?
Will there ever be a time when things just flow?
I just can’t let go but am too afraid to let it show.
Instead I feel how grass must after a good mow.
Aglow sometimes without even a glimmer of hope,
Not even a shimmer of recognition to let me know that I’m still in the scope.
Instead I am constantly on the grope, till I finally find that rope,
To hang free and view life from certain centred degrees.
Sorting through the debris
I hope I finally find peace, make confusion disappear,
And breathe with a final ease.
Finesse I am going to possess, right down to my longest ever tress.
bubbles | |
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