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Posted: 3/16/2005 10:17:05 PM | hey guys/girls/everyone else, just wondering if you'd like to crit my profile. somehow jack seems to be a dull boy, i do spend my time crafting a reply to intriguing and unique female profiles but it somehow seems to be insufficient to warrant replies…
or is it just a matter of knocking on the wrong doors? Asian male White female?
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Posted: 3/17/2005 10:32:56 AM | Hi!!
I'm not claiming to be a pro but I'll give it a shot!
First thing, why the pictures of the clams and such? Not that it's a bad thing it's just random and out of place. Why not replace those pictures with a couple of coloured shots of yourself?
Also, in the section about you- talk about you!! Talk a bit about your background, what you do in your spare time, whose bunnies those are (although I'm assuming they're yours)... you get the idea. Basically, imagine you're talking to someone for the first time and they say "tell me a bit about yourself"- then follow through with that!
Lastly, when you send messages to people just make sure they're not too pushy or anything. But also, dont' make them overly general, like they look like something you would send to anyone. Good luck with your search!! | |
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Posted: 3/17/2005 11:20:00 AM | I have to agree with secrets, there really isn't much to go on in your profile, nothing grabs attention to the reader. I am no pro by any means but you need to add something that will give people that read your profile a reason to want to write you or hear from you. A few more pics of you. and secrets advice you should be on your way!
Cheer's and good luck!! | |
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Posted: 3/17/2005 1:49:18 PM | Don't underestimate the value of simple punctuation and grammar. If I can't read a woman's profile without consulting a "cyber dictionary" or if I just can't figure out what's being said, I move on. Scary thing is how many 30+ women type like they're AOL kids.
Clean things up in the profile. Make sure things are legible and make sense from a quick read. | |
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Posted: 3/17/2005 3:15:55 PM | | wow guys, great feedback thanks! :) | |
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Posted: 3/17/2005 3:41:30 PM | | ok guys crit my new writeup? thanks! | |
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Joined: 12/18/2004
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Posted: 3/17/2005 4:35:17 PM | Yes I agree, the pics of food and bunnies, although interesting are not really the reason your here. They might be your interests but aren't going to be everyone's, they want to see and get to know you as a person first. Your interests seem to be in point form not as if your making a report, not talking to a person., your hobbies u have three things listed in one, that makes no sense when listed together.
As for the wrong doors.......ya never know, don't give up ...make your profile/mail interesting, and keep it real :) GL 
**DNotes**
Don't underestimate the value of simple punctuation and grammar. If I can't read a woman's profile without consulting a "cyber dictionary" or if I just can't figure out what's being said, I move on. Scary thing is how many 30+ women type like they're AOL kids.
Clean things up in the profile. Make sure things are legible and make sense from a quick read.
I'm one of those kids btw  I don't wanna grow up; I just wanna be a kid!!! Yes I'm 30+ and yes I was an AOL'er, yes I did well in english. The proper term is www lingo, and it's like abbreviations, just saves time, and it's very convenient. The trick is not to lose the proper grammar and knowing the difference.  There's way more important things in life to worry about! ;) | |
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Posted: 3/17/2005 4:36:45 PM | | Sounds good to me. Did you mean to sound so open though as to what kind of girl you would like to meet. Only prerec in there is that they have some of you passions? | |
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Posted: 3/17/2005 8:36:59 PM | | yeah i'm not going to fall for the first person i'd meet! or talk to! i like to get to know people first then see if things develop further. i don't honestly see how it would work if you would just go out with someone on the "pretext" of trying to have an affection relationship right out. don't think it'd work for me that way though it might seem to be the way to go nowadays… | |
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