| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 12:44:04 PM | I'll admit , I need some help with the whole profile dealie.
Some of you amaze me with your insight and opinions so if you wouldn't mind helpin a girl out? | |
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Joined: 9/27/2006
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| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 12:51:28 PM | | Take off the pic of your kid. God knows what kind of pedophiles are saving that picture and doing things to it. Some strange people on here. I'm pretty sure I saw a guy on here that I saw in the newspaper as a violent sex offender/rapist. | |
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| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 12:57:52 PM | Like your headline, it's original. I think you did a good job with your about me. I'd maybe edit out some of what you like and add more of who you are. What kind of woman would you be like to spend time with. I know from reading your posts you're a smart lady, and witty, creative and well spoken. Show us your best stuff in describing that terrific, winning personality. Do a few sentences at least about the type of guys you'd like to meet.
I personally am not a fan of having kid pics up, but that's your call.
I think it's a good start and with a little thought, some spark of creative genius it'll be all the better.
Profile writing tips has lots of good ideas, may wanna check there if you find yourself with writer's block.  | |
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| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 12:59:31 PM | I'll go step by step...It'll break it up for you to do section by section.
Your tag lne... its a negative, I like the humour indicated by it but it really is a negative, I love to use book reviews...take a look at the back of a book and use a line from something a newspaper has said about the book.
You can mention your dating likes and dislikes later on.
Pictures - get rid of your kiddy one!...sorry to sound...well...negative, but you never know what these WWW people are gonna do with it!
You are very pretty!...less light in your pics, one with your hair down, and SMILE...Give us a broad, straight to your eyes type smile...I know its hard and I myself hate my pics being taken, but the smile in your main pic seems forced. We love a natural smile.
Otherwise I like the broad spectrum you have here, gives a sneaky peek into your life!
Ok the about me section.
It's VERY good! Humorous insightful...the quotes bits I like.
Here's the rub... It seems a little...whats the word....Farty.
You seem to be here one minute, there another, it doesn't flow right.
There's not really much about you, I think the first paragraph or two should be about you, what you like, what you can do ie cooking, horse riding, blah blah blah kinda stuff that we all wanna know, Books and their authors, films and their genre, art and their artists, then go into the 'what I want in a man' part.
Save the quotes and humour for the last section, its always great to end your profile with a laugh, it makes you memorable, and we're all about that!
I love your first date ideas...original, smart, funny! You could also use these words to describe yourself!
All in all a good profile content, just needs a little tweaking here and there to organise it a little more.
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| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 9:11:13 PM | ^ k I swear you're my british doppleganger or something , I was reading my profile and I went "hmm this is all over the place!"
I'm trying to get some inspiration , and yeah , I'm not a naive girl by any stretch of the imagination but I didn't even think of the kid picture thing.
thanks for the tips people!
looks like I have some homework to do! | |
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| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 9:29:10 PM | The audacity hapeenurse, to start this review thread knowing full well I was poling up the Mississippi on my way to a thanksgiving in St. Louis! Now I'm in like a schmuck on post 8 or something.
You are definitely getting a chia pet for Christmas this year now! Nope, no I Pod for my usually deserving, and quite remarkable partner in misdeameanors and inapropriate laughter. Nope. Chia pet it is. What do you want, the potato head, or the lamb? I'll let you choose at least.
I'd review your thread, but I'm too bias to do you a good service. I'll wait for you to ENTIRELY piss me off before I ressurect this thread with a thrashing.
ps it's not her kid. She's a virgin for all I know. | |
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| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 10:33:11 PM | | Your forum posts are always intelligent and sometimes witty, so I guess I was expecting more. The profile is a bit scattered and lacks substance. The folks who post in the forums seem to have the better profiles, so perhaps check out some of your favorite forum contributors for some inspiration. Also, a minor point, but I noticed a lack of spacing after punctuation. I really liked the headline and didn't see it as negative. I thought it was funny. | |
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| it's my first time ........ be gentle.
Posted: 11/22/2006 11:00:09 PM | Not much I can say, I've always found you pretty adorable as well :)
Nothing about your profile has ever turned me off for as long as I've known you, so if you want guys like me to think you're cool, you're doing good so far  | |
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