| Want a man's opinion of your profile? [Closed Thread]
Posted: 3/18/2007 3:14:34 PM | I've noticed rather a lot of profiles could do with improving. If you think yours is one of them I'll give an honest opinion. However, there are some proviso's,
1. I will not correct spelling or grammatical errors as I'm sure you can do this for yourself. Spelling errors are, to all intents and purposes, a part of your 'personality'.
2. I will not reply if you've only written one or two lines. My advice is you need to write more.
3.Being a heterosexual man, I am better equipped at reviewing women's profiles. Yes, it's politically incorrect but one can only play to one's strengths.
4. I will give you a summary of my general impression of you as portrayed by your profile. As you will know yourself better than I do, this will give an indication of the accuracy of the profile.
5.If I haven't replied it's because I'm not on-line, so don't worry if there's a delay.
6. If something crops up and I can't fulfill my voluntary obligations I'll put a post up to inform you all (aren't I nice).
Now go for it!
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| Want a man's opinion of your profile?
Posted: 3/18/2007 3:20:08 PM | Hi,
I'd like for you to review my profile.
I enjoy writing and usually edit other's work. My writings are seldom edited.
Thanks,
P.S. Have fun :-) | |
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| Want a man's opinion of your profile?
Posted: 3/18/2007 3:34:00 PM | I haven't seen your profile reviews before so, I'm going to take a chance here assuming you may have some ideas for mine. Keep in mind, the emoticons may be a little much however, I purpsely did that to portray a playfulness and confidence not seen in some profiles.
Maybe it IS too much. Otherwise, let me have it please(that's if you do men's profiles).
Thank you, In advance.
Chris | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 3:41:06 PM | Generally, okay! I get the impression you're someone who knows themselves and knows when to draw the line or lay down the law. You done it in a way that isn't over the top. I think there's enough there (as well as in the 'interests' listed) for a man to find a reason to contact you.
One or two points though. "verbalize my true thoughts and feelings" might read better as "speak my mind" unless you want to convey it that way. "involved in numerous ... relationships " implies that you might not mind one or two ... relationships - I think some men would need clarification on that (could scare the good ones off). Finally, "outgoing personality although I am somewhat shy" is contradictive. While I think I know what you mean (shy at first but outgoing when I know you?), others might not be too sure. | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 3:53:50 PM | Hello Chris
Yeah, I'm not a women so I don't have their feminine take on profiles.
However, it looks okay to me. You've stated what interests you (and that's half who you are) and occasionally why. Looks like there'a a lot of your personality in it (and if you're the sort of person who likes putting emoticons in then keep them in) which, as you say, others lack. Only real criticsm is what is lol "lots of love", "laugh out load", "lowest of low" - logically it's "laugh out loud" (chuck an emoticon in). | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 4:50:01 PM | | Alright...mine is a bit mean but I have been wanting to lighten it up a bit and some suggestions would be nice. Keep in mind that I'm looking for friends and friends only...thanks in advance. | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 4:51:01 PM | Hello Ambreeca,
Looks alright! You've got you're best photo as the main to attract them in in the first place. One with your son so that everyone knows what they'll be getting into. All to the good.
You've said enough to keep someone's interest and in your own way, but I might rearrange it a bit so it flows better (ooh I so want to change some grammatical errors but I said I wouldn't) . With regard to content I would want a bit more on personality particularly as you request someone the same as you.
Overall, I get the impression you're fairly confident and outgoing lady. | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 5:08:40 PM | Hi! I would appreciate a critique of my profile! I registered a few days ago and am new to this meeting venue.
I appreciate your time! | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 5:20:14 PM | Hello 907daydreamer,
First things first. You're quite attractive but the lettering across the photos is a little distracting but as your not looking for a boyfriend I guess it doesn't matter that much. All three photos are good.
You've got enough listed under interests for the referal in the main profile "I'm looking for friends with mutual interests ..." to make sense. However, it would be nice to expand on your main interests.
With regard to people without photo's and idiots I guess there's no best way of dealing with them. What you've said is as good as any.
I would want to know what your looking for in a friend and as said before, an expansion on your interests will give any prospective friend something to bite onto and e-mail you with.
I don't get much impression of what you're like as a person from the profile. Your pics suggest you might be a nice but in-your-face type of woman but I don't think that's entirely true (the in-your-face bit).
As you're a good-looking woman I would definitely emphasise the 'I'm only looking for friends' bit. | |
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| Want a man's opinion of your profile?
Posted: 3/18/2007 5:41:04 PM | Would love some feedback on my profile - I consider it a work in progress - happy to hear how a man perceives it!
Many thanks. | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 5:42:23 PM | Hello seekingasoul,
Nothing wrong with it really. You've said who you are and what you want. Presumably a photo will be uploaded later or at least attached to any message you send to someone or reply to.
One or two minor points "I expect to be treated ..." in the 4th paragraph sounds a little domineering - scared me a bit. Are you? If not, which I don't think you are, I would write "I'm looking to be treated ..."; lightens it a bit. You'd have to change one or two words later in the sentence to make it sensical again.
Other than that I might want to read about any interests. Men like the tangible things to talk about first. It's much easier to message someone first time around about their interest in, say, skydiving or pottery than it is about some mutual emotional thing.
Oh yes, just noticed it. You might want to move some of the text from 'first date' to 'about me' and I might tone the emotional stuff down a bit. Nothing wrong with it but men are less inclined to publicly show or, in this case, read such emotion, even though it may be mutual. Us men get embarrassed about it, but if it's you then go with it.
I would also make it a bit clearer (under 'first date') that you would rather meet someone face to face rather than go through the e-mailing process first.
Good luck! | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 5:55:33 PM | Alright Splinter...I have made some changes...have another go of it if you aren't too busy...
P.S. grammatical errors irk me so feel free to edit if you see a mistake (the ... isn't going anywhere though =) | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 6:03:41 PM | Hiya Nikki,
Ooh-er, scary female. First impression - intense, takes no BS, wild.
Right, photo's first. 1 and 2 are good. 5 not very good so get rid of, 6 and 7 are scary what-are-you-looking-at type.
First part of 'about me' is short, sharp, to the point, and honest and I suspect written straight out there and then. I like it. Second part took a while to suss out, especially the first sentence, so perhaps could do with rewriting in a similar vein to the first part. However, I'm very different from you and am perhaps not the person you'd want to attract. Ooh, and a bit of swearing.
Second impression - intense, takes no BS, wild, confident.
'first date' bit is in complete contrast to the rest and really quite sweet...
... so third third impression - intense, takes no BS, wild, confident, and romantic.
Can't really fault it to be honest. It's just different! | |
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| Want a man's opinion of your profile?
Posted: 3/18/2007 6:13:49 PM | hi, i'm new here and this seems like a good idea, to find out what my profile may portray and what needs improvement
open to your feedback
thanks | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 6:14:12 PM | | Please feel free! I know the picture needs to be changed, but truthfully..I signed into this website as a joke with a friend in the beginning. My profile is so boring and does not at all portray everything about me...not even the tip of the iceberg. Give me your advice as to how I can "spice" it up! | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 6:14:33 PM | Hiya 907,
Oh, you're quite nice really aren't you.
I forgot people stole pictures off others so, yes, good reason to have the writing on there. Don't be too apologetic about it though (although it is sweet that you are).
Looks good. It makes it clear you're just looking for friends and as such a profile doesn't need to be that long . The new info is just about right. You make me want to be in Denver!
With regard any spelling errors, I'll message them through to you. Is that okay? | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 6:27:05 PM | Hello Feminineunderstated,
First I might consider changing European to Caucasian at the top of the profile. That's usually the 'race' description that's used for us 'pinkies' when anyone does a search.
Nothing wrong with what you've written but I'd expand on the interests a bit. While it's always best to find out about interests and personality when actually e-mailing, you need to give an excuse, other than your gorgeous looks, for someone to initiate an e-mail.
Hillwalking and South Downs for example could be expanded upon. Oh, you'll know what to right. Regarding personality, you don't need specific words to describe it. That will come out in the way you write, so the more you right....
Photo's good! | |
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| Want a man's opinion of your profile?
Posted: 3/18/2007 6:47:09 PM | Hiya ce2002ca
Content looks fine. I might restructure it a bit.
A few spelling/grammar errors need to be cleared up, which I said I wouldn't mention in my intro' but you give the impression of an educated women so those errors might give a false impression. First part of profile reads relatively smoothly but I suspect you got bored, stuck or were in a hurry and went into clinical/clerical mode in an old-fashioned dating type of way, i.e.,
My personality is best described as:
Easygoing/Flexible/Open-Minded, Friendly/Kind, Low .
It's rather stilted and cluttered. In other words, make it flow; use the English language to express your personality, not necessarily with the words you use but the way you use them (oh, I've gone all poetic). A lot of your interests could be placed under the 'interests' section. In the 'about me' you could expand on some of your main interests. I know I keep on about stressing your interests in the postings but it's half the attraction of people and a reason for others to contact you.
Can't fault the content though - I'd be interested!
Photo's are good.
Hope I've helped in some way. | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 7:00:34 PM | Hello deedee8190,
Best not to take this website too seriously - there's a fair amount of weirdo's and timewasters to sift through.
Anyway, your profile. Well the bare bones are there. I suspect you've got one or two more interests you could add. It's probably about the right length to be honest, maybe a bit longer but that could be done by sorting out the grammar (basically using full sentences). Your personality is in there. I would want to know what you are looking for in a man so I would know if I was suitable material for you. Other than that it just needs tweaking over time really. Nothing fundamentally wrong. I like the way your honest about things, e.g., "If no "sparks" fly, dinner and music has never hurt anyone so that could be fun anyways.". Also has a nice comforting touch.
Yeah, photo's interesting but it shows you've got the confidence to put it up. | |
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Posted: 3/18/2007 7:09:29 PM | Hello dew-sweet-dew,
Photo's. Too many of the same type. Keep 1 and 8 and rid the rest. Possibly get one or two additional of you elsewhere. You look as if you're trying to be raunchy in one or two of them - don't, gives the wrong impression.
I quite like the short profile - nicely written and rather poetic. Don't change it but remember, a man can be embarrassed by such poetic writings, but then again you might not want someone who is. I might suggest adding something more tangible which men could identify which, your giving up smoking is a good example.
Good luck. | |
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