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Posted: 9/11/2007 5:18:15 PM | | Hi! My profile sucks and I know it but how to express me in words I'm having trouble doing appealingly. My life runs around horses, I work to work with my horses if you get what I mean. I'm very self motivated and have acheived a lot of stuff...haha if you have any suggestions please let me know. | |
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Posted: 9/11/2007 5:59:30 PM | Ok.. well Asznap I know whats wrong with your profile.. It seems to me you dont really have SET goals for your love life.. your not determined in what you want.. atleast thats the impression I got from your profile.. It says a little bit about you.. you have a tattoo.. and u love horses.. but what are ur interests besides that? I mean of course keep that in there.. but add some stuff.. whats your fav type of music? do you play an instrument? Are u going to university that sort of thing.. also.. What are u looking for? All I know is your looking for an animal lover as well.. but WHO do u want that person to be.. Nobody wants to take a chance on a girl who they dont know anything about, nor do they know what that particular person is looking for. Also.. MORE PICS! You are a gorgeous woman! Flaunt it a lil:)
goodluck hunnie!! | |
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Posted: 9/11/2007 6:12:11 PM | Hi! First of all, I'd like to say I'm a horse lover too. I have a horse, and have competed in First Level dressage. Sadly I moved on, but my family still has horses and I ride often. I admire your determination to make horses a career and I hope it goes well for you.
lol I like the way my profile is set up. Have a look at the layout. You need to say more about yourself that doesn't involve horses(are you independent? What qualities do you possess? what are your likes and dislikes?), and elaborate on what kind of man you're looking for(honest, caring, loves the outdoors...). And you're beautiful. Put up the max amount of pics allowed.
Hope this helps! Good luck | |
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Posted: 9/11/2007 7:04:22 PM | | ok thanks guys I'll work on that and ad a few pics I guess lol, thanks for the complements too :o) | |
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Posted: 9/11/2007 7:17:29 PM | | Ok I worked on it a bit and I think it's improved but not yet what it should be, any more tips? lol! | |
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Posted: 9/12/2007 3:18:42 PM | "Hello, a bit about me.. I'm a total animal lover and I am looking for someone who shares that. Basically, I mean if your scared of dogs get lost!"
Could you live with someone who likes animals? Do the really have to be a "total animal lover"? My step dad totally takes care of my mom and family and supports our horses, dogs and cats. But he just likes them. It's my mom who crazy about them, and they're crazy in love still after all these years.
"I own 4 horses, *correction* I own 3 horses and have a pet pony who I love and who wants to eat me. I have a tattoo which is new and pretty cool..I like it. I coach riding lessons, and take riding lessons, and compete and basically live and breath horses. I graduated from a Coaching and Horsemanship program last year at Kemptville Campus. "
... and am plannig to make a great career doing something I love.
"Music is also a big part of my life..if you know the song by Greg Hanna, Singing To The Radio.. that would be me! You will rarely find me in a car not singing.
"SHE LIKES SINGIN TO THE RADIO
TURNS IT UP LOUD
YOU SWEAR THAT GIRL
WAS SINGIN TO A SOLD OUT CROWD
HAIR IN THE WIND
MOUTH OPEN WIDE
THE FASTER THE SONG
THE FASTER SHE DRIVES
THERE AIN'T A SONG THAT SHE DON'T KNOW
EVERY CAR SHE PASSES
SEES HER IN HER SUNGLASSES
CRUSIN DOWN THE ROAD
SINGIN TO THE RADIO" "
ENTER before the verse, and lose the caps. You want them to think you sing in the car not scream your head off, lol.
"I don't just like country either, lately I've been leaning that way more but I love rock, pop, jazz (yes), swing, metal, salsa anything really, even some rap (although not often haha). I also play a few instruments, my best is trumpet right now but I'm slowly learning guitar and I know enough to get by on a piano. "
Try to start this parapraph with " I do" and not "I don't". Try to avoid negative words.
"I'm just on here looking for a guy to eventually call boyfriend, I'm looking for someone who shares a few of the same interests I do..I do believe in love at first sight. I'm looking for someone who isn't afraid to try anything new, who likes to be active and likes to cuddle. I love being spoiled but hate romantic stuff try juggling that ;)"
I would cut out the"love at first sight part". "eventually" and "at first sight" are a bit contradictory.
"First Date: Something random, like window shopping, although that gets boring pretty quick.. but it's a good place to start! Kayaking would be awesome so fun.. I want to go kayaking.."
Hmm, window shopping or kayaking. Not a lot of choices...lol. Try to have more options (that don't involve him carrying a boat on day1), or keep it more generic, like "Whatever we decide, it'll be a blast!"
Hope this helps! Keep up the good horsework! Good Luck! | |
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