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http://www.plentyoffish.com/member3804864.htm

Title: confusing…I could be the one? You could be the one? And the question mark at the end doesn’t make sense to me. Maybe because I am blond and twice your age, who knows. I don’t like to see questions as a title anyway. How about “you could be the one”

Pics: great head shot, fabulous! Now you just need at least one more full body shot.

Narration: “It's hard writing about yourself - but here goes.” Get rid of it.
“I am polite, caring, honest and have a good head on my shoulders. I like hockey, golf, music and my friends who I consider a big part of my life.” Good.

“I am looking for someone who is not going to play around, has some direction in life and cares for me as much as I do for them.” First the “not going to play around” – I don’t think anyone intentionally does this, you should say something like you are looking for someone who wants a serious relationship. Second part is good. Third part, “cares for me as much as I do for them” – you are not looking for someone like that because that comes with getting to know someone, know what I mean? A complete stranger that you find on here is not going to “care for me as much as I do for them” until they know you. This goes along with not playing around. A serious relationship consists of two people caring about one another. Take it out.

“I like going out but also like staying in and watching a good movie.” This can go with the first part of the narration, with your likes. “Really if you want more send a msg and we can chat.” Not needed, take it out, shows you just don’t want to take the time to fill out a profile, which means, maybe not to everyone, but sort of implies that you only do what you have to, don’t write that. Plus, of course if someone is interested they are going to message you, not needed.

First date okay. I wouldn’t recommend movies on the first date. I hate when people talk when I’m at a movie! I like to throw popcorn at them.

Faux pas: ‘prefer not to say’ – RED FLAG, WHAT ARE YOU HIDING? Do you do drugs? No, socially or often? It can always be explained later.

Conclusion: another pic, fix narration, get rid of ‘prefer not to say’

Rating: 6 out of 10

Good luck and keep fishing
C

Pics: Are good. You shouldn't have any problem there, methinks.

Interests: It would be nice if you had some, but it's probably not essential. They're basically for people to find common points of interest to begin that first conversation with. But since you're likely initiating the conversation, it's less important for a man than it is for a woman. Wouldn't hurt, though.

Description: Very little that puts you in a negative light... you may perhaps want to re-frame the mention of the gym in a more positive light. You know, instead of saying that you want to go a few times a week but usually don't... why not just say you make it a couple times a week. Instead of "not in bad shape, but I am getting better", why not "My physique is improving with every passing week!" (Once you start dating that dream girl... you'll have all the incentive you need to pump the iron.)

Things like "no one over 30 please" are kind of superfluous if you're the one writing them.

If you have any interesting hobbies or pastimes that women appreciate like playing sports, motorbikes, home improvement, etc. etc. you'll want to make mention of them, also. Spice things up a bit, you know!

And congratulations on not falling into the laundry list trap!!
("I'm nice, loyal, dependable, hard-working, caring, affectionate..... *yawn*")

Good show, my man!