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| | Let an accomplished screenwriter rate your profile. C'mon. Try me! [CLOSED Thread]Page 1 of 52 (1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15, 16, 17, 18, 19, 20, 21, 22, 23, 24, 25, 26, 27, 28, 29, 30, 31, 32, 33, 34, 35, 36, 37, 38, 39, 40, 41) | I read'em and rate'em baby. I'm a word smith -- that's what you need to reel'em in, right? Tell'em who you are. Tell'em what you're about. Be: simple and honest. If you have humor, use it. Most people don't.
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Posted: 11/8/2007 8:10:31 PM | Real Men Only: I like it. It's an 7 out of 10, which is good. Here's where you need to improve. The pictures: smile, we know you do. You have a child without his head attached -- attach it back on or crop the pic. Don't say give any physical discription of yourself -- you already checked off a box and a "real" guy looks past the extra arm or leg you have.
Get a little more chipper -- don't write this stuff at night. You're sleepy from work, friends, a cold one or six or just an assh%$@ that stopped by unexpectedly.
Love your poems and art work.
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LWK
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Msg: 7 | |
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Posted: 11/8/2007 8:24:41 PM | LWK: It's a 7.25. Good job. It needs a little brush up on the verbage, but by and far you nailed it. Little humor. Little seriousness. Little scarry with the pictures... Loose the hat one. It gave me some flashbacks of a bookie I owed some greens too. Tighten up your thoughts too. Think: less is more.
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LWK
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Msg: 11 | |
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Posted: 11/8/2007 8:42:50 PM | RHIEVER7: first, you're not a nerd. being 6' means you can crush most, so that puts you into a different league. OH, i'm rating your profile a 7.80 -- the comb will be rushed right out too -- you need to whip up some crafty language like..."i love to strum out a cord or two according to the harmony of the mood i'm in..." something like that. be more direct with your thoughts. you're throwing yourself out there as if your trying to live life or something -- you're doin' it my friend. remember, your six feet two hundred lbs. -- you can crush mo-fo's bro. toughen up! gamers aren't weak. fickin' nine year old slaughter me at the game places -- until i remember i'm bigger then them and toss 'em around like they're banana peels!!!
Oh, the cap't cruch pic has to go ...or throw some others one to balance it out. glue on a pic of you strumin' away on the six string. ...and even kickin' some cyber ass while gaming -- with some buds so it looks like you've got friends making you normal. chics won't stray if they see you have friends outside the box.
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Posted: 11/8/2007 8:50:16 PM | SKEPTICAL: 9.25 (i'm throw'n an extra point 'cause you live an hour above me -- and the springs is nice -- plus you ride a twin!!! love twins just the italian ones until my back gives out which is soon) fantastic writing! neat (two liners are simple and easy to read with the folks that move their lips while reading). clear. FUNNY. concise. easy to read too boot.
the pic's are great too. i think you're right on track, but remember 99% of the others aren't. but don't gear down; you'll attract the "real" ones looking for what you have to offer.
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Posted: 11/8/2007 9:01:26 PM | GUZ: loosen up!!! i feel your trapped inside your own mind. i bet you really love to laugh with your family and friends -- so do it and have a camera around to snap a few shots. the cat one is great. it shows the realistic side of you. now, with your writing: don't restate what you've already told us in the "interest" area. also, maybe tell us something about your travels. where would you like to travel next? just an idea. example, "....in PR the fog rolled in over the mountains like a blanket covering a small child." i've spent christmas' in PR with my ex. love the place and it's majically. i know you have experienced this with your travels so share some of this. it builds character for us to really understand you with. i think folks what to see us in our "zoo" where living within. we can list our want, but what we really want is for folks to like us for who we are. i'm a writer. i use people to learn new things. i write what i know. let the world beware! -- can't take credit for that. it was a line in basic instinct -- joe eszterhaus -- my mentor and hero in screenwriting -- but it's true, isn't it!!
let us know who you really are.
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LWK
| | Joined: 7/10/2006
Msg: 21 | |
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Posted: 11/8/2007 9:12:10 PM | LOVE the " All that and a bag of quips " -- class, take a note; this will be on the text next week. what can i say. you're a wordsmith!!!! love it, love it, love it. great pics -- love the red. i bet passion runs deep within your veins. you have a great face. it tells a story of wisdom, caress and lionessness (sorry, just love the word i'm trying to into webster's -- jackasses keep tellin' me it's not a REAL word -- whatta they know, huh)...
Another bonus point you've gained here is what I like to call "the break up." AND "NO" the relationship crap (which i'm sure that's why we're all here), but the sentence breaking. you one liners make it easy on the eye to follow your thoughts -- GREAT JOB!
guys... put down the chips and bud and take a note of this one -- the profile is great! great color association on the pics. fantastic word use. just frickin' great.
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Posted: 11/8/2007 9:23:13 PM | let me whip the pepsi runnin' outta my nose -- you're frickin' funny!!!!!!!! love'd it. and cbr rule. i had a '90 cbr 600. it was my favorite bike (i'm covering the duc's eyes as i type this).
keep your profile alive!!!! love the "interest" section. pet rock conventions!!!! you kill me girl! write something. #uck IT. you need to write. find a local comedian and write for them.
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and ok ok ok I'll lose the Greta Garbo bookie pic lmao 
ok thats it im taking those pics out too 